The Gifts of Faith

The ache in her joints was enough to foretell the impending weather. As if to validate her premonition, the smell of rich earth was emanating from the air. Rain was soon to come - and with a vengeance. Faith always seemed to prepare but never knew what to expect. She didn’t know why, but her ‘feelings’ never proved to be misgivings.

Faith was a gift from God.
Faith was a gift from God. | Source

The Beginning

Faith’s parents had lost three children before she was born. One was lost to meningitis at age 2 months, one was lost to Infant Death Syndrome after just a few days at home and one was lost before she ever left the womb. They had almost given up hope of having a child. By the time Faith came along, her parents were resigned to their faith in God that this child would live; thus her given name.

Faith was ostracized by the adults.
Faith was ostracized by the adults. | Source

The Early Years

Faith was always one to give to others, even at a very young age. But she had a trait that none of the other children – or adults for that matter – had. Oftentimes she seemed to know what was about to take place through her innate sense of Nature and the scents that Nature emits.

As a result, she was considered ‘weird’, yet children were drawn to her sense of knowing what was yet to come. However, the parents of those children were trepidatious of Faith. As such, not many kids were allowed to play with her. This dismayed her parents and confused Faith; she didn’t understand why she was singled out as an oddity. After all, don’t all people possess this sense? Is it not part of seeing, feeling, tasting, touching and smelling? She knew no other way of living life and seeing the world.

As a little girl, the ostracizing she received was foreign and inconceivable to her. Why was she treated with such ill-regard?

Faith had a golden soul and an open heart.
Faith had a golden soul and an open heart. | Source
Souls shimmer in Faith's eyes.
Souls shimmer in Faith's eyes. | Source
Faith sees everyone's souls in different hues.
Faith sees everyone's souls in different hues. | Source

Making Do

At a young age Faith learned to amuse herself with her imagination and love of music since it was apparent other kids weren’t permitted to play with her. However, no matter how much love and support she received from her parents, there always seemed to be something missing. She didn’t know the joy of sharing toys and pretending to be a movie star or princess with friends, yet she truly loved all those she met. She was never invited to climb trees or play ball or hide and seek. She was excluded from birthday parties and never had any of the neighborhood kids attend hers.

Faith had a golden soul and an open heart, yet she never had a best friend or any friend, for that matter.

Was it because the family moved often? Or was it something else?

The children Faith met as she was growing up were enthralled by her ability to see the inner souls of others. People’s souls appeared to her in various hues and seemed to shimmer just beneath the flesh. Faith had no idea that this ability was unique to her; she assumed everyone saw others as she did. Each and every person she encountered had a soul and she was able to see it. The colors and intensity were unique to each and she learned to identify the significance of this as she became more in tune with her inner sight.

Faith also had a way of communing with Mother Nature and the uncanny ability to predict the immediate future, which entranced her peers but scared the daylights out of their parents. Kids were told to stay away from ‘that freak’ Faith. Being shunned made Faith feel as though her very heart were being ripped from her body. She couldn’t understand why she was viewed as unworthy by the elders. She knew the other children didn’t feel the same as their parents; they had no choice but to abide by their rules no matter how unfair they seemed.

Faith has questions as time goes on

The impending weather always did strange things to Faith. She knew when something monumental was about to occur by the way her body suddenly reacted to the scents Mother Earth sent her. The sky could be as clear and blue as could be, but she would receive the ‘memo’ that something out of the ordinary was about to happen.

No wonder I had no friends growing up. I’m a freak and no one understands, even though… I always seem to know….. What is wrong with me? Or is it not me, but others who cannot see?

The meadow where Faith played.
The meadow where Faith played. | Source
A brilliant rainbow appeared out of nowhere.
A brilliant rainbow appeared out of nowhere. | Source

Please help me out as this is the first ongoing short story I've written

Obviously the story isn't finished. Would you like me to continue?

