That Apartment

An argument,

a brief struggle,

torn leather, torn lace,

wounds to the face,

tempers brew, emotions grew,

black and blue,

the muffled cries,

leaning forward

until their eyes

were less then an inch apart,

then over again,

they’ll start,

each with a short fuse,

afraid to refuse,

the noise loud,

and in that apartment

two was a crowd.

© 2015 Frank Atanacio

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Ericdierker 20 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

Yikes! What a horrible place to be. If someone doubts that there is hell on earth -- well they should read this. Excellently done.


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annart 20 months ago from SW England

I wonder how often that goes on every day all around the world.

Punchy rhythm! Great!

Ann


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

Thank you Annart and Eric for stopping by to that apartment...:) bless you both


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billybuc 20 months ago from Olympia, WA

I love the pace of this poem...fast and furious, just like living there. Very good work, Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Billybuc :)


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always exploring 20 months ago from Southern Illinois

Wow! I bet the people in the adjacent apartment has to wear earplugs. Awesome Frank..


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

LOL thanks always.. for reading my apartment


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Ariel-Cal 20 months ago from Bridgeport, CT

What a terrible life if that is the "norm"..nice job frank


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia

Domestic violence is actually on the increase here in Australia which is a sad statistic Frank. This poem is short and sweet but describes such a situation very well. Voted up.


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much A-C and Jodah for chiming in


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Diana Lee 20 months ago from Potter County, Pa.

It sounds like a real ruckus. I loved it. Voted up.


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Sara Sarwar Riaz 20 months ago from Michigan, USA

Wonderfully put together. Your ideas are very unique.


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cam8510 20 months ago from Columbus, Georgia until the end of November 2016.

I lived next to them in Albuquerque. Paper thin walls. I knew everything about them, mostly stuff I didn't want to know. Thanks Frank. Great work on a fast paced poem.


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Diana Lee, Sara for visiting that apartment and cam8510 LOL thanks for the out loud laugh :) Frank


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Faith Reaper 20 months ago from southern USA

Wow, Frank, I thought this was going down another avenue with the leather and lace : ) ... but alas, no fun there for sure! Sad reality how we tend to hurt each other with words and then even more so with violence against each other. I wonder if many do not even know what love looks like? Real love that is?

Up +++ tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing

Great writing and in-your-face action-packed pace too.

Bless you


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clivewilliams 20 months ago from Nibiru

nice, maybe they need a walk in the park and get out of that warsome space.


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

Faith.. who let the dawgs out? LOL I agree all kidding aside... thanks for commenting dear one.. and Clive maybe they do need a walk on the mild..side :)


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The Examiner-1 20 months ago

They sound like a violent couple, or roommates, in a small apartment. I would not want to live there or near them. I voted up, and Tweeted.

Kevin


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MsDora 20 months ago from The Caribbean

So easy for the memory of those fights to become synonymous with the memory of life in that apartment. You captured the mood, the attitude and actions very well.


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you for reading that apartment :) Ms Dora bless you


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks Examiner 1 for checking out the fight :)


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wingedcentaur 20 months ago from That Great Primordial Smash UP of This and That Which Gave Rise To All Beings and All Things!

Voted 'up' and 'interesting,' Frank.

As I said before, you are good at finding the story in the space in-between. As MsDora has commented, it is so easy to synonymize the arguing couple with "That Apartment."

Take it easy.


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much winged for stopping by that apartment :)


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FlourishAnyway 20 months ago from USA

Wounds to the face, two was a crowd ... You can sure paint a vivid picture. Frank. This was superb. Voted way up and more and sharing


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

Flourish always good to see you :)


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Genna East 20 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

I can hear them, as well as see them in “that apartment,” Frank. The tempo of the words melds with the fighting. Well done.


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Genna East good to see you and bless you


Smilealot 20 months ago

As short as the frayed tempers it is portraying, which makes it work really well. Great write Frank:-))


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Smilealot.. Hope you had a good Passover


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AudreyHowitt 20 months ago from California

It sounds like 2 was a crowd here--love the leather and lace reference!!


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jhamann 20 months ago from Reno NV

I remember living downtown and hearing couple arguing about every night. You were able to recreate these images. Jamie


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Audrey and Jhamann for visiting that apartment


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Dana Tate 16 months ago from LOS ANGELES

I had this best friend since middle school, and in our early twenties we tried to share an apartment together. We were young and free and full of ourselves but unfortunately her ways were different from mine. She was a wild person who partied all the time and had all kinds of people over. Me, I'm more of a quiet introvert. It was inevitable that we would come to a huge argument, which made me leave the apartment. We did not speak again until twenty years later.


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

that's a sad story Dana.. :(


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Dana Tate 16 months ago from LOS ANGELES

I know. The good news is we are back friends and closer than ever, but it took a long time.


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word55 16 months ago from Chicago

Cool poem Frank and quite creative. It's funny, arguing drains so much energy and nothing is accomplished from it. That's why we are to discuss matters in order to come to reasonable conclusions. Good idea...


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

Dana all those years wasted.. glad you became best friends again... and word55 thanks for dropping by

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