The Illusion of Control: An Excerpt in Creative Writing

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Lights. Colors. For one small moment my spinning world stands still. I feel breathless, weightless, and beautiful. The tension in my muscles as they flex and release brings a slight sweat to my brow, but I don't mind. It feels good. So, so good. In this world where I seem to have so little control, I relish the sensation of knowing I have control of this. Of me.

My partner stands tall. A rock that further solidifies my control. We spin together mimicking the thing that is my life, but this is better. This I know I'll excel at. The music swells and I am swept away into the feeling that I could be beautiful all the time, an immortal flower forever blooming in agonizingly beautiful grace. Perhaps I could go on dancing and never look back on the life that is mine, trade one colorful top for another. But as the spinning slows, the music dies and my partner, my rock, disappears with it. The lights go out, the colors fade to grey, and I am left alone with a pair of broken dance shoes and the barest hope that it will all come back again.


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ACSutliff 5 months ago

Hi Silver Foxy Girl!

Long time no read! I was hoping to reconnect with my favorite Hubbers, now that I am back and attempting to be active again. Are you still around?

I love the metaphor here. Is this a window into your life right now? I hope you are doing well!

All the best,

A.C.


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silverfoxygirl108 5 months ago Author

Hey AC!!!! :) I am on, though my additions to the site have been pretty slim. Are you writing again??

And yeah it kind of was a metaphor for my life right now. I'm involved in ballroom dancing and its definitely something that brings those kinds of feelings to the surface.

Hope to hear from you!!

SFG


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ACSutliff 5 months ago

Yay, it's good to hear from you, SFG. I am writing again, fantasy this time. I'm trying to examine the writing process by creating a new story (most likely will be a novella when I'm done) set in a new world I'm in the process of realizing . . . while simultaneously trying to write the sequel to a YA fantasy that is in beta right now.

I have some hopes for the series and want to take my time with the sequel so I needed something to keep me writing. Hoping HubPages is still a great way to generate a following so that if I have to self-publish, the book will still manage to get into some readers' hands!

The beauty of HubPages is that it can bring avid writers and avid readers together. I know you are one or the other (or both)!

Good to see you are still active on here, at least with comments. :) Don't feel the pressure to write, unless you want to!

~A.C.


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silverfoxygirl108 5 months ago Author

I'll go check out your hubs. :) And thanks for the advice on writing. I do want to write though, I need take the time to do it. Have you published yet then??


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ACSutliff 5 months ago

Hi again! I am self-published; thank you for asking about that! You can find my books on Amazon if you search in Books "AC Sutliff In My Head" and also if you google me with or without the book title. The trilogy is available as an e-book or paperback (I prefer the paperback, because I have all those fun fonts, which don't show up as well on the electronic version.) Let me know if I can help in anyway as you try to get back into writing. It can be tough to take the time--trust me--I know!


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silverfoxygirl108 5 months ago Author

Perfect :) I'll definitely check those out!!!


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ACSutliff 5 months ago

Thank you very much!

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