The Inheritance - A short story

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The Inheritance


“Think he’ll really come all this way?”

“Could be. He’s the only living relative.”

“Everybody knows you were meant to have it, Jacob. The old man told folks about it for years.”

“Still, there was no will, so this cousin has a claim.”

Jacob Branch walked to the edge of the porch, sipping his morning coffee. Spread out below was the vast valley of the B bar B, and as always, he was struck by the sheer beauty of it all. Old Harvey Branch had built the house on a hill so that Angie could wheel her chair onto the porch of a morning, and watch the workings of the ranch.

Angie had been crippled as a child during a polio outbreak, but Harvey’s puppy love for her never wavered, and years later, he finally convinced her to marry him, despite her reluctance as a cripple. She knew she could never bear him children, but that was her only regret, because she adored Harvey. Then he found Jacob, and brought him home.

Jacob had been found walking down a wagon trail, all by himself. He looked to be about three years, and was dressed only in a nightshirt. When Harvey asked him his name, he answered, “Jacob’, but he didn’t seem to know his surname. There was no wagon in sight, so Harvey took him home to Angie.

They placed ads in several papers and posted handbills, but no one ever claimed the boy. Finally, Harvey told a joyful Angie that they would simply raise Jacob themselves, and give him their name. That was twenty years ago.

Angie’s fragile health had finally given out ten years prior, and she was buried in the family plot. Harvey never really recovered from the loss, and he too passed on last September. He now rested beside his beloved Angie.

Harvey had given Jacob his name, and it was widely understood that the ranch was to be his too after Harvey's passing, but he never officially adopted Jacob, and no will was found, so the judge ordered a search for surviving kinfolk. He apologized to Jacob, but said he was bound by law. Harvey had often said he had no known kin, but newspaper ad placed in London located a distant cousin, who filed a claim.

The English cousin had corresponded with the judge, asking for a six month extension, but the judge refused. He had allowed two more weeks, extending the deadline for a personal appearance in his courtroom with the proper bona fides proving his claim until the end of April. Otherwise, the ranch went to Jacob.

Mary Albert rose and stood beside Jacob, her long, curly black tresses resting on her slim shoulders. She and Jacob were to be married, but the uncertainty of ranch ownership took priority. Jacob put his arm around her waist, and they stood in silence. The spring roundup was about to get underway, and cattle dotted the valley floor for miles. It had been a good year, and Jacob wished Harvey could see it. He missed the only man he had ever known as a father.

Simon Trivol, the London solicitor, insisted that Jonas Black rehearse his lines once again.

“I’ve corresponded with this judge, and he’s certainly an able man. One slip on your part, and we shall lose that ranch, not to mention the money I’ve invested in forged birth certificates and the like. Now once again, let’s hear your story.”

Jonas Black was perfect. He was tall, slim and handsome, and his air of self importance belied the fact that he was actually a low thief and charlatan. He was also a skilled impersonator, and that’s why Simon Trivol had sought him for this endeavor.

“Learn your part until you believe it to be true yourself. Convince yourself that you are Harvey Branch’s long lost relative, and you shall have no difficulty convincing others. Once we take possession, we'll sell it to investors and you can come back. You'll be well rewarded.”

“I don’t know how it can stay up there, Jacob!”

Jacob Branch and Judge Mallory stood in the dusty street, shading their eyes against the sun and watching the airplane disappearing in the distance. It was the first one either had ever seen, and it was so exciting they had run out of the judge’s office and into the street with the other town folk. The Wright Brothers had first flown some nine years ago, but planes were still rare in the west. They returned to the office.

“He has three weeks to make the deadline, and then I have to assure myself that he’s legitimate.” The judge tapped his fingers on the roll top, looking uncomfortable.

“I know a lawyer who can muddy the water so badly that this cousin’s claim would take years.” He looked down, obviously embarrassed. “I don’t want you to lose that ranch, son, even if I have to stoop to lawlessness.”

Jacob smiled and patted the older man’s back. “You’ve never had a dishonest day in your life judge, and I won’t let you have one now, even if I lose the ranch. It will all work out just the way it’s supposed to. Let’s go eat.”

It had been a two day ride, checking fence and the two line cabins. As usual, the hands were hard at work, because all the dead wood had been weeded out long ago. Harvey Branch had been a hard man, but a fair one. Good hands were paid top wages, and those who failed were paid off and sent packing. Jacob had learned well from the old man, and the hands liked and respected him.

