The Mack Truck Blues - Our Voices Poetry Day 8

I got hit so hard it blew out my eardrums
This dude is tough
What's the matter can't you get off the ground

Man you look mashed like potatoes
What's that you aren't waking up
Oh shoot you better run


Funny isn't it how life can get Macked Up!

Silly truckers driving out of control
Silly drivers trucking out of control
One lane isn't enough for the two of us


Stay in your lane Dammit!




For I'm a Mack Truck Buddy :)

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Nellieanna 3 years ago from TEXAS

Clever juxtaposition, Mike!


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Nellieanna, thanks so much for that cool comment and for sharing. :) Yup yup! it was a fun poem to write & I'll do more.


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billybuc 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

You did a nice job with this one, Mike....God bless the Mackers in the world. :)


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

LOL bro! I remember many times almost getting clipped off the road by them darn Macks! so I had to fully represent for them here with this different style poem. Hah!

Thanks bro for commenting and for sharing as you do best!

:)


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida

Ha ha! Funny, Mike - but deadly, too!


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Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

Yes, I've almost been mowed over on my hour commute into work and back home during the week! I always be sure and pray that the Lord send angels ahead of me to clear the way, and so far so good, until He is ready for me to come home. I have been doing that drive for over five years now.

Voted up +++ and sharing

God bless, Faith Reaper


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@bravewarrior, LoL its quite funny when them words clash on the screen, but yeah not in real life. Thanks for the cool comment and for sharing.


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Cantuhearmescream 3 years ago from New York

Mike,

Ahhhh! I love it! Something tells me you've got your own little unique style. I hope it's cool that I laughed when I read it :-) I couldn't help but paint a mental image... too funny!

Up, funny and awesome!

Cat


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Faith Reaper, yeah them darn massive machines are scary indeed. I try to stay away from them and I always pass them while driving with extreme caution, but super quickly so not to get caught around their evasive moves to change lanes :)

Thanks for caring to give this poem a good read, and for sharing with me once more as you do Faith. You are such a sweetheart and a cool friend to me.


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Cantuhearmescream, I try my best to shatter the box of the normal train of thought patterns that surface most poetry, I also try to drag bits and pieces of hard core reality into the picture in a different frame of reference.

It also helps my mind to heal in many ways somehow, and from over thinking about certain things all the time. It's a relaxing outlet for sure. I love this poetry game so much.

Thanks for showing and spreading the hublove for me, I shall return the favor soon for sure Cat!


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always exploring 3 years ago from Southern Illinois

I once knew a trucker....That's another syory...I digress..Hee..Funny one Mike...


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@always exploring, that must of been quite the experience indeed Ruby :)

Thanks again for spreading the much needed love. I hope more folks find time to do so for each other as well.


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Isaac White 3 years ago from Welcome to my beautiful world, where magic is no longer a myth.

int4eresting point. nice job. voted up.

I. White


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Cantuhearmescream 3 years ago from New York

Mike,

That's what I love about poetry; it is what we say it is. There are so many different versions here and I must say, yours is certainly in a league of it's own! :-) I like the idea of jumping out of the box and addressing harsh realities... not everything is rainbows and butterflies. Sometimes when all we see is others enjoying rainbows and butterflies, it makes us question ourselves. See, I come over here and it makes me feel just a little more normal :-)

I too am looking to be a little more experimental. I get ideas in my head... but I am afraid that I will scare people :-) I guess this is the best place of any to try huh?

Keep 'em coming!

Cat


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Deborah Brooks 3 years ago from Brownsville,TX

How many times Mike have i screamed stay in your lane.. You IDIOTS.. lol

I love your poems you expressed what i feel.. blessings my friend

sharing

Debbie


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rebeccamealey 3 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

This could refer to people, too, I think. Cute poem, and well illustrated!


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Isaac White, Thanks for the interest and for sharing with me.


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Cantuhearmescream, yes indeed Cat this is the proverbial testing grounds for scary thoughts as well as the rainbow bright ones :) LOL

I so enjoy it here on Hubpages and definitely not for the monetary values, because that sort of thing been nonexistent for me here for the most part, and even after reaching 400+ hubs.

I so love the community much more than anything else, we have so much fun on hubpages and off, and I live for this form of socializing online, because there is no other realm in the known universe like it.

Double :) Oh and you better I will continue plugging away like no other.


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Cantuhearmescream 3 years ago from New York

Mike,

I couldn't agree with you more! DisneyLand ain't got nothin' on HP; this is the Happiest Place on Earth! :-)

I came here as a stranger, thinking about the potential to make money... now that I'm here, the money isn't my motivation... the hubbers are! :-)

I've never been surrounded by so many supportive and encouraging people in one place and time... it amazes me how the online community can bring people together that would've otherwise never crossed paths!