  • Your storytelling skills suck, Bravewarrior. Hang it up!
  • No bother, I see where you're going with this.
  • I'm curious as to what happens next. Please carry on.
  • I'm waiting with bated breath - don't keep me hanging.
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One Day....

One day as Faith was playing with her kitten in a field speckled with tulips, daffodils and all the splendor of Spring, a rainbow appeared. Although no rain had dropped, she knew the rainbow was no mirage. It was a symbol that something glorious was about to happen and Faith smiled. She lifted her freckled face to the sun and closed her eyes, beckoning the sign to permeate her mind and warm her soul.

As the sun brought warmth to her heart the rainbow became more brilliant. The colors were exquisite – deep purple, ruby red, rich turquoise and yellow as brilliant as a buttercup. A warm breeze kissed her skin as she opened her eyes. Faith felt the all too familiar butterflies in her tummy. This always happened just before a revelation. Sometimes they were good and sometimes, well sometimes she wished she didn’t have the ability to see what’s coming.

Something had changed and this time it was different than all the others…..


To be continued.


Shauna L Bowling

Refining, Defining or Rhyming

All Rights Reserved

A song Faith sang in her head often

© 2013 Shauna L Bowling

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billybuc 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

What does "bated breath mean?" That's one of those weird sayings that appears to be meaningless.

Oh, I do get sidetracked.

Beautiful does not describe this. I can tell you that, in my humble opinion, this is easily your best work...easily....great job my dear. You are growing as a writer by leaps and bounds before our very eyes, and it is a pleasure to see.

love,

bill


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Bill, you have no idea how much this means to me. I was very unsure of this one. The idea came to me yesterday and I started writing. Then I wrote some more today and decided to step out of my comfort zone and come up with continuations. If successful, that can only lead to a worthy short story or perhaps a fiction novel. I'll have to go with my creative flow.

Bated breath? I looked it up once and forget what it said. To me it means holding your breath. I don't know.... it just sounded right!


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ

This is beautiful and entrancing. I really do wish you would continue with it.


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Becky, I will. I really appreciate your feedback. I know we don't know each other well, but I've wanted to get to know you because of the relationship I see between you and Ghost. I just love him to death. Your opinion means the world to me!

Thank you for reading and giving me the encouragement to carry on with this one.


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Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

Oh, wow, dearest Sha!

This story is beautiful and intriguing.

Your story really pulls the reader in.

Yes, please continue!!!

Voted up +++ and sharing

(will return to share, buttons not appearing on my end)

God bless, Faith Reaper


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Faith, I am so tickled! I was very unsure of my story and the choice to continue. So far, all who have responded have made my heart swell and have boosted my creative self. I will continue and hope to not let any of you down.

The share buttons are here. Maybe you don't see them because HP hasn't sent this thru QAP yet. I don't know....


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rose-the planner 3 years ago from Toronto, Ontario-Canada

I sincerely cannot wait for the next installment. I really felt sorry for this child Faith, but I also fell in love with her character from the get go. Why on earth would you question your ability in writing an ongoing short story? This was an awesome read so you must hurry and finish the rest. Don't keep me hanging, please! (Voted Up) -Rose


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Rose I am so flattered that you have read and commented. I love writing short stories but usually finish before I publish. I felt Faith had a much longer tale to tell and decided to take a leap with this one. Your comment encourages me to keep taking leaps. That's what I need to do to get out of content writing. Thank you so much for validating my creative efforts!


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CrisSp 3 years ago from Sky Is The Limit Adventure

I'm curious to know what's in store for Faith next. I look forward to reading the next chapter. Meanwhile, let me enjoy the music clip for the second time. I was playing it all along while reading and now again. Love it!

P.S. You're a gifted writer. Don't ever doubt it. :)

Love from the sky~


Vickiw 3 years ago

Dear Sha, I have to concur with the others. This is a great first chapter, even though it means I will have to wait with bated breath for the next one!

I love the air of suspense you have created in this beautiful story . . .


DJ Anderson 3 years ago

Shauna, I have to agree with Bill.