The year had been even better than he thought. The mild winter had been easy on the livestock, and new calves were everywhere. The new grass was green and lush, and the streams were flowing.

He was within a mile of the ranch when he saw the rider. By the way she sat her horse, he recognized Mary. She had long ago refused to ride sidesaddle, infuriating some of the local women who thought it indecent, but now, some of them were also riding astride. Mary was a trend setter.

Spotting him, she drew up in the shade of a big oak, and by the time he rode up, she had a cloth down and was unpacking a picnic lunch. He dismounted, and she handed him a beer she had cooled in the well. He took a grateful swallow.

“Judge Mallory received a letter from that Jonas Black English cousin, Jacob. It seems he’s coming here to claim the ranch. I was hoping he would change his mind.”

“If he’s the rightful heir, there’s nothing we can do. What kind of sandwiches are those?”

Simon Trivol peered over his desk at Jonas Black.

“Very well. You have all the papers, and I’ve written explicit instructions on which trains to take out of New York and Saint Louis. There’s no time to lose if you are to make the deadline, so stick to the schedule.”

Jonas Black nodded. “I hope it’s a fast ship.”

Trivol smiled.

“It's the fastest one afloat. It’s that new one from the White Star line, called ‘Titanic’.”



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Angela Blair 4 years ago from Central Texas

Wow, Will -- what an interesting tale (and of course this hook may outshine all the rest for which you are rapidly becoming famous!) Definitely voted up and enjoyed immensely! Best/Sis


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Today is the 100th anniversary of the sinking, Angela, so...!


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Wow! Who would have guess the Titanic? Great story, loved it.

Voted up and awesome. Very enjoyable, Joyce.


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dahoglund 4 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

Hi Will. It seems that in this case the famous ship becomes a symbol of fate.Great story.


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FitnezzJim 4 years ago from Fredericksburg, Virginia

I noticed the Ads By Google coming up, and started thinking, wait, this can't be Will's typical story. It's just getting started, but then, my doubts were sunk.

Great Story.


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SubRon7 4 years ago from eastern North Dakota

Will, I was almost ready to think that you weren't going to surprise me this time, but, boy, you did: The Titanic. I bet you even posted this hub on the anniversary.

Special good job, my friend!

OK, up above I see it "is" the anniversary.


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suziecat7 4 years ago from Asheville, NC

Ha! The Titanic. Who would have thought. Glad Jacob got to keep his ranch. Thanks for the enjoyable read.


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Conniving, honesty, and just desserts- the Titanic seems to have straightened a few things out concerning those three words. Wonder what inspired this story. Whatever it was you done mighty good Will.


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theseus 4 years ago from philippines

Nice one..very good twist..Only you can do that.I enjoyed reading this.


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bmcoll3278 4 years ago from Longmont, Colorado

That was awesome Where is this ranch I think it may be mine.LOL voted up


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Becky Katz 4 years ago from Hereford, AZ

Wonderful story, I loved it. He so deserved the ranch and that shyster did not need to profit from his lawlessness. Awesome that he should set out on the Titanic. May he rest in ...


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Old Poolman 4 years ago from Rural Arizona

WillStarr - You got me again my friend. I knew there would be a twist, but nothing like this ending even came to mind. Great job of writing as usual.


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Wizzie Crone 4 years ago from wizziecrone@yahoo.com

You are very clever. I wondered how you were going to unwind that in such a short story. Good job. I like the way you put the reader right in the place.


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Dexter Yarbrough 4 years ago from United States

Awesome! See, this is why you are the master of the short story! Bravo!!


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My Minds Eye53 4 years ago from Tennessee

Loved this tale.

voted up and shared.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Awesome story. I read down to the last paragraph and though 'not many lines left how is he going to turn this around' The very last line. Oh boy you know how to keep a person hooked until the very last word.

You never disappoint

Brilliant and voted up right across the board


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PurvisBobbi44 4 years ago from Florida

Hi WillStarr,

A great story, and I especially loved the ending--finally the bad guys did not win.

I voted awesome. And I hope to read more of your work.

Bobbi


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diogenes 4 years ago from UK and Mexico

You did it again, Will, and there was no guessing the ending this time.

I wonder how many unsolved crimes and stories of this type did end when that ship went down, we shall never know now.

Good tale.

Bob


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Wayne Brown 4 years ago from Texas

There's the old twist, Will...I was looking as hard as I could for it early on and did not see it coming. You got a way with those. A good tale sir! WB


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breakfastpop 4 years ago

I love this hub, especially coming on the 100th anniversary of the sinking of the Titanic. Up and awesome.


