The Door to Nowhere - a poem (billybuc's challenge)

The Door to Nowhere
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The Challenge

Bill supplied the picture, a background if needed and issued the following challenge:

"Your prompt is a visual one. The picture above is the Door to Nowhere. Yes, you may use the picture with your essay/story. Also, as part of your prompt, you have to begin your challenge with the following sentence:

Was it really only yesterday?

The rules are….there are no other rules than the two I already mentioned. You can write poetry…you can write a short story….you can write free-flow verse…..you can write whatever you feel like writing, but you have to use the picture I have provided, and you must begin with the sentence I provided."

My Response

I really embrace the writing challenges issued by other Hubbers. I find it a great way to be inspired and challenge my ability as a writer. For most of the recent challenges I have written short fiction stories in response. Although I have been quite proud of my attempts I am still not as accomplished at that genre/niche is many other writers here. There have been some amazing short stories written in response to this challenge by Bill, and I know Hub Pages is not a competition, but although I feel I could have done a satisfactory job with some flash fiction I don't feel it would have been up to the high standard set already with this challenge. Therefore I decided to fall back on what I know best and am most comfortable with..poetry. I hope you enjoy my poem "The Door to Nowhere."

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The Door to Nowhere - a poem

by John Hansen 2015

Was it really only yesterday -

That you looked at me with tear filled eyes,

And said your love had died?


Was it really only yesterday -

That you packed all your belongings,

Ignoring my futile protests?


Was it really only yesterday -

That all our dreams were shattered,

As you struggled with your bags?


Was it really only yesterday -

That you said you'd found another love,

And I was left all alone?


Was it really only yesterday -

That you were too embarrassed to be seen,

Deciding to use the fire escape?


Was it really only yesterday -

That you walked out that door -

The door to nowhere?

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© 2015 John Hansen

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Availiasvision 20 months ago from California

John, I love the use of repetition of the line that Billybuc challenged us with. You tell a mini story in your poem. There is the emotion of remorse and lost love and there is the telling of a story. You accomplished a lot in only a couple of lines. I like how you did something a little outside of your normal challenge routine.

I'm thinking of trying my hand at poetry. Any tips?


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for the great comment Jen. Wonderful to hear that you are going to try writing some poetry. Tips.. write from the heart. Subjects that you are passionate about , cause you pain or total exhilaration make great poems. they can rhyme, but don't have to, and there is much more "poetic" licence than with short stories or novels. Unleash your poet's pen and let's see what happens. I'll be excited to read it.


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Frank Atanacio 20 months ago from Shelton

Jodah, you really do these challenges so well..


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Frank, I think the challenges have brought out some of my best writing.


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annart 20 months ago from SW England

The shock and despair come through that poem with a bang. Great response, John! I too liked the repetition of the first line.

Ann


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Ann, I'm glad I achieved the effect I wanted. Your comment is much appreciated and it was a good first line to work with.


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Faith Reaper 20 months ago from southern USA

Poignant response to Bill's challenge. I am thrilled you have written a poem in response, for I truly love your poetry, but all you write is excellent.

You words paint the picture so vividly and dramatically before our eyes.

Up ++++ tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing

Well done as always!

Blessings


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Your comments are always so generous and encouraging Faith. I have felt a need to return more to my poetry roots lately, hence this response. So glad I still managed to convey a story through my words. Thanks for the vote up, tweet, pin, G+ and share.


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bravewarrior 20 months ago from Central Florida

Great poem, John. It'll be interesting to see how other hubbers interpret Bill's challenge.

You're a wonderful poet my friend!


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ocfireflies 20 months ago from North Carolina

John,

Lovely response to Bill's challenge. You are so gifted. I, too am hoping to take this challenge on. Though, I must say it is hard to follow after reading your work. A definite share and thumbs up, up, up...

Blessings,

Kim


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Shauna, you are too kind. There have been some unbelievable stories written in response to this challenge already. I haven't read any other poems yet though.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Kim, what can I say. you are so sweet. Don't let my poem put you off. I know you will do a wonderful job with whatever you come up with. I can't wait to read it. Thanks for the share and thumbs up too.


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Ericdierker 20 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

Sorry but I am too sad and empty to write a reasonable comment. I reckon that means you did a real fine job.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Sorry Eric. But thanks.


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LadyFiddler 20 months ago from Somewhere in the West

Nice Poem Jodah

Good morning i hope all is well with you!