This is one of your best. Write on, girlfriend!!

Unlike many other readers, I don't have a clue what is about to

take place in Faith's world.

Great job!!

DJ.


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Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

Came back to share : ) as I said I would.


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Becky Katz 3 years ago from Hereford, AZ

Sha, I see you every place I go and I feel the same about Fred. He is one of my best friends. Any friend of his is automatically a friend of mine and I know you are because of the way he 'talks' to you in his answers. I try to be honest with my responses, so I hope you are encouraged. You write really well.


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btrbell 3 years ago from Mesa, AZ

Really great story, Shauna! So glad you ventured out of your comfort zone to treat us with this brilliant morsel! Very excited for you! up++


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Mr Archer 3 years ago from Missouri

I am very curious, interested, and waiting with "bated breath" to see where you are going with this. Faith is a lovely, and obviously very special child. What will she become?

Looking forward to your next chapter on this one!

Great job,

Mike


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Cris, I played the song over and over also. It reminds me of my first boy/girl party. Thank you for your awesome comment!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Vicki, I'll try not to keep you waiting too long! I think I'm going to have fun writing this story in pieces. It's a first, but there's a first time for everything, right?


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

DJ, I don't have a clue either! Well, maybe a little.....


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Faith, you're a sweetheart. Thanx for coming back!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Becky, your words warm my heart!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Randi, I'm glad I came out of my comfort zone, too. All of you are giving me the encouragement I need to do it more often. Thank you for believing in me.


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Mike, I think good things are in store for Faith. She will be a very interesting person if I have anything to say about it. Oh, wait - I have everything to say about it, don't I? :-)


Indigo Jones 3 years ago

Bravewarrior,

You are truly amazing and each day my awe of your talent grows. Short stories are truly your calling...terrific work...hurry up and continue....can't wait. Thanks for sharing it is very sensitive and gives a feeling of peace.

HURRY!!!!!


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grandmapearl 3 years ago from Southern Tier New York State

I am so looking forward to the next chapter! What happens to Faith? You are leaving me wanting more--that is awesome writing, my friend! I feel like I have been gently guided in to a very intriguing place. This is brilliant! Please keep going ;) Pearl

Voted Up+++


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Pearl, I love that you say you have been gently guided into a very intriguing place. I think that may be the best complement I've received as a writer. I certainly will continue Faith's saga!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Indigo Jones, I have to smile when you show up! I love you, you know that. Faith has placed herself inside my soul. I would do her a disfavor to not continue with her story.


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Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

This was really very intriguing.

You created a character with whom we have empathy. You gave us a world with sights, sounds and smells. You made us want her to find love and happiness.

You created a detailed backstory and also foreshadowing of what's to come.

You achieved all of this without even using dialogue. You really are a gifted writer and I think Faith has a very interesting future ahead of her.

You have given her a special gift and now we are kept wondering and waiting to see which path she is about to walk down.

You can't keep us waiting for too long....... :)

Anna


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Anna, I will bring the next part soon. Hopefully by the weekend. Thanx for your awesome assessment!


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Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

Just the truth. I look forward to it :)

Anna


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ImKarn23 3 years ago

if i could tell you how many ways and how deeply this touched me, i'd have to write you privately. I do not say this lightly.

my breathing became faster and i learned in toward the screen and every single word held my interest and - tears came to my eyes...

you'd BETTER continue this - don't make me come over there and spank you! (lol..KIDDING people!!)

Aside from seeing into the immediate future - i am faith..

thankfully i was lucky enough to pick up a few amazing friends along the way..

but...they fully admit to still not 'getting' me...

(animals and children follow me around like the pied piper, however..)

Hey - you started it!

lol..

sharing, of course!


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ImKarn23 3 years ago

pinning and sharing on fb too...

awesome Shauna!!!


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wayne barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

Wow, Sha! Great work, and like the others I can't wait to see what becomes of Faith.


