The Delayed Arrival

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So much noise,

so much chatter,

but you really couldn’t hear a sound,

and that much didn’t matter,

the body stayed on the ground,

stranded there by the delayed arrival

of the ambulance,

who was coming from another call

on the other side of town,

it was a cool week day,

the start of the Fall,

Summer was almost happy to leave,

it would stay,

if it had any sense at all,

a hysterical mother crying

at the dead’s boy’s feet,

sorrow stuck to her,

like a hot August heat,

the crowd there,

were thinking that the police didn’t care,

because it was just another black kid

out in the street,

covered up with a transparent plastic sheet,

a pity, turmoil in the city,

as out of towners drove by,

with nothing more than casual curiosity,

and not even wondering why,

it wasn’t their neighborhood,

as racial epithets

were stacked like firewood.,

and the day was begging to fade,

while the medical team was still delayed.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Frank, this is an amazing poem you've out done yourself with this one.

Voted up and awesome, Joyce your friend.


KatrineDalMonte 4 years ago

Frank, this is so good and sad at the same time. Love the way you paint the scene with your words. There is also so much truth in your writing, sadly.


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xstatic 4 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

Great poem, great commentary as well! You are on the street as you read it. You build a great atmosphere in a few lines about a sad event. Up, all but funny! & Shared.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Joyce, my friend always good to see you bless you.. and Kat what a nice comment but you're still all that..LOL thanks for reading my delayed arrival :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Mr. X.. thank you so much for visiting my delayed arrival and your wonderful comment too Frank


Phoebe Pike 4 years ago

Another amazing piece Frank. You should compile these into a book. I would definitely buy your work.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Phoebe you're so sweet thank you


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Vinaya Ghimire 4 years ago from Nepal

Dear Frank, I cannot find words to appreciate your works. You always leave me astounded with your brilliance.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

VG yeah right.. a man as talented as you come up with a good comment man! LOL kidding thanks as always


Poetic Fool 4 years ago

Frank, what an awesome piece. Really, really great! You've captured the essence of class distinction, the haves and have nots. And what awesome lines these are:

as out of towners drove by,

with nothing more than casual curiosity,

and not even wondering why,

it wasn’t their neighborhood,

as racial epithets

were stacked like firewood.

You've eloquently described the apathy and the distance. After all, it's just another black kid and it's not their neighborhood! There's no hurry. This is a thought-provoking write, Frank. Thanks for sharing it.


Vincent Moore 4 years ago

This is a very powerful piece Frank, I am blown away by how you place the seasons with the event, it was a very sad day indeed, yet as you scribed unnoticed by rippled faces passing by. Poetic Foll summed it up very well.

I've seen it time and time again in my life, to many victims are discriminated by others as subhumans and a second notice is not taken. Powerful, very powerful, voted up and all buttons pressed except Funny. We will leave that to the politicians. Peace and blessings to you.


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DFiduccia 4 years ago from Las Vegas

Frank,

I’m not a big fan of rhyming poetry because most of it seems so contrived for the purpose of the rhyme, but your poems flow with a natural feel that is not contrived, thus holding my interest and making me a fan.

Voted up.

DF


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PegCole17 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

Beautifully sad and true. A mother's

"sorrow stuck to her,

like a hot August heat"

Captures the essence of life on the street.


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InCourage 4 years ago from North Carolina

Frank, I agree with DF... not usually a fan of rhyme but it really works for you here. Very good turn of words in places... love the description... love the mood... it does what you set out to do and that's just alright.


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ytsenoh 4 years ago from Louisiana, Idaho, Kauai, Nebraska, South Dakota, Missouri

Frank, very good read. My favorite lines include "as racial epithets were stacked like firewood." Your language evokes the right presentation of visuals. The pain, the sadness, the disarray, you captured what you wanted to present your readers. Thumbs up.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Frank this is amazing. You have that ability to place your readers there right in the middle of it. This will strike hard in the hearts of any racist.

Awesome work my friend


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Your rhyming poem is a fine companion to your prose work Frank. It brought up memories of a young teenaged youth shot mortally during a drive-by; he tried to lift himself off the ground several times as the life force slowly ebbed away. He was an African- Amer and no one comforted him in those final minutes, they were just standing around with no compassion waiting for the EMTs.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much Poetic Fool Bless you

And thank you too Vincent Moore.. wonderful comment..


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Dfiduccia I thank you for saying just that bless you man :)

and Pegcole as always good to see you stopping by


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you incourage I feel encouraged LOL and thank you so much for visiting my Delayed Arrival


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

ytsenoh thank you for visiting my delayed arrival... bless you for the comment


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much Rosemay and the gang... and Alastar I know what you mean and I too have witnessed such a scene.. bless you man..peace not only in the middle east..


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shimmering Dawn 4 years ago

Frank, There you are back at it again.. this is so heart wrenching! Amazing as always. Have a blessed day!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Shim-Dawn :)


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epigramman 4 years ago

..well as you know Frank - I so do love your writing - we have very similar styles - and tell such great stories in so few but well chosen words - great minds truly do think alike - please if you would - check out my buddy Maria - who goes by the name of Scrittobene - at the Hub - thanks for that kind sir.

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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for stopping by Epi and I will check her out now thanks :)


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Hyphenbird 4 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Frank, you are such a good writer. Your word choices seem carefully chosen and I like that quality. This sad scene you wrote happens all over the country, probably every day. You made a tragedy beautiful in its painful reality.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

H thank you soooo much bless you


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

Oh, this is awesome, Frank. "And sorrow stuck to her like a hot August heat..." Palpable. Wonderful poetry. Voted awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

aaww thank you so much Cyndi10 bless you


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Always enjoy what you write. This piece is so sad, but a true reality of so many places.

Up and awesome!


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Storytellersrus 4 years ago from Stepping past clutter

Life on the street. Repeat? Repeat. Life on the street. How terribly terribly sad.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for stopping by Susan and Storyteller as always good to see you bless you guys :)


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Gypsy48 4 years ago

Another awesome poem, awesome writing. Your words paint such a descriptive picture of a too often sad scene.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Gypsy48


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Frank--another great piece--it just flows so naturally--and you are so able to create an atmosphere and an evocative emotional context--a hallmark for you!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Audrey bless you


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rahul0324 4 years ago from Gurgaon, India

I am in awe of your skill and art my friend! Such a beautiful picture you paint with your words

Amazing! Mesmerizing! Flawless


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for stopping by again Rahul :)


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Frank

"the crowd there,

were thinking that the police didn’t care,

because it was just another black kid

out in the street,

covered up with a transparent plastic sheet"

You have done a wonderful job in portraying a sad reality.

Take care :)

Voted up and away.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks sueswan


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

gosh...this is sad yet beautiful poem, Frank!

many votes indeed!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Ruchira for stopping by bless you


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Express10 4 years ago from East Coast

You have an excellent ability to make the reader immediately visualize the scene. I enjoyed reading this. You have done a very good job.


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

I can't believe I missed this one. What the h**# is wrong with me Frank:) This is great poetry, a sad story though. The streets are not no joke, never will be. Frank, another gem on hand my friend. Hope you enjoy your weekend.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much the lyric writer :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

and thank you too Express10 for stoppin by my page..bless you


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

another sad plight, and you are a master story teller Frank...as if i am there watching as the scene unfolds......


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Raci :)


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Sad write Frank--but so well done!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Audrey :)


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Ericdierker 14 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

Wow I needed a "Frank" fix, this was great!


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Frank Atanacio 14 months ago from Shelton Author

thanks Eric :)

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