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Good morning to you LadyFiddler, but I am just ready for bed :0 thank you for reading and commenting.


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Francis Carter 20 months ago from Ireland

Fantastic poem and excellent response to the challenge. I really liked the simplicity of the structure and the idea, but how much you got across with it.

all of the responses have been great so far!


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Nikkij504gurl 20 months ago from Louisiana

challenge accepted/ good job!


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billybuc 20 months ago from Olympia, WA

I agree with the first commentator....the use of repetition is a powerful trick, one I've used in several pieces....you used it perfectly in this poem. Thank you, John, for taking on the challenge and doing so well with it.


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tobusiness 20 months ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

John, I expected nothing less from you. So much said in so few words. Beautifully done.


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tillsontitan 20 months ago from New York

Simply beautiful. You say so much in your poems John and this one is no exception. As for the challenge, your response is perfect.

I am tied up with a guest from Ireland but when things get back to normal I'd like to try. I know I won't reach your glory but I'll give it a shot.

Voted up, awesome, and beautiful.


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Sara Sarwar Riaz 20 months ago from Michigan, USA

This is such a beautiful and poignant piece of poetry... Oftentimes in life, people exit situations and relationships through theoretical doors to nowhere. You actually put that concept down in substance.

A commendable response indeed, to a very interesting challenge.


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always exploring 20 months ago from Southern Illinois

This is beautiful John. You are one of my favorite poets. I just posted mine. Hope you like it..


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Francis, I just read your story in response and it was fantastic. There certainly are some talented writer on HP.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hi Nikki, and thanks.


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Francis Carter 20 months ago from Ireland

Thanks Jodah! glad you enjoyed it.

I have to agree with you, there is seriously good talent around here on HP.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hello Bill, the first line just seemed perfect for repeating and I was pleased with the result. Glad you are too. Thanks.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you so much for your kid word Jo. I appreciate it.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for reading Sarah and for your interesting observation. Your generous comment is most welcome too.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Ruby, as you are mine. You are too kind.


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Harishprasad 20 months ago from India

A very creative poem and a great response to Bill's challenge. I enjoyed reading this remarkable poem.


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MsDora 20 months ago from The Caribbean

Beautiful response, Jodah! Poetry may be what you know best; it is also what you do exceptionally well (I didn't say best, because you're definitely an all rounder).


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Sparklea 20 months ago from Upstate New York

Jodah, how lovely and sad at the same time the way you express your emotions in this profound poem. The song is hauntingly beautiful, and the music is exquisite. You truly hit the nail on the head with your ending about walking out the door to nowhere. For one of the greatest heartbreaks is the person who is left by someone they love so deeply.

Voted up, awesome and beautiful. I was SO hoping you would take the challenge! God bless you always, Sparklea :)


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Homeplace Series 20 months ago from Hollister, MO

John, what a neat poem in response to Bill's challenge. I enjoy each of your responses to challenges. Keep them coming! ;-)


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you as always for reading and offering generous comments Harishprasad. Have a great day.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you MsDora. I always look forward to your comments because you always ofer encouragement and support. So glad you enjoyed this Poem for this great challenge.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for your kind comment Sparklea. I know from your personal story in response to the challenge that you can relate to this, in fact your tale may have subconsciously given me inspiration or an idea for this poem. Thank you for the vote up too, and God bless you also.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for reading DrBill and the kind encouragement.


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RachaelOhalloran 20 months ago from United States

This was nothing short of exceptional. Wish they had an HP button for that! So I chose all the others, except funny. Bravo, John.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Rachael, I am glad you found this "exceptional". I can't ask for more than that. Yes it would be nice if they had that as a button too


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mary615 20 months ago from Florida

Your poem is just wonderful to take up this challenge! I love the way you ended your poem; how sad.....


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Mary, glad you enjoyed this short poem especially the sad ending. Much appreciated.


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Lady Guinevere 20 months ago from West Virginia

Oh, I loved that poem.


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Michael-Milec 20 months ago

Hi jodah.

Vibrant, pure and resounding. Conforming to realty.

How did you do that ?!

Voted beautiful


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you so much Lady Guinevere. I loved your supernatural murder mystery story too.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for the great comment Michael-Milec. I have no idea how I do anything..I just do it! :)


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fpherj48 20 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Jodah...not fair. You made me cry. No warning. I'll only forgive you because I like you. This is awesome.....just heart wrenching. I Love the last photo with touching words.~Up+++


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

I'm a sucker for a lady with tears in her eyes Paula :) Seriously, sorry to make you cry but as long as you forgive me, and it proves my poem must have been effective. Glad you like the last picture too. Thanks for the vote up.


