The Last Day of August

The last day of August,

and it was hot,

her mouth clamped around

a yellow catheter,

her chest pierced by a gunshot,

she went over to the westside

to buy some pot,

screams filled the sky,

and she was caught in a drive-by,

her mother racing with her toward

the emergency room,

it was going to be a long afternoon,

good kids going bad

was in such a demand,

her mother stroking her hand,

as she tries to wipe the blood

off her daughter’s pale skin,

the air was thin,

but she wanted to be there for her child

as she took most of it in,

she was hoping God

would visit that day,

it was something she’d say,

when she’d pray,

begging God for her daughter’s

survival,

but it was much too late,

she was already dead on arrival.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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LaThing 4 years ago from From a World Within, USA

Another of your touching poems..... You painted a very vivid picture of reality, so clear, so heartrending! Voting up and awesome, Frank!


Valleypoet 4 years ago

I don't read your work so as to expect happy endings, because they are few and far between. I read it for its quality, style and realism, and you never disappoint. Thank you Frank, another big vote up:-))


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Frank this is such a sad poem, when her mother was praying.

Voted upupup AWESOME, Joyce.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks LaThing for visiting the last day of August.. and thank you Valleypoet.. yeah I wish I had the knack to write happy endings :( and thank you Joyce for being loyal


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poetvix 4 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

Oh, man, talk about a nightmare. I don't know how you do it. It's less than a page but every word pulls me in and rips my heart out.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Nobody writes about 'raw' life and death as you do Frank, you are an expert in this area and your words conjure up such vivid images.


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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

Awesome, Frank!!! There is just something about your writing that makes one keep on scrolling and scrolling down so fast, so as to keep up with what is being read, and I know I have probably said this on your others pieces, but it is so true. The tension builds and builds and then abruptly comes to halt. Vividly painted words to describe the real deal here, dear Frank. Amazing. Voted Way Up In His Love, Faith Reaper


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phdast7 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

Well done. Every mother knows that fear and dread and hope when their child is injured...and the rush to the hospital. Good poem. ~~ Theresa


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dghbrh 4 years ago from ...... a place beyond now and beyond here !!!

uffffffffffff a chilling tragedy to go by......though very captivating your poem is. Once i started i did not realized when it ended and the last line gave the twist to feel the kick in the heart for sure. You are amazing about the natural truth of life. There is such a raw appeal to the poem ! Thanks for sharing this one, Frank.

All votes up excluding the funny one. Shared already.

regards,

deergha


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Poetvix, Rosemay50, doggie and baby, and thank you Faith phdast7 and dghrb for visiting my last day of August bless you all for your comments... :) Frank


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Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

Great Frank ,your words never disappoint and here's to so many more to come my friend.

Eddy.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Eddy


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Hyphenbird 4 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

Frank you really put heart in these poems. They are all based on the sad part of life. No one could ever write of these tragedies like you do. Amazing.


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BlossomSB 4 years ago from Victoria, Australia

A great poem, Frank. You can see your background coming through and your compassion for those who come to a tragic end. You portray life in the raw so well.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Oh, yes Frank you know how to turn that emotion key. Passing this on.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Hyphen, blossomsb and gypsy rose you ladies rock! bless you all :)


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

You've stated it perfectly in so many poetic words. The crazy drug wars with their drive-bys and innocent victims. At least one who loved her was there at the end. I don't smoke it but pot needs to be decriminalized and sold legally so innocents like this girl don't support crim gangs and deadly neighborhoods. Up n awe as always Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks Alastar for your visit and your comment bless you bro :)


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Seeker7 4 years ago from Fife, Scotland

Frank your poems just go from awesome to well above that!! In a few short sentences you've given us a novel. Within a few short words we 'feel' for the characters! This is a very emotional and evocative description of life - beautiful, heartbreaking and the truth!

My friend you have a powerful command of words, imagery and emotion! Shared everywhere!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Seeker.. just bless you :) thanks for the visits

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