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Leslie, I always trust the way animals and children react to people. They have clean, pure, true souls and can 'feel' the souls of others. If I've brought tears to your eyes, then that says a lot about my writing. I will definitely carry on with Faith's story. She has a whole lifetime ahead of her. We will see her grow, I promise! Thanx for the pin and share!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Wayne, this means a lot coming from you. Faith has a story worth telling - I can feel it!


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BlossomSB 3 years ago from Victoria, Australia

This is truly beautiful; Faith is so deep, she can only go on.


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Deborah Brooks 3 years ago from Brownsville,TX

I love this story.. please let me know when part 2 comes out.. you have wonderful; storytelling abilities.. .. voted up and sharing

deb


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

And she will, Blossom. Wait and see!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Deb, HP should notify you whenever I post. As a reinforcement, when I really like something I write, I post it to the FB BS page and my page. I believe you're members of both.

Thank you for the compliment. I'm really loving the story telling side of writing.


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PurvisBobbi44 3 years ago from Florida

Hi,

This is a wonderful story about an unusual and gifted child. I cannot wait to read more---as I know it will be as wonderful as part 1.

Special children are God's gift to us---and the wise ones know how to greet and love them.

Bobbi Purvis


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marcoujor 3 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

Dear Sha,

I am intrigued by your style, which is liken to a stream of consciousness.

I love the idea of you writing outside your comfort zone and stretching even more beautifully in your craft.

Looking forward to much more...Voted UP and UABI. Love, Maria


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up and interesting. This story is fascinating. It had me from start to finish. Definitely looking forward to more.


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Bobbi, I'm glad you're enjoying this. Stay tuned!

Maria, I am beginning to know Faith and where her gifts will lead her. Thanx for the support.

Rasma, thank you for reading. Let's see what happens next!


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Nell Rose 3 years ago from England

I love this story! this is the type of story that I always try to find in the book store, can't wait for the next installment!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Nell, I'm hoping to meet up with Faith sometime this weekend. I'm thrilled this story appeals to you!


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carol7777 3 years ago from Arizona

This is a keeper and so well done. You are an amazing writer.


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Thank you for your kind words, Carol. I'm going to enjoy getting to know Faith. I hope you will, too.


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Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

A great story Shauna; voted up and enjoyed.

Eddy.


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Thanx, Eddy. I need to get working on the next part!


just-about 3 years ago

Well, I'm drawn in and waiting for the next chapter . . . I'm looking forward to hearing her voice and her conversations with others.


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Julie Anne, as soon as I get my computer problems squared away, I plan on giving Faith her voice. Thanx so much for stopping by!


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Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

Oh how beautiful Shauna and voted up ;thanks for sharing this gem; I loved it.

Eddy.


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Thank you, Eddy. I need to get to work on part two, but keep getting stuck. I've been searching photos to go with what I have in mind. I hope to get unstuck soon so Faith can continue on with her tale.


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Sunshine625 3 years ago from Orlando, FL

What happens next to Faith???

Faith is my granddaughters name :)


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

I'm working on it, Linda. I have an idea for part two, I just need to get in on paper and get it to flow. Faith is also my brother's ex-wife's name. I don't know why I chose it - it just popped into my head and felt right.


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Sunshine625 3 years ago from Orlando, FL

I'm looking forward to part two! :)


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Awesome, Linda!


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FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

Please do more. As I read this, I had so many questions. What kind of parents/heritage gives rise to a child like this? Is there any downside to this gift? Not everyone's soul is nice and good, so what happens when she sees an "ugly" color (I imagined it to be a putrid green). Are there others like her, perhaps with darker twists to their characters (for example, people who can see vulnerabilities)? You spark so many questions. I am looking forward to seeing where you go with this!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Flourish, you've given me fuel for the story. I know Faith has a lot to share, but I've gotten stuck. Thanx for your feedback!


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CraftytotheCore 3 years ago

Nicely done and I love the photos you chose for both chapters!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Thanx, Crafty. I'm glad you're enjoying this story.