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DDE 20 months ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

Hi Jodah you show true talent in your great art of poetry and this challenge is greatly approached in a different way.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Devika, I am glad there are people like you here at HP who appreciate poetry as a legitimate form of writing. Thank you for the kind comment.


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Jackie Lynnley 20 months ago from The Beautiful South

I think you could meet any challenge John; must be your itch to write! I remember it being a great feeling! lol Thumbs up and keep up the good work.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Jackie, I like to at least give each challenge a go. Whether I succeed or not is another matter :) Anytime I am procrastinating about what to write one of these challenges pops up and gives me a prompt. At the moment this is my lowest scoring hub, hopefully it improves in time. But then it is "poetry."


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Venkatachari M 20 months ago from Hyderabad, India

Awesome attempt. You narrated a full story in those beautiful lines. I appreciate your talent.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for your generous comment Venkatachari.


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Jo_Goldsmith11 20 months ago

Jodah!!

wow! How beautiful and sad all at the same time. Then it makes you feel so inspired to love! Even if it is- just for a short time, than to never love, anyone, ever. So glad you took this challenge. And I just may try to find something to write just as wonderful! Shared & up she goes! :-)

(((((( Jodah )))))))


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for such a nice comment Jo. Love can often be painful but as they say "it is better to have loved and lost, than never to have loved at all". Look forward to reading your response to this challenge.


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AudreyHowitt 20 months ago from California

sad, sad write John! But a great response to the challenge!


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks so much for reading this Audrey. Glad you think it is a worthy response. The very title "The Door to Nowhere" lends itself to sad or lost images I think.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks so much for reading this Audrey. Glad you think it is a worthy response. The very title "The Door to Nowhere" lends itself to sad or lost images I think.


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mr-veg 20 months ago from Colorado United States

Nice one John ! you nicely got the emotions blended in your lines.. Nice interpretation to Bill's challenge !!


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you mr-veg. This was fun to write, and I always enjoy these challenges.. Your kind comment is greatly appreciated.


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Emese Fromm 20 months ago from The Desert

Great poem! You really are very comfortable with verse. This was such a great way to answer Bill's challenge. I loved how you could tell a whole story in a few words. I liked the repetitions of the first line, and how you ended it with the image of the door to nowhere, painting a whole sad, emotional story in between. Loved it!


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jhamann 20 months ago from Reno NV

Great response to the challenge. I prefer poetry myself. Well done. Jamie


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for your kind comment Emese. I find poetry a very effective way of telling a story in just a few words a you say, and it is my preferred form of writing. I am glad you liked the use of repetition of the first line. I think that was effective.


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Jodah 20 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Jamie, glad you liked this. I know you prefer poetry Jamie, and you do it so well.


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ChitrangadaSharan 19 months ago from New Delhi, India

Great response to billybuc's challenge!

Your expertise in weaving words created a lovely and emotional story in a short poem. Enjoyed going through and lovely pictures too.

Thanks for sharing and voted up!


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hi Chitrangada, glad you enjoyed this poem response to Bill's challenge and I do appreciate your kind comment. Thanks for the vote up


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Suzanne Day 19 months ago from Melbourne, Victoria, Australia

Hi Jodah, thanks for your funny remarks on my pillowcase hub! Much appreciated. This poem was fascinating and I particularly liked the surprise of the fire escape exit! As usual, your poem was great and well thought out and laid out. Voted awesome! I might have to join in these writing contests sometime...


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Suzanne. Always appreciate your comments. Glad you enjoyed my comments on your hub too. I find these challenges great as writing prompts when I am finding it difficult to decide on what to write for my next hub. You should give it a go.


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Shyron E Shenko 19 months ago

John, this makes me so sad, when love dies, I love this poem, but then I love all your poems. Sometimes one wonders if the love was there ever before.

Voted up, UABI and shared.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for the lovely and touching comment Shauna. So glad you enjoy my poetry.


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cam8510 19 months ago from Columbus, Georgia until the end of November 2016.

John, you've packed a whole story into a few verses. Well done as always.


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Joy56 19 months ago

Nice one


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Chris, I tried my best, glad it worked.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for reading this Joy and for commenting. It is always great to see a new face.