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aguasilver 4 years ago from Malaga, Spain

When I saw the end coming up, I wondered if this was a a two parter, or you had posted before you finished, then you side-swiped me with that ending... BRILLIANT.


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

Oh i really got into this one. I knew there would be a twist but i was completely surprised. I saw the movie and loved it...Loved your story!


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CMerritt 4 years ago from Pendleton, Indiana

Will, I am giving you a standing ovation on this one!!!

Perfect timing, and never even remotely saw it coming!!!

I kept waiting and waiting .... then BAM! the Titantic!!!

Bravo!


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The Frog Prince 4 years ago from Arlington, TX

Will - Great story and I swear I didn't click "ad button" one in this Hub. I did however click "Up" and 4 other buttons.

The Frog


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Joyce!

Glad you enjoyed it!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thanks Don!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Jim, and thank you!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi James,

I wanted to work the Titanic anniversary into a western story, and this is what I came up with.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Suzie!

I couldn't let Jacob lose his ranch!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Alastar Packer,

It was my way of noting the 100th anniversary of the disaster.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Theseus!

This is what is so great about HubPages...I have a fan all the way from the Philippines!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi bmcoll3278!

The B bar B is now a housing development. Sorry.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hey Becky!

Sadly, Jonas' body was never found.

^_*


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hey Mike!

You about ready for lunch?


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Wizzie!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Dex, and thank you!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, My Minds Eye53!

I need to give you a read!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Rosemay50,

I actually gave all of you three hints!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, PurvisBobbi44!

And I will take a peek at your work!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Bob!

I gave three hints, and I thought you would be the one to figure it out!

Gotcha!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Wayne, and your Seaside poem was great!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Pop!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi John, and it was fun 'sideswiping' you!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Ruby!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Chris, and thank you my friend!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Jim!

I figured out how to make my Hubs ad-free!


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G-Ma Johnson 4 years ago from NW in the land of the Free

Awesome, Great and you always surprise me....:O) God Bless Hugs G-Ma


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Teylina 4 years ago

What an awesome ending! When Mary brought the sandwiches I started thinking she might poison the bad guy--couldn't think what other twist, but to pay tribute to the Titanic in such a way is mind-boggling! Interesting, too, because all kinds of people were on that ship! I'm still catching my breath! Thank you for the very different!


Nan Mynatt 4 years ago

Great story Will, but who was Jacob, was he planted there for them to raise up since they could not have children. Glad the relative to be, got his reward on the Titanic!


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marshacanada 4 years ago from Vancouver BC

You did it again. How creative you are Will.This is a great story with a lovely timely twist in honor of 100 years since the Titanic sunk.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, G-Ma Johnson, and thanks for the great comment!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Teylina!

I knew where this one was going right from the start, because it was about Titanic!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, Nan!

Jacob may have been a lost child or perhaps abandoned. We will never know.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Marsha, and you're right...it was all about Titanic.


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PegCole17 4 years ago from Dallas, Texas

You are the master of the surprise twist. I was wrapped up in the drama right up to the very end. Another great read.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, PegCole!


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Twilight Lawns 4 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

Well constructed. Will.

Everything dovetailed nicely.

Always a good read.

Thank you.


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Old Poolman 4 years ago from Rural Arizona

Will, give me a call next time you are headed to Florence.


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Astra Nomik 4 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

I love this Will. I loved the ending too, as I wasn't expecting the Titanic to end up here too. What a great story writer you are :)


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marcoujor 4 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

With Becky's review as my guide, I need a catch up day with Will...

Wanted to check out your latest... what a timely treat, with good outweighing evil in a most unexpected way.

Voted UP & ABI-- Have a peaceful night, Maria


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drbj 4 years ago from south Florida

Serves that varlet right, Will. He was a dastard and losers always lose. Great story and perfect ending. Voted up naturally.


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ImKarn23 4 years ago

OMFG...almost got coffee on the screen at the ending, Will! I was wondering how you could possibly wrap this up - it seemed poor jacob and mary were doomed to lose the ranch, fer sure! shysters were more difficult to google back then..lol. PS. i LOVE harvey! sigh...whadda Man..


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Twilight Lawns 4 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

Yup! And that was just the first chapter, Will.

That guy was tall end elegant, but he wasn't so tall that he looked weird in that ball gown he borrowed, and he wasn't so manly that he looked out of place as an English heiress, and he wasn't so weak that he couldn't row that lifeboat like a true British Aristocrat when he had jumped in when that pesky Captain had called out, "Women and children, first."

