Sugar Mountain ~ a poem

Sugar Mountain
Sugar Mountain | Source

Bill Holland (billybuc), who most of you know here on Hubpages, has offered a writing challenge. I am always up for a challenge so I am responding to his. He has given his writers four images or photos to include in our writing which you will see throughout my response.

He is asking for short story fiction or flash fiction, but for some reason I am in poetry mode right now. So my response is a poem. For some reason this poem came through me when I viewed his images and I had to write it down and share.

So, although this is not exactly what he asked for, this is my creative response to his challenge!

The ancestor's graves
The ancestor's graves | Source
The railway cars.
The railway cars. | Source
The farmland.
The farmland. | Source

Sugar Mountain


Stretching my body up through

the clouds top Sugar Mountain


While the mist crystalizes

like sugar drops around me


Sweetened echos from the past

speak to me as I reach the summit


I have followed in the footsteps

of my ancestors as they once

climbed the mountain


Beginning my journey with a

pilgrimage to their graves


I listened as they whispered

their inspiration to me


"Climb, climb, climb the mountain,"

they repeated. "It is your mountain

to climb. Claim its message."


The old railway cars that now

sit at the base of the mountain


Once creaked and groaned up

the mountainside like a

ribbon threading through

the mountain


Today, lay dormant, their stories

silent and forgotten


So I climb

like those before me


To the summit to pay homage

to the mountain they so

sweetly loved


For the protection it gave to their

farmland below


Today, as I stand straight and tall

the echos of the past speak to me

in strong voices


Ensuring me their legacy of the mountain

with all its wisdom, teachings, and protection.


Suzannah Wolf Walker (c) 2016 all rights reserved

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shanmarie 3 months ago from Texas

It may not be exactly what he asked for, but I like it! It's narrative and has a story-like quality to it that I enjoyed.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thank you! I am so glad you enjoyed it and my different take on the challenge. Hope to read one from you also.


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shanmarie 3 months ago from Texas

I did one. I don't write short stories very often so it was a nice change. I think that was the real challenge to me - to actually write a short story. Hahaha


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Well, I am going over to your site to read it! Good for you that you took the challenge.


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mckbirdbks 3 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Hi suzettenaples. It seems a good while since I have seen a post from you. This piece is packed with metaphor. You portray a gripping picture here.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Yes, it took Bill's challenge to get me moving! The, I didn't really follow his directions but this poem just came through me instead. Who knew? Hope you enjoyed it.


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Ericdierker 3 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

Really good. I like it.


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Jodah 3 months ago from Queensland Australia

This is a wonderful poem and meets the guidelines very well. Good job, Suzanna.


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ChitrangadaSharan 3 months ago from New Delhi, India

Wonderful response to the challenge by billybuc! It is slightly different from what other hubbers have published and I like its uniqueness.

Beautiful, emotional and narrative poem! Thank you!


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billybuc 3 months ago from Olympia, WA

Wonderful entry, Suzette, and I thank you for it. The only reason I didn't ask for poetry is because I forgot to do so, so I'm happy you did this. Well done, and I appreciate you taking part in the challenge.


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Thelma Alberts 3 months ago from Germany

Wonderful poem! You did it will. Thanks for sharing.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thank you Eric, and I am glad you enjoyed it.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Jodah, why thank you and I am glad you enjoyed it. It has been ages since I have written anything.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thanks so much, Chitrangada. I am glad you enjoyed it. It was a pleasure to write.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

I want to thank you, Bill, for giving us this challenge. It is just what I needed to jump start my writing again. I haven't written anything in so long. For some reason a poem came through me when I read the challenge and looked at the pictures. Now, believe it or not, I am writing a short story from my poem. Writing and the inspiration to do so always amazes me. I do love hubpages for that reason, we inspire one another. No, it is not like it was five years ago when I started here, but then nothing ever is. I am glad you enjoyed this and thanks again for getting me writing.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thanks so much Thelma and I am glad you enjoyed reading this.


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vocalcoach 3 months ago from Nashville Tn.

This is such a marvelous response to Bill's challenge. Certainly not an easy task but look at you! You've inspired me to try my hand at writing my first flash-fiction. Thanks my dear friend.

Love,

Audrey


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fpherj48 3 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Bravo Suzette.....I like your little twist on this. Congrats on your originality. Bill must be pleased with the response to his challenge. Best of luck to you and everyone Suzette!


