The Data Will Flow

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Confrontations of the mind,
lobes left and right,
transmission of synapses,
between old friends,
now bitter rivals,
of electrical impulse,
classic struggle,
unknown results


Computer mixed with tissue,
intangible meets the real,
currents of feeling,
currents of feelings,
waves of ideas,
chaotic and wild


Pain receptors
Receive input
from sensors,
sensing trouble brewing,
something’s amiss,
someone is missing,
someone afar,
beyond the grave


Spiritual awakening,
perhaps only mental,
emotional even,
numbers are unbiased,
following paths,
designed by science,
or by God


Coincidence?
Creative design?


Interpret within,
fluttering mind,
flickering thoughts,
fading beliefs,
fantasies of heart,
fallacy of soul


Inputs create outputs,
reactions triggered,
pull the trigger,
think twice,
the conflict continues


conscience versus conscious,
subconscious reacts


REM,
sleep,
fade,
dream,
forget,
erase,
continue


till eternity’s end.


© copyright Ben D.A 2011




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Cardisa 5 years ago from Jamaica

I feel exactly like this sometimes Ben, no different from a data processor. My fiance often refers to me as computer brain...lol This however reminds me of something more serious, like "The Matrix". Where you have to fight to survive.


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

Well, it's my pleasure. Be assured that no matter how much I liked you as a person, if you didn't really merit it as a writer, I couldn't recommend your writing in good conscience. You deserve good attention and you get a lot of it just because it shines of its own excellence. Just be glad and enjoy doing it.

Keep letting the muse flow freely and try to not worry about the effects. They will come because of real merit. If you ever stop doing what really attracts the admiration and start thinking too much about getting it, the real quality could be diluted. If talents are just OK or mediocre, then maybe the people have to beat the bushes for attention, but real attention to your real talent is a natural formula. Also - don't be alarmed if it fluctuates sometimes. That is a natural part of all real things. They have their own rhythms. But they always center where they really are. Just keep doing what you do well and believe it in yourself, knowing it is real and it is good. Then the center of it will always be secure and intact. If one ever gets caught up in crowd-pleasing, the first thing, the crowd isn't pleased - and then the real stuff is diluted and the person is thrown off-balance.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thank you very much Nellie!

Your support has been so wonderful

I am hearing about you recommending me to others, and that is so kind of you

:]


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

If nothing else, I'm honest. You deserve honesty. You do have a fantastic ability to express feelings - and thoughts. And many folks have exquisite feelings and thoughts but their words don't always do them justice. Yours seem to, and consistently.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Nellie - wow thanks for that, thats one hell of a compliment.

The things I write always have deeper meaning, subtle or obvious. The things of the mind vs. the heart are always interesting.

I'm not sure what I have figured out that others don't, maybe I just was granted the ability to express feeling through words, regardless of the style or rhyme.

I appreciate that comment thank you


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

Multiple images and thoughts here but I sense a thread weaving it all together, if a little ravelly or frayed at times. Somehow that fits its theme. It's not supposed to be clear-cut and concise. That is not what it's talking about.

I especially like:

conscience versus conscious,?subconscious reacts

I wonder how much you thought into that? It fairly vibrates with subtle meaning.

I have to ask - what does rhyming or not rhyming have to do with it? I realize you are experimenting - or - are you? Sometimes I think you have more figured out than the majority of us might.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Nikki, pretty much haha, thanks :]

Sligo - I really appreciate the positive feedback on this, and your support. Thank you


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

"The cradle will fall" and "The data will flow" reflect each other in the form of article noun future tense verb.

"Will" is so interconnected with the process of the mind which is the subject of your free verse. This is wonderful word play and thematic. I think that there is no place for rhyme in this poem. You express yourself eloquently and melodically without rhyme. Keep experimenting with form and blank verse. You are on a creative journey which has no destination. Thank you for the wealth of your words.


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

sounds like a bunch of random thoughts just came at once to form a work of art.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

tnder - thanks, thats great!! :] Yeah I usually rhyme too, I just love experimenting


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tnderhrt23 5 years ago

Ben, I am a Rymer-imer by nature...it is a synaptic snap or glitch in my brain...I don't usually get into poems without it, but I really dig this poem! There is just so much truth in your creation here...and your picture fits so well for me! This poem just nails how my brain strains and works! Brilliant piece!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Randy - interesting dream, and yes, this one leaves the mind wandering

Mentalist - I actually had you in mind when I posted this. I was waiting for your comment ;] THANKS lol


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Mentalist acer 5 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

An Etherialy Viral Synaptic Event Ben,Nice Work.;)


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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

This one reminds me of a strange but simple reoccurring nightmare I used to have as a child. It was about a struggle to keep "it" all together to the sound of marching music but there was a force trying to twist it all up so I couldn't put my guard down. Keeping it all copacetic while knowing it was a game. A lot to think about here.


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

oh, very much so.

Today has been a rough day. Hmm is all I can do


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Poohgranma 5 years ago from On the edge

things that make you go hmmm


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

lol...i mean, this inspires many images. its open to some major interpretation


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SeenButNotHeard 5 years ago from Michigan

I like it better with the italics :) Still can't get that image out of my head though lol


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

haha thanks bbnix. this ones a bit odd. :P


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bbnix 5 years ago from Southern California

Nice. Experimentation is a blast. I like the whole chaos and the mind and all the dynamic that goes with it, some realized, some felt, some even pointed out by others - all fascinating...

Good job!


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

thanks willstarr preciate that!


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WillStarr 5 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

Good job.

I really like this one.

Up and awesome!


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Elizabeth99 5 years ago from Milwaukee, WI

Well you did a good job:)


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BenWritings 5 years ago from Save me from, Tennessee Author

Thanks Elizabeth, I decided to toss out rhyming for this one lol


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Elizabeth99 5 years ago from Milwaukee, WI

This one reminds me of a friend of mine, I think he would really like this. I like the concept, very well written not giving away to much, but still enough :)

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