OK, so the Titanic went down, but Jonas Black managed to be rescued with the lucky ones who had boarded at Southampton... and being a clever man, I had remembered to bring his “documents” along for the ride.

So he was delayed, but by only a couple of days, and well within the time set down by that White Whiskered Lovable Judge.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Will do, Mike!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Astra. I'm reading some of your work.


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Shihab Mahmud 4 years ago from Dhaka

awesome .............


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you drbj!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi ImKarn23!

I just can't let evil win. Maybe next time.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Ian, and thanks for the comments. Sorry, but no chapter two...those boots they found on the ocean floor belonged to our Jonas...so sad.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Shihab Mahmud, and welcome to HubPages!


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Amy Becherer 4 years ago from St. Louis, MO

I came to the end, saw one line left to the conclusion, and couldn't imagine the grand finale, thinking "damn, it's continued", until I saw "Titanic". Brilliant, Will, I love everything about this story!


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TToombs08 4 years ago from Somewhere between Heaven and Hell without a road map.

A very timely piece, Will. Nicely done, and I loved the ending. *chuckle*


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Amy!

Thank you!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, TToombs!


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Movie Master 4 years ago from United Kingdom

Will, this has to be your best!

I was waiting for the twist and could see there was just a couple of lines left - how do you fit a twist in a couple of lines? I thought this must just be part 1!!!

Brilliant!


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Twilight Lawns 4 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

And I take it, Will, that those boots they found on the ocean floor were not only Jonas's but that he was still wearing them.

Shame.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, Lesley, and thank you for the great comment!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Ian,

Our lad, Jonas, was after all, a thief, so he looted the Titanic's abandoned cabins, filling his pockets with gold and silver. Alas, he waited too long, and when the ship broke in two, he was cast into the cold waters and went straight to the bottom with his heavy loot.

Solicitor Simon Trivol, upon hearing the news that his plans had failed, was so distraught that he had a stroke, and never recovered. He died a pauper.


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Twilight Lawns 4 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

And that lad, Jonas, showed so much promise. If he had survived, he could have become a banker, and not only looted a few cabins, but looted the pockets of the poor, the rich and the needy. Well, not the rich, he wouldn't want to alienate his brothers in arms.

Imagine what a dynasty he would have founded.


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Ginn Navarre 4 years ago

Hey! You da man---loved it as always.


khadeejah 4 years ago from Nigeria

I really enjoyed reading this story.The ending was superb.


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Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

An amazing story and here's my Up up and away !!!

Here's to so many more for us to share Will so keep them coming.

Take care and enjoy your day.

Eddy.


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Teresa Schultz 4 years ago from East London, in South Africa

What a splendid twist at the end! I enjoyed the beginning almost as much. Your use of only dialogue in the beginning sucks a reader right in - and then you follow that up with something I used to get excited about trying to perfect (with not much luck) - "Angie could wheel her chair onto the porch of a morning" - the scene is set - without describing the woman at that stage, or without first saying why she was in wheelchair. You suggest and set a scene, a feeling, without needing to go into detail about it - a difficult task for a writer, superbly executed by yourself. Your stories inspire me to try my hand at creative writing again, since I've somewhat left that kind of writing behind.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Ian,

The poor and needy don't have any money to loot!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Ginn!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, khadeejah, and thank you.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Eddy!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Teresa!

I'd love to read your creative writing. Feel free to contact me if I can be of any help.


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mizjo 4 years ago from New York City, NY

A fitting end to an unscrupulous bounder. Few things make me so mad as a thief who takes what he has not worked for nor deserves, especially when doing so causes someone else a lot of hardship.

Good moral tone. Voted up.


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SilentReed 4 years ago from Philippines

Held in suspense as the ending loom, it was a masterful stroke using the "Titanic". That was no twist at the end...more like being bushwhack.:)


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Rusti Mccollum 4 years ago from Lake Oswego, Oregon

I really enjoy your work. You have an amazing insight! thanks!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, mizjo!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi, SilentReed!

Bushwhacked is an apt description!

^_^


Diane Reece 4 years ago

I CHUCKLED OUT LOUD ON THIS ONE WILL! AT ANY MOMENT, WE CAN'T SEE THE OUTCOME OF A SITUATION BUT FAITH CAN WORK MIRACLES!

I PRAY YOU'LL NEVER STOP WRITING!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Diane! Best to both of you.


