The Day My Heart Stopped Beating...

A slow beat

That pounded in my chest

I could hear it strong

It penetrated

My skin

My hands

My veins

It was the heartbeat that was waiting for more

Needing love

Longing for the words

To make it glow

My heart waited in the shadows

For that love to come

That beat slowly pounded every day

Patiently waiting

The day came when my heartbeat found that love

The words

The joy

The love

Radiating light everwhere

In all directions

The heartbeat pounded louder in my chest

It beat to such heights

It thought it could fly

Then one day

My heartbeat found something it didn't want to find

The door slammed open

There was a chill wind in the air

The words came at my heartbeat

Disgust and hate

Something this poor heart never heard before

Never understood

My heart was pierced with a sword

Shaking violently

It became frightened

She tried hiding

But the words came stronger

More violent

More hateful

The heart grew tired

She slowed down

Stopped beating

She couldn't take it anymore

My heart died

There was no more beating

No life

She was pounded to death

My heart beat no more

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rahul0324 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

Sad! Pain all over it... the one thing you hope for.. long for.. you get it... overjoyed and then you are stabbed by it... killed by it... your soul breaks into fragments.. it dies... rendering you morose.. lifeless!!

Sad!

Could feel the pain..


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ananceleste 4 years ago from California

Magnificent! Simply and foremost grieving for that broken heart. Bellisimo!Voted up!!


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cleaner3 4 years ago from Pueblo, Colorado

Happiness and heart break, love and despair. nice expression Caroline. the vines of love they twist to tight and choke off our feelings. great hub sweets.

Michael


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billybuc 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

A beautifully written poem, so powerful in so few words. You are an excellent writer and will only get better.


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Perspycacious 4 years ago from Today's America and The World Beyond

Dark, but that's what it feels like when the heart breaks.


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Curiad 4 years ago from Lake Charles, LA.

The rise and fall described in strong passionate words.


stessily 4 years ago

caroline, Your poem captures well the two extremes for a heart to stop beating: that love-at-first-sight stopping of the heart and then the devastating effects of love gone wrong. Up + UABI

Kind regards, Stessily


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

Beautiful Caroline. In a sense the heart does die, only we are still breathing..Cheers


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Caroline wow.. just beautiful

Debbie


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BlossomSB 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

That was so beautiful, thank you for sharing it.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and awesome. This one comes at you with full force. It's always freezing cold when love dies. Just wonderful.


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

uh uh, what a sad fate caroline...you painted the words poignantly...


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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven Author

@ Hi Rahul thank you for the comment. I am glad that you stopped by!

@ Hi Ananceleste thank you for the kind words my friend!

@ Hi Michael I love that line you left "the vines of love they twist to tight and choke off our feelings" the words of a true poet. :)

@ Hi Billy your kind words make me blush. I am humbled by your comment. :)

@ Hi Perspy thank you for stopping by and reading. Yes that is what it feels like. :)

@ Hi Curiad thank you very much for stopping by!

@ Hi Stessily thank you so much for your comment dear lady. :)

@ Hi Ruby so true. It feels like we lose breath too sometimes. Thank you.

@ Hi Debbie thank you for reading and commenting! :)

@ Hi Blossom thank you very much for your dear comment. :)

@ Hi Gypsy thank you very much for your constant support. :)

@ Hi Raciniwa thank you for your lovely comment.


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Robwrite 4 years ago from Bay Ridge Brooklyn NY

Hi Caroline; Powerful and emotional. Excellent imagery.

Well done,

Rob


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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven Author

Thank you Robwrite for your lovely comment. Good to see you!


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aim4strz 4 years ago from West Michigan

Caroline, this poem tears at my heart. And "pulled in two" as well! I pray that you are writing from past experiences and not current heartbreak:( Reading these just makes me wish I could just give you a big hug! You are a blessing!! -Daniel


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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven Author

Thank you for the kind words Daniel. They mean a lot to me. Hearing comments like that make it worthwhile to write about this. :)

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