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epbooks 3 years ago from Las Vegas, NV

Fantastic! Definitely captured my attention and kept it. Well-written!!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Thank you, Liz. Coming from a writer whom I hold in great regard, your comment means everything to me!


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btrbell 3 years ago from Mesa, AZ

Ah, silly me, I did read this one! Just not sure how I missed the next one! SAA, great story! I will be watching for more! Thank you!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Hey, Randi! Yep, silly you! Tee hee. I'm glad to see you give this another go 'round.


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btrbell 3 years ago from Mesa, AZ

Maybe my next hub should be about memory (or lack there of?)


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Rolly A Chabot 3 years ago from Alberta Canada

Hi Bravewarrior... beautiful, touching and such a wonderful read... never stop using the gift you have...

Hugs from Canada


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Rolly, I'm pleased you've taken the time to read this. I have recently posted chapter 2. I don't know how many chapters I'll write. It depends on Faith and her voice.


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Nell Rose 3 years ago from England

Great start, off to read 2 and 3! lol!


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

I'm glad you're enjoying this, Nell!


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Jennifer Stone 3 years ago from the Riverbank, England

I loved this Bravewarrior, a beautiful piece of writing! I'm off to read the next chapter with bated breath.. :)


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida Author

Jennifer, I hope bated breath is nothing like blue b---s! :-)


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klidstone1970 2 years ago from Niagara Region, Canada

Oh, Shauna,

This is too good to be true! Your way with words are wonderful and left me feeling the ache in Faith's soul as she questioned the "why's" in her life. Well done!

Best wishes for the holidays,

Kim


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Merry Christmas, Kim. Thanx for the awesome comment!


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Minnetonka Twin 2 years ago from Minnesota

I am waiting with bated breath-I am so taken and captivated by this beautiful story of Faith. Once you read the first sentence, it just pulls you to continue. Beautiful work Shauna and I will await the conclusion.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Linda, this is chapter one. There are 4 more following this, but it's not over yet!


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Minnetonka Twin 2 years ago from Minnesota

I am so excited to hear that Shauna. Are they all here on HubPages or are they published works. This is a perfect day to read a great story like this. It's cold and snowy in Minnesota.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

They're on HP, Linda. You should be able to find them via my profile page. The chapters are numbered, so you should be able to read them in order. Let me know what you think!


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Minnetonka Twin 2 years ago from Minnesota

Perrrffecctt Shauna. I see a great cozy evening ahead of me :-)


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Awesome! Enjoy, Linda!


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Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

Hi Shauna I have returned for a fresh read here as I intend to follow each chapter. It is uncanny because reading this time round has given me a feeling of understanding ; a feeling and memory of how it was to be a little girl who didn't quite fit in and found all she needed in Mother Nature's bosom. I knew I had to return and I am so glad I did. Now onto Chapter 2.

Lots of love my very dear friend.

Eddy.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Eddy, Faith is very much a part of me. I was the same as a little girl. We moved so often I never had time to make friends. When I did, it hurt too much when we'd leave so I learned to distance myself. Nature was my playmate. I don't regret it at all; it gave me a true appreciation of the wonders and beauty Mother Nature bestows upon us.


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Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

Nature as you know was also a great part of my childhood ; I never felt at one with a crowd of friends and I found all I needed in Mother Nature's bosom. We never moved around when I was small but as I said nature was my all. Looking back today I know that I learned and understood so much more than what most of my friends would have at a young age.

Obviously I wish that the abuse hadn't happened but it did and I have moved on!!!Everything I have been through has made me who I am today. I am still not a lover of being part of a large crowd and also not one to have neighbours popping in an dout for coffee and gossip and t this day I am happier when my self and Dai are exploring our Welsh paradise and how nice to finally be bale to share so much with my soul mate my all. Thanks for this story again Shauna and I look forward to reading on further. Voted up for sure.

Eddy.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Eddy, I love the hubs you post about your and Dai's outings. I love your countryside and the beautiful, lush fauna it has to offer. I look forward to your next jaunt into the outdoors!


