Telling Secrets

This is my first attempt at Prose Poetry, and is something I'd like to include in my stories.  I began with the line, "Who do you tell your secrets to, when you go to sleep - alone" sitting in my thoughts over the winter.  I hope this poem suits my purpose - the story is a murder/mystery.  Please feel free to leave suggestions, reactions, questions, thoughts, or any other type of comment.  Thank you.

Secrets are secret for a reason....
Secrets are secret for a reason....

Keeping Secrets (original title, already taken)

Who do you tell your secrets to, when you go to sleep. Alone. Night after night. Day after day. In a big old house, or out in a stream. There is no one, not one you can trust. Is this the way of a life of dreams? Can you say "So long" with a little cream? Tenderness and kisses. His strong arms - she misses. Roses, beaches, Paris. All are wishes. There are no more seasons, dry eyes that cannot reason. Gold, yellow or rose. Time, no longer knows. This direction or that, who was it that wore that hat? Please, I'm begging you, not today. I've nothing more to say. Leave. Go away. Here I must not stay. Cyanide in the pantry. Sunshine through the trees. No more foolishness, bringing me to my knees. You claim life's to blame. Me? No more living - deep in sheltered shame. Life is mine. Secrets and all. At night I sleep. When I wake, I stand tall. Nobody can see, nobody can know. Who do you tell your secrets to, when you go to sleep. Alone.

© 2011 Rafini

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ahorseback 3 years ago

Yes , my friend , Thats why some men are here ! And so we wait !.....hehe...


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Rafini 3 years ago from Somewhere I can't get away from Author

Thank you ahorseback (Ed)!

I've told so much already...can ya hang on a bit more? :-)


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ahorseback 3 years ago

Awesome my dear ! Tell them to me , over coffee , laugh , reminsce , cry , but never suffer alone ! Grab a hubber and hang on tight ! You are awesome and this is toooo !..........Ed


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Rafini 5 years ago from Somewhere I can't get away from Author

Thanks Highvoltagewriter! (Stimulating...I like that!)


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Highvoltagewriter 5 years ago from Savannah GA.

Stimulating...fantastic, what else can I say?


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Rafini 5 years ago from Somewhere I can't get away from Author

Thanks mtsi! If I have any more secrets, I can try to tell them.... lol


mtsi1098 5 years ago

I liked the continuity in this and you can tell me your secrets if you like :)


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Rafini 5 years ago from Somewhere I can't get away from Author

Thanks so much SEM!


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SEM Pro 5 years ago from North America

Ah Rafini, you hit the nail on the head! Flowing from the depths of one's emotions, poetry touches others who have felt the same, or to anyone open to hearing timeless pros on the human condition... Great job!


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Rafini 5 years ago from Somewhere I can't get away from Author

Thank you Genna! You're so kind! ^_^


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Genna East 5 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

Beautiful prose; excellent timing and words that would make any poet proud. Well done!


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Rafini 5 years ago from Somewhere I can't get away from Author

Sounds about right. Thanks, Lynda!


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lmmartin 5 years ago from Alberta and Florida

This sounds so sorrowful, full of angst and regrets. And above all, loneliness. Nicely worded though. Lynda

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