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klidstone1970 19 months ago from Niagara Region, Canada

Very beautiful, John, but your poems always are though. I will disagree with one thing however, you are very much accomplished when it comes to writing short fiction stories and would have submitted one top notch had you gone that route. I always look forward to reading your work. Have a great weekend! Kim


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Kim. I am glad you enjoy my writing whether poetry or short fiction. If I had not read some other amazing responses to this challenge before I decided to join in I probably would have written a story. I couldn't think of a new angle and didn't want it to seem I was copying someone elses idea so decided on a poem for something slightly different. I appreciate your support and encouragement. Have a great weekend.


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pstraubie48 19 months ago from sunny Florida

I lost a loved one who walked out of a door to nowhere..but really it was to somewhere...somewhere he wished he had not gone.

I can really identify with your carefully poem.

Angels are on the way to you this morning ps


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

hello ps, good to see you. Thanks for the interesting comment of your experience And glad you can identify, but sorry it happened to you. Thank you for the Angels they are always welcome.


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Nell Rose 19 months ago from England

I loved your poem and the way you took this challenge, I think we can all understand this poem, its happened to most of us sometime, and thanks for showing me Arigo in Brazil, fascinating stuff! have a great day!


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liesl5858 19 months ago from United Kingdom

I love the way you took Bills challenge. What a well written poem you got penned down. You have done justice to the challenge. Well done and congratulations.


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Genna East 19 months ago from Massachusetts, USA

John, I think you met and surpassed this challenge with such wonderful poetry. So well done. Voted with all thumbs up, and more. :-)


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Genna, I appreciate such a generous comment. Thanks for the vote up and I think I saw that you responded to the challenge as well so I am off to check that out.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hi Nell, glad you enjoyed this poem an can reate to the story. I thought you would find Arigo interesting and along the same lines as your reincarnation hubs. I read the book about him and was simply amazed. Enjoy your weekend.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for reading and your kind comment liesl5858. Much appreciated.


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mckbirdbks 19 months ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Your poetry speaks volumes about life and the experiences that it offers up as a cruel joke on loves and lovers across the ages. The challenge brought this poignant piece to life.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Yes Mike, this real life scenario is vey common and a lot of people can relate to similar events. These challenges are often the catalyst to inspire you to writ about things that you wouldn't normally consider.


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Vellur 19 months ago from Dubai

A great poem and a great response to billybuc's challenge.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you so much for the kind comment Vellur.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you so much for the kind comment Vellur.


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The Examiner-1 19 months ago

That was lovely John, it really had meaning. I could feel that someone was missing. I ^+++ and pinned it.

Kevin


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Kevin, glad you could feel the emotion in this poem. Thanks for the vote up and pin too.


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MonkeyShine75 19 months ago from Los Angeles, California

That is both beautiful, and so very sad. Thank you for sharing, even though it left me feeling uncharacteristically unhappy, but in a good way (it made me feel the way the poem is supposed to)


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading this Mara. I am sorry it made you feel unhappy, but I guess that shows it succeeded as a poem portraying a sad situation. Thanks for the kind comment too.


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Anna Haven 19 months ago from Scotland

You portrayed the pain so clearly.

I think the fact that she/he? sneaked out embarrassed really brings up lots of questions. Why? You are making us think! Good work.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you so much Anna. I really try to feel the emotion I am writing about and so pleased when it comes off on the page. Also with poetry you need to make the audience read between the lines and have them questioning the deeper story. Glad this poem succeeded in that. Cheers.


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aviannovice 19 months ago from Stillwater, OK

I have to applaud you on this one. That was a very strong piece of poetry.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Deb, coming from a very fine poet like yourself that is quite a compliment.


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Randy Horizon 19 months ago from Philadelphia

Love your poem. I remember feeling this way long ago and could not have said better. You write beautifully. Thanks for sharing it.


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Jodah 19 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Randy. I think most of us have been through something similar at some stage. Your kind comment is much appreciated.


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Benny01 15 months ago from Lagos, Nigeria

Nicely written...


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Shyron E Shenko 15 months ago

John, I came back to re-read this. It is great. I know you made Bill proud.

Voted up again, UABI and shared.

Blessings and hugs.


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Jodah 15 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for your kind comment Benny.


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Jodah 15 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hello Shyron Thank you for visiting this poem again and resharing. You are too kind. Blessings and hugs back.


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swalia 8 months ago

Tragic yet beautiful!


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Jodah 8 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for finding and reading this Swalia. Much appreciated.

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