Keep 'em coming!

Cat


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Deborah Brooks, Yup I hate them moments when folks hop onto my lane and almost run me off the road, but you know sometimes its just that silly blindspot :)

Thanks Deb for the much needed hublove, you are so cool!


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ImKarn23 3 years ago

LUUUUVE this!!! Awesome analogy, Mikey! All too true, sooo well said - such subtlty with such a huge message!

did i mention - i LUUUUUUUUUVED this?

voting/sharing


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tsmog 3 years ago from Escondido, CA

I love it Mike. I thank you from the bottom of the heart sharing plain 'ol truth as poem. Just awakening from sleep I now have a smile, though outside the suns is hid by overcast. For Real! Garden has no bees, no butterflies, yet Fred the hummingbird is dancing in the sage.

First thought, oops, better not 'tis would be a spoiler, tread not there. The second was I pondered a metaphor with a poem written and is here of Tomas Trasntromer.

Bottom line is pondering toot-t00t of I think I can, I think I can or Popeye's pipe. Seems a choice of either with or as none of. Then I realized seemed closer to a "Convoy" and what a song that was with a list of actors just as long.

With a big 10-4 of the 411, pounding the get of go with long gone, switching from the CB to the ET, no channel surfing while riding the wave of just right seeing a prism casting spells hanging on a hanger of all things.

From Frisco to NY is bound by a train, and next is only 5 shifts with 2 skipped as missed of one tired driver with one set of books for Johnny to read at bedtime. 4o Acres of tilled soiled, near a drought, seeds a pop'n like sprigs instead.

Got a cat sitting up front purrring like a sleeping lion, and is an oldie borrowed of my second pappy flying the tag "Four Winds" heading to there from here.

Thanks again for offering a bunch, apologize for the space, although is about 8 lanes, + four heading there, and +4 the same way. Offering a wave passing by at the middle knowing there is next week, time, and maybe a picnic at a rest stop just giggling of this and that. I'll be offering the waves a share of more than . . .

tim


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@rebeccamealey, lol yeah this poem is very different indeed, and isn't meant to be taken literally. I always try my best to load up my poems with subliminal messages, and even when it may appear to be very obvious what I was trying to point out at times.

Thanks for the cool comment and for sharing!


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@cantuhearmescream, you've caught on lovely. This community is untouchably awesome indeed :) & I know that's not a word Hah!


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@ImKarn23, Thanks my lovely friend and pen pal, I owe you a few around the bend. Will repay the favoritism soon indeed :)

Loving you back is a shear pleasure to me and very good I'd might add Leslie in a digital sense, "Me Love you long time." Grins from cheek to cheek. Stop making me blush!


Michael Milec 3 years ago

Hello Clod Explorer.

Admirable. Choosing proper words, to say so beautifully as you've said requires knowledge and integrity , and how done it superbly .

Enjoied and shared.

Voted up and interesting.


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

You're one funny dude Tsmog, thanks for sharing with me and for choosing to read my hub here and for commenting.


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Michael Milec, Thanks for the cool comment, I had some good fun with this poem and I'm glad you liked it. Also thanks for sharing it for me, I appreciate your kindness.


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Cantuhearmescream 3 years ago from New York

CloudExplorer,

I apologize for my tardiness; some say "Better late than never" others say "Better never than late"... I tend to not like the others ;-)

Hey, I've realized a long time ago, if you say a word with confidence, people believe it's a word :-)

Cat


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Now this one reminded me of Eddie Rabitt singing - I'm just driving my life away....


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Cantuhearmescream, believing is the easy part, showing that you actually are part of what you believe in is the tough part. Thanks for showing again that you care. Chat with you whenever Cat, you are a fun person to engage with.


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@Gypsy Rose Lee, Thanks for visiting and for sharing Rasma. Its cool that you thought that about my poem here :)


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MrsBrownsParlour 3 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

Traffic poetry, I love it! You are an original. :-) ~Lurana


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

@MrsBrownsParlour, LOL yeah I had to fully represent for all the truckers in the world, and for us little smaller vehicle drivers who hate them bullying us on the road :)

Thanks for sharing with me in all the fun! it was a pleasure to write it for sure.


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Cantuhearmescream 3 years ago from New York

CloudExplorer,

Aw thanks, I think you're nifty too :D

What you said is true... how could I show I'm actually a part of what I believe in if I didn't come back and say "Hell yeah!" :D

Cat


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CloudExplorer 3 years ago from New York City Author

:D Ditto @Cantuhearmescream :)

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