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mckbirdbks 4 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

So, Jonas Black, set out to track, oh that mighty greenback, climbed aboard a ship doomed to crack, and his first thought ‘this could be a drawback’ and from what I hear he won’t be back.


Dani Novoa 4 years ago

I love the detailed and established time/period for this short at the very beginning of the story. I was coming up to the last few lines thinkin this is not fair...hows is the wrong going to be righted....and it turned out only 1 sentence was needed to right the wrong.... :)

Great Short!!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Mike, and no back-talk!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Dani (my sister-in-law!) and thank you, sweetie!

^_^


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karmicfilly 4 years ago from Franklin, TN

Loved the story and surprise ending. Really well written and love the setting and backstory. Thanks for a good read.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, karmicfilly! I checked your Hubs and was delighted! I'm now a follower.


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Levertis Steele 4 years ago from Southern Clime

"Well, I'll be dogged!" This reminds me of the ending of "The Interlopers" by Saki. One word explained the ending of his story: "Wolves!"

Another great one!


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Twilight Lawns 4 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

One of my favourite writers of all time Levertis Steele.

'Beasts and Superbeasts' makes me laugh out loud and Gabriel Ernest must be the blackest and funniest short stories ever.


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you again, Levertis Steele!


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Levertis Steele 4 years ago from Southern Clime

Twilight Lawns:

""'Beasts and Superbeasts' makes me laugh out loud and Gabriel Ernest must be the blackest and funniest short stories ever.""

I have not read them, But I will very soon.

Thanks for sharing them..


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htodd 4 years ago from United States

Thanks a lot for this nice post ..nice story


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, htodd!


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LABrashear 4 years ago from My Perfect Place, USA

I loved this. I got close to the end and thought "there's not much left...is this going to be a two-parter?" Then, like true WillStarr style, you took a twist and a turn and surprised us all. Another one well done!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, LABrashear! It was fun to write!


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50 Caliber 4 years ago from Arizona

Dang Will, I just sat down again with an Ice cold Mexican Coke, from little fridge where I keep them and my favorite root beers, the temperature is perfect, they frost to ice when you pop the top in the old motel wall opener I appropriated on sight from an old flagstone motel up Indiana way that had the furnishings it was built with, including the blue striped twill covered mattress stuffed with cotton, hard as a rock save for the wire support between springs, member those? Anyway back to the cola.....

That was not just a twist it was a atom bomb twist that blew Coke out my nose, I laughed out loud and I'm adding you to the list of people that owe me a new key board, I left the plastic shield on my monitor so that's easy, even put out my cigarette in the ashtray.

It's been a while since I got tied up in word so tight that the punch winded me.

Kudos and all buttons up, you had me hooked on a last minute airplane dragging in to try the grift, and was thinking hard on how you'd untie this knot.

Peace,

dust


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Dusty, and I was actually laughing myself when I wrote that last word. I knew it was a good one!

^_*


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Patriette 4 years ago from Las Vegas, NV

Great story with a bittersweet ending. Voted Up, Will!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Patriette!


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Teylina 4 years ago

Just took time to read your hub again, and loved it even more this time around! Glad to see you acknowledge your smarts with a good laugh at the last word! You should. It's what kept me keeping up w/comments when I'm already way behind!


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WillStarr 4 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

In order for a story to please the reader, it must first please the writer. Writing with a final twist is like playing a practical joke…it’s all in the punch line!


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Billrrrr 2 years ago from Cape Cod

Aeroplanes in a western sky noisily casting an ominous shadow and scaring the beeves while un-milking the cows: An unsinkable ship with four or five stacks belching poison out their tops: A cozy ranch house perched on the highest hill, with a porch so you can sit and whittle while the bacon, biscuits and beans are cooking. I love the juxtaposition of it all and it sure does illustrate the rapidity that saw our 'wild west' come and go in barely two generations.

Rarely in the history of the human creature, has so short an era produced such a wealth of literature and nostalgia.

It happened even back in the day. Ned Buntline, a notorius rascal, became famous in the 1870s for his sensational writings about Buffalo Bill Cody. Even as Cody was riding the range in Kansas; folks back in Boston were enjoying a cigar and a glass of wine at the Tremont hotel overlooking the Swan Boats in the Public Garden, while reading of the 'real and imagined' exploits of a cowpoke and hunter who was soon to become a world wide entertainment phenomenon.


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WillStarr 2 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Bill.


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grand old lady 2 years ago from Philippines

I love this story. It is very interesting from start to finish. I also love how fate determines justice and Jacob gets the land. Wonderful!


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WillStarr 2 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, GOL!

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