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Faith Reaper 3 months ago from southern USA

Hi Suzette,

So wonderful to see you publishing! I love your response here in this fantastic poem to Bill's challenge. Oh, I believe you met the challenge and then some.

I hope you've been well.

Blessings


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bravewarrior 3 months ago from Central Florida

Awesome poem, Shanmarie. I think only the most creative minds can spin poetry from writing or picture prompts.


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marcoujor 3 months ago from Jeffersonville PA

Dear Suzette,

I just came from Shyron's poetic interpretation of Bill's challenge.

Your poem is completely different - yet equally powerful in the story told.

Absolutely beautiful - great to see you writing!


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Shyron E Shenko 3 months ago

Suzette, I love poetry and one can see

your poem is sweet as a lollypop treat

Tinged with sour lemon drops

Where love of family never stops

*

Beautiful Suzette

Blessings and Hugs


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Nell Rose 3 months ago from England

Hi, love your take on the challenge! nice one Suzette!


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Audrey, thanks so much for your gracious words. I look forward to reading your entry!


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thanks so much fpher! It has been a while since I have written anything and Bill jump started my writing. Thanks for stopping by.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Hi Faith, so good to hear from you! Yes, I finally have published something after a long dry period. LOL! I am so glad you enjoyed reading this.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

It is Suzette, but thank you for you kind words. I enjoyed your entry also.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Maria, Good to hear from you and I am so glad you enjoyed this. I have to read Shyron's now. I enjoyed reading your entry also.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Lovely response, Shyron. I now have to read your response. Thanks so much for taking the time to read this.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thanks, Nell. I enjoyed your entry very much also.


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teaches12345 3 months ago

Your poem has so much depth to it and you made it quite interesting to read. Writing the challenge in poetic form was creative. So much good can come from following the good paths of our ancestry.


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Venkatachari M 3 months ago from Hyderabad, India

Beautiful poem with some good message. You have done it so nicely.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thanks, Dianna, and I am glad you enjoyed reading this. We can learn much wisdom from our ancestors. I know I have.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thanks you Venkatachari and I am glad you enjoyed reading this.


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bravewarrior 3 months ago from Central Florida

My apologies, Suzette. I've read so many entries, I got confused. That's what I get for reading when I'm supposed to be working.


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

That's okay.


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ocfireflies 3 months ago from North Carolina

Suzette,

I love your response, the imagery and cadence all work so well. Kudos on your response to the challenge.

Kim


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thank you, Kim, I am glad you enjoyed it. How are you? I've been thinking about you and have been over to your site a couple time. Good to hear from you and Ibhooe all is well !


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ocfireflies 3 months ago from North Carolina

Thank you for not forgetting me. I would like to say that I am doing great, but many life changes and health issues have made the last year quite challenging. But, I am getting ready for beach getaway and hoping this respite will be restorative. I have thought of you often, and look forward to getting my groove back soon. Many blessings always.

Kim


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suzettenaples 3 months ago from Taos, NM Author

A beach getaway is great therapy! So glad to hear you are feeling well now. The ocean waves are always so soothing to me. I must tell you that I have relocated and I am now living in Taos, NM. I came out here for the weather. As much as I love the ocean, the humidity is not good for me health wise. It is a dry heat out here and much better for me. I no longer swell up (at last) and I am nearby mountains so when it gets too hot I can go up into the mountains to cool down. It is said here that the Taos Mountain calls you here, and I guess the mountain has been calling me for some time. I am very happy here and everything seems to be falling into place here for me. Apparently, the mountain "likes me," that is what everyone here is telling me, so I just go along with the program. This is a very spiritual place with a huge Native American presence and influence here. I am learning new things and this is a very creative and artistic community and I am enjoying that too. If you are ever out west, come visit me.


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ocfireflies 3 months ago from North Carolina

I admire you so much. I, too feel the call of living in such a place as you have described. Maybe some day circumstances will be such that I can live that dream. In the meantime, I am just focusing on getting my bearings, and hope the trip to the beach will provide me with just that. So many blessings and so happy for you.

Kim


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suzettenaples 2 months ago from Taos, NM Author

I wish you the best, Kim and I know you will be energized and recharged by your trip to the beach. I am happy for you that you are getting away for a much needed vacay,


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manatita44 2 months ago from london

Noble effort Suzannah and a poetic one too. I do think that Bill would welcome poems. Nice Hub!


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suzettenaples 2 months ago from Taos, NM Author

Thank you manatita and I am glad you enjoyed my poem. I also enjoyed reading your entry in the challenge.

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