Jane Arden 2 years ago

What a beautiful piece of work. So descriptive and telling. I am already feeling sad for Faith, with her friends (not friends really) the other children not being able to play with her. She's different but doesn't even know it yet. I want to relax and read these parts properly Shauna and my eyes are dropping as its half 11 at night here and I'm knackered. So I will come back tomorrow evening, sit down with a nice hot chocolate and read this hub again along with the the updates. Looking forward to it. G'night and God Bless. Definitely sharing.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Sleep well, Jane. I'll be here when your eyelids and mind are ready for more. I'm pleased that you are pleased and happy that you are sad. That tells me you've gotten into the character and I've done a good job so far.


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Healing Touch 2 years ago from Minnetonka, MN

Voted Up Up Up, glad I read seven and came back to one. Loving this Shauna.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Thank you Laura. I'm glad you came back, too! :-)


Ghost32 2 years ago

Billybuc: "bated breath" comes from "abate". One dictionary definition reads as follows:

"To moderate or restrain (a variation of "abate"): to bate one's enthusiasm, and, "to lessen or diminish," and "with bated breath - in a state of suspenseful anticipation."

Sha: I'm glad to have finally caught up to this. Better late than never, and all that. Also, I have to agree with everyone else; you've expressed a superb character in Faith. It reminded me of a couple of my ex-wives, plus Pam, in that they have always been able to see auras in full living color and "assumed" everyone else could, too. They didn't have as much of the ostracism factor going on, mainly because they never thought to bring it up.

Of course, Faith's abilities go far beyond that. Great work!

On to #2....


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Ghost, the ostracism comes from my own experience as a child. We moved a lot in my younger years. That resulted in never really having time to make friends and always being the new kid on the block. There's definitely a part of me in this story.


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Nadine May 2 years ago from Cape Town, Western Cape, South Africa

I read your first chapter after having read chapter eight first. I needed to get back to the beginning and follow the story from there. intriguing and wow well done!


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Nadine, I hope you carry on with chapters two thru seven, now that you've read one and eight. It'll make more sense. I'm working on chapter nine now and hope to have it posted today or tomorrow.


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Nellieanna 2 years ago from TEXAS

I can't believe I haven't realized this was written and available till now!

But THE NOW is always where IT - life in progress - is happening. After all, isn't that one of the reasons why we write - because the work is ever-there and ever-new and NOW whenever someone reads it! I find the thrill of sharing poems I wrote over 40 years ago each time someone reads one for their first time. It is almost like immortal.

So I'm about to continue reading your marvelous story. Maybe I'm just sneaky. (wink) - If I'd read the first chapter when it was first published and the only one available, I'd be hung in suspense, waiting for the story to continue unfolding. As it is, I can gobble it up as quickly as I wish; - OR just allow the thrill of the discovery to envelop me as it will. I'm really delighted with this, Shauna! You've drawn me in totally.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Nellieanna, I love reading the poetry you wrote many years ago. It allows me to see into your soul. You were just as beautiful then as you are now.

I'm thrilled you've picked up my story. Looking forward to your feedback!


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epigramman 2 years ago

I am not one to read novels or long form writing but I wanted to give you an honest appraisal my dear Shauna by starting right back here with chapter one and I was honestly blown away by your brilliant attention to detail, character development and storyline ......I try to write in a visual sense myself as I am very much influenced by songwriting and music (but not poetry itself which I don't care for much anyway,lol) and in turn here I could see a movie in my head through your evocative words and storytelling, bravo to you my dear friend and I shall enlighten the masses on FB with a post on my timeline and continue on with chapter 2 ...... Canada time sunday night 8:15pm


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Colin, I am privileged to have you reading what is outside your preferred form. That means a lot to me. You're pulling my leg with your comment about poetry, right Poetry Man???? I see you've read the first two chapters. Eight more to go!


