Under The Brooklyn Bridge

It was darkness that filled the air,

As silence fell between

The investigating pair,

Murder and darkness was a perfect fit,

The silence settled

Until the lead detective broke it,

As the body washed up

Under the BrooklynBridge,

On the left side of the ridge,

Beneath a broken light,

The water controlled the body,

Without putting up a fight,

No eyes in the sockets,

Murder like that was hell,

And as far as the detectives could tell,

Her hands and feet were missing as well,

The woman was nude,

And the water stream was rude,

Exposing every part of her body,

But thankful for the darkness,

It concealed all the stares,

The whispers and the fears,

As her spirit shot toward the sky,

Casting a shadow over the crime scene,

And knowing it was a dreary place to die.

© 2013 Frank Atanacio

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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

A bleak and difficult day, with an investigation that could lead nowhere, given the state of the body, yet someone morned the vicim, someone else hid the truth. Good one Frank!

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks X-man for stopping by :)

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Valleypoet 4 years ago

A grim discovery.... it must be very upsetting for someone to make a discovery of this nature...the detectives, I guess,have unfortunately seen it all before...another brilliant descriptive piece...thanks Frank:-))

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks Valleypoet for your comment and your compliment bless you bro :)

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acaetnna 4 years ago from Guildford

Oh good grief!!! Brilliantly written though as always!!

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for reading my Brooklyn Bridge :)

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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

Frank, are you a detective by profession cause you relate your incidents so well that they give creeps...lol

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

im sorry to have given you the creeps Ruch..LOL thanks for stopping by...

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Mhatter99 4 years ago from San Francisco

Thank you for this. I think you did a reak good job setting the scene.

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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

Very creepy - no eyes!!! I would hate to run across such. When my mother was very young, she and her brother were walking along the shoreline of Lake Eerie, and they came upon a dead male body. Talk about eerie! She remembers the dead person having red hair.

Now, I am sure to have lovely dreams.

Voted up +++ and sharing

God bless. In His Love, Faith Reaper

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Mhatter and Faith bless you both :)

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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Terribly dark, but this gives adrenaline rush.

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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up. Fantastic and tragic. Know the Brooklyn Bridge well and beneath it are dark and dismal places. Loved this.

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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

An excellent write, you expertly set the scene. gave me the shivers.

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Vin Gypsy and Rosemay50 for visiting my bridge :)

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tobusiness 4 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Frank, I'll never think of Brooklyn Bridge in quite the same way again. :). You still manages to grab us and take us along. Willing or not, after the first line, we are committed to the very end.


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Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

Very scary for us weak of heart. lol It takes brave people to become investigators and law enforcement, indeed. All the grisly scenes they must see. I wonder if their minds ever empty of these?

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much tobusiness and Jackie for visiting my Brooklyn Bridge

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sweetie2 4 years ago from Delhi

Frank thank for the new year wishes...happy new year to you too.

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Anytime Sweetie2

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wowsite1234 3 years ago from Moncks Corner, SC

Great Poem!

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Phyllis Doyle 3 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

You put a lot of tense mystery into a short poem, Frank. Very well done! Easy to read and explicit detail, and the scene is very vivid. Voted Up

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torrilynn 3 years ago

Hi Frank,

thanks for this really great hub

and poem that showcases off soo much pain

and mystery. thank again. Voted up.

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wayne barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

Poetically dark and mysterious. Very good work.

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Senoritaa 3 years ago

Oh what a brutal death! And stuff like this happens for real. That's what is sad. Brilliant write Frank, as usual.

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lovedoctor926 3 years ago

Good work as always! votes up!

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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Marlene, Senorittaa, Wayne, Torrilyn, Our Ms Brooks, wowsite, phyllis.. thank you for visiting my Brooklyn Bridge :)

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JanieceTobey 2 years ago

Interesting. Darkness and silence were what were felt by the others nearby. But I wonder what she herself noticed as she left her body, as Soul. Did she see a light? Or hear a sound? As she returned to heaven... Or was it all darkness and silence for her as well. Thanks for the very interesting poem!

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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Janice for visiting the brooklyn bridgr

Bagas 2 years ago

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