The Door to Nowhere | Answer to billybuc's Writing Challenge

Where does the door go?
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The Door to Nowhere

Was it really only yesterday? Coralee thought hard, and could not remember. It was yesterday, or the yesterday before that, or some other yesterday; so many yesterdays to consider.

“Where am I?” she wondered. “I came through a door; a door to somewhere, or a door from somewhere. I can’t remember!” She sat down on the balcony she’d not noticed before, and had a good cry, eventually falling asleep.

Or was she asleep? It was all so confusing. She did not know where she was, who she was, or even why she was. Wracking her memory for any clues, Coralee became all the more frustrated and frightened.

The sounds assaulted her ears; rushing, booming, pounding sounds that would not stop. She tried covering, even plugging her ears, and that only made the noise worse. Was she going crazy?

Why did no one hear her screams and cries? Why did no one come to her aid? She broke down and cried again. She did not know what to do, and she was truly terrified.

Then, in the distance, she saw someone approaching. They were calling out to her, asking if she were there. “I’m here! Right here!” She answered, but it seemed they walked on by. Then one of them suddenly said, “Did you hear that? It sounded like a woman crying or moaning!”

Coralee was elated! Finally, someone was going to help her. She rushed over to them, and heard one say, “Oh, wow! Did you feel that?” And Coralee fell down; fell all the way down, but she was surprised that she did not get hurt. Her fall was broken by soft grass.

And then, she had the answer. In front of her she read the words on a stone: “Coralee Johansen, 1920 -2013.” She did not remember. She did not know what happened. All she remembered was going through that mysterious door.

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Joy56 22 months ago

Great enjoyed hat


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jhamann 22 months ago from Reno NV

What a fund ghost story. I felt a little shiver when she found the stone. Great read. Jamie


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ArtDiva 22 months ago from Yountville, CA

Wow! This was a trip through a door that took me off guard. Good response to the challenge from my read.


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The Examiner-1 22 months ago

Wow, DzyMsLizzy That sounds like it is from the future! I loved it. I voted up, shared and pinned it.

Kevin


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billybuc 22 months ago from Olympia, WA

A nice spooky twist to this challenge. Well done, Lizzy. I loved it, and I thank you so much for taking part in the challenge. I'll have another one for you in a couple weeks.


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DzyMsLizzy 22 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

@ Joy56--Thank you so very much; I’m glad you liked this story!

@ jhamann--Hee hee… I do love ghost stories, so I thought I’d try one myself. Thanks for the nice comment; happy you enjoyed it!

@ ArtDiva--Thank you so much! I’m delighted you liked my challenge response.

@TheExaminer-1--LOL, well, it could be the future, it could be the past; only the ghosts know for sure! ;-) Thanks so very much for your kind comment as well as the share and pin!

@ billybuc--Thank you, Bill! I’m glad you liked it so well; that means a lot, coming from a writer of your caliber!


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FictionFish 22 months ago from Mobile Al

Liked the story. There are so many places that the door to nowhere can take us.


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DzyMsLizzy 22 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

Hello, FictionFish,

Thanks so much! I'm pleased you enjoyed my efforts. Indeed, one never knows where a door may lead...


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Jodah 22 months ago from Queensland Australia

Wow Lizzy, I never saw that ending coming. I love surprise endings and ghost stories so this was a winner. When you told me you went down a similar path to mine I was expecting something else, you tricked me, but I liked it. Well done. Voted up.


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bravewarrior 22 months ago from Central Florida

Wow! This story really packs a punch, Lizzy!


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annart 22 months ago from SW England

Nice one! The anguished ghost! I love it.

Ann


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DzyMsLizzy 22 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

@ Jodah--Hee hee. Glad you enjoyed my little twist of the tale (or did I twist your tail?). Thanks so much for the vote!

@ bravewarrior--Thanks--I wrote as I usually do, with something just suddenly coming to me. Maybe I was channeling Coralee herself, eh? ;-)

@ annart--Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed this bit of flash fiction; it's a totally new genre for me.


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Venkatachari M 22 months ago from Hyderabad, India

Wow! It's great!!! You have done it so well, a beautiful twist. Enjoyed it so much. Voted up and awesome.


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DzyMsLizzy 22 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

Hello, Venkatachari M,

Thanks very much! I'm delighted that you so enjoyed this short story. Thanks as well for the votes!

Cheers!


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Francis Carter 22 months ago from Ireland

This is a delight and so strange how we both went with the same these and idea!


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MsDora 22 months ago from The Caribbean

In the end, I'm as surprised as Coralee Johansen must have been. Good short story!


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DzyMsLizzy 22 months ago from Oakley, CA Author

@ Francis Carter--LOL Perhaps the "GMTA" (Great Minds Think Alike) slogan applies? ;) And I am delighted that you were delighted. Thank you so much!

@ MsDora--Thanks very much! I'm most pleased that you enjoyed this attempt. Short story writing/flash fiction is a new genre for me, so I'm pleasantly surprised that this one is getting such great feedback.

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