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tirelesstraveler 2 years ago from California

Still wandering around with Faith. I know the beginning now I have to find where Sarah comes into the picture. It has been a fun sick day reading about Faith.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Tirelesstraveler, I'm sorry to hear you're not feeling well. Perhaps my little story will distract your discomfort some. Now that you've read the first chapter and the latest one, you need to read chapters 2 through 9. You'll get a better handle on the story. I hope you'll be pleased with today's read.


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fpherj48 2 years ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Well Sha....I have my answer to the mystery. It was meant for me to begin this series so late. Now, I not only get to devour your wonderful work....but also see the dozens of heartfelt comments, applause and kudos being thrown at your feet......from all of our fellow writers! Better critiques a writer cannot hope for than those of a fellow writer! You deserve it all.

This beginning is a true grabber.......I'm instantly hooked.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Welcome to the beginning of my journey, Paula!


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

I'm into this story BIG time! I saw that you'd written chapter twelve today. I knew i had to start at the beginning to understand the story. Faith is a special child, like many others who are gifted and not understood. My kind of story.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Ruby, I hope you enjoy it. My HP friends are sort of a guinea pig on this one. I have aspirations of turning this into a novel - my first! I would appreciate your honesty when you leave comments. I have no idea how many chapters are yet to come. It depends on how long it takes for Faith to tell her story.

I'm thrilled you're here!


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Brite-Ideas 2 years ago from Toronto, Canada

oh I'm intrigued for sure! I'll be reading your series now! This character is someone that I 'can relate to' (ok, that's sounds crazy) but in a different way - in terms of peering deeper into someone's soul to at least try to understand what's made them who they are (at least on the surface)


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Barb, I'm thrilled to have you join Faith's journey. Be prepared for some unexpected twists in the story. It's a work in progress that will eventually become my first fiction novel. I'm glad to hear you're relating to her so early in her life.


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tillsontitan 2 years ago from New York

Well, here I am at the beginning and I am certainly not disappointed. Meeting Faith as a child has been interesting and sad. Parents are so cruel!

I know you've continued because I read Chapter 16 and I believe one other. I'm correcting that now as I start from the beginning.

Voted up, awesome, beautiful, and interesting.


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida Author

Mary, I'm glad you're taking the time to begin Faith's journey. It will all make more sense when you do. I look forward to your feedback.


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Shyron E Shenko 20 months ago

I can't wait to read the next chapter. Voted this up, UABI and shared.

Blessings and Hugs


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bravewarrior 20 months ago from Central Florida Author

Shyron, I've posted 16 chapters of this story. I'm stopping there. I intend to turn this into a novel once I finish it, but will not be publishing the subsequent chapters. Why would anyone buy the book if it's available online, right?


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lisavanvorst 20 months ago from New Jersey

This is a beautiful and intriguing story. I have to ask, is it true? I know that some individuals possess such mystical abilities. Whether true or not I look forward to reading more about Faith. Thank you for sharing.


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bravewarrior 20 months ago from Central Florida Author

Lisa, all of our fictional stories are based on real life. At least, that's where my ideas come from. I've got Cherokee blood on both sides of my mother's family. Perhaps this story is guided by them. I don't know. I just go with the flow that my characters plant in the creative side of my brain.

I've seen spirits, but I've not seen souls inside a living being. I'm obviously adding a fictional mindset to real life. I'm not sure where the manifestation of this story comes from. I don't question it.

I love that you've posed that question. No one else has. You've given me reason to delve deeper into how and why this story popped into my head.

Read on for 15 more chapters (and that's where I stop) and let me know what you think. This started as a short story, but will be a novel when my characters finish telling me their stories.

Warning: I will not publish the rest of the novel on HP or anywhere. This was pretty much a place to determine whether or not my novel would be of interest to readers.

I look forward to your feedback.


JennC 20 months ago

Aeesome story and amazing writer!


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bravewarrior 20 months ago from Central Florida Author

Thank you, Jenn. I hope you enjoy the subsequent chapters.

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