Surely She Should -Poem

Love poem
Love poem


Surely She Should...

Standing, shaking, solemnly
searching for sweet
serendipitous Serenity.
My soul slashing, scratching, seizing,
standing strong -standing still.
Silence sings something sane,
something safe.
Sages speak softly, slowly
spewing soiled salves.
Songbirds singing sexual serenades
swiftly swoosh.

Speak? Swoon...?

Such satisfactory surges
swamp society as I stare subconsciously,
selectively.
Selectively, selective...
smart selection seeming so small.

Suddenly...
stricken, satisfied... secretly swooning.
Shall she sabotage such scared sacrifice.
Surely she should see my staggering soul?
Surely she should see...
me.

-© Robert Hutchinson
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Bowden 5 years ago

You are truly gifted with words!


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R.S. Hutchinson 5 years ago from USA Author

Thank you Ebower.. I must admit that I was inspired to wrote this after reading the dialogue for the "V for Vendetta" script! Thank you for your support and I'm glad you liked it!


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Ebower 5 years ago from Georgia

I love it! I like the over abundance of alliteration. I voted this up and beautiful.


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R.S. Hutchinson 5 years ago from USA Author

Thanks Barry... knowing the actual meaning behind poems always make them more powerful. Nonetheless, I'd rather not know the real meaning until after I've read the piece and discerned my own interpretation (and others).


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R.S. Hutchinson 5 years ago from USA Author

Thanks Wayseeker!


Barry 5 years ago

I liked this. I had to read your blog to understand it but once I read that and then reread this I was stunned. It made sense and was a fun to read.


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wayseeker 5 years ago from Colorado

R.S.,

This poem demonstrates a strong acumen for verbal gymnastics. Given the challenge of starting everything with "s", the cohesiveness of the meaning and some of the wordplay work well. The final stanza plays well in this way.

Parts of it still come off feeling forced, however, though that's no surprise given the constraints. I'm sure I would not do so well myself.

I can see the fun in toying around with the idea, though.

Happy writing,

wayseeker


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R.S. Hutchinson 5 years ago from USA Author

Thanks Blondey :)


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blondey 5 years ago

Interesting poem indeed :)


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R.S. Hutchinson 5 years ago from USA Author

Thank Kim for your support!


kimberlyslyrics 5 years ago

Judy did have a great idea!

I just loved this piece

voted up/awesome

thank you

kimberly


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R.S. Hutchinson 5 years ago from USA Author

Thanks Judy :) Good idea!


Judy 5 years ago

This was great! This should be in a speech therapy class along side one of those Peter picks pickled peppers poems!


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R.S. Hutchinson 5 years ago from USA Author

Thanks Candi :) S was a little easy.. I will try a harder letter in my book!


Candi 5 years ago

Brought to you by the letter 'S.' Interesting and I enjoyed most of the word play and subtext. :)

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