The Night's Sky


The scent of her perfume enveloped the pair,

as they danced,

soft music filled the air,

they were in a romantic trance,

their hearts were beating rhythmically,

close together with no distance,

not a chance,

love intensified,

he felt electrified,

and she was satisfied,

they were thrilled to be alive,

as he closed his eyes,

he felt her warm cheek

brush against his,

his knees felt weak,

and only her eyes would speak,

holding her close was pure delight,

as the night’s sky

illuminated the room through an overhead skylight,

it was a beautiful sight,

she had so much fun,

their two shadows melted into one,

their dancing continued,

and the love they were sharing,

was so caring,

then their kisses,

It was so daring,

that was quite a show,

but it all happened over fifty years ago,

they have a past,

the memories would last,

she was the love of his life,

his beautiful wife.

"911..."

"It’s my wife, She stopped breathing."

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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Just Ask Susan 5 years ago from Ontario, Canada

An ending I was not expecting.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Just Ask, but it was a beginning I wasn't expecting..LOL thanks for your comments all of them


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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Good Lord , these poets are Resurrecting Shakespeare, for love is truly blind .

Thoughtful Poem.

There you go brethren Frank a wonderful start to this cold morning, but the sun is out.

Bless.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Sky for stopping by


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Hey big number... thanks for reading.. SkyGuy as you refer is a loyal fan and friend.. his comments r genuine.. as for reading my stuff i don't know, but you can join Hubpages and read lots of great work and hubs take ..Just Ask Susan.. amazing hubber... so what im saying is .. hop aboard :) Frank


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Deborah Brooks 5 years ago from Brownsville,TX

wow Frank a beautiful Poem, so romantic... the ending wow.. took me my surprise. voted up and beautiful...need a surprise button.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks Our Ms Brooks, your comments are delightful :)


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writer20 5 years ago from Southern Nevada

wonderful poem to read this morning and the shocked me, great writer. Voted up and and of course awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much writer20.. although I wish I had the skills you have to keep the writing soft :) Bless you


Poetic Fool 5 years ago

Using the flashback as the bulk of the poem really made the ending so much more effective. Voted up and awesome.


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Seeker7 5 years ago from Fife, Scotland

This poem is awesome!! The ending is so unexpected but I think it's a very thoughtful and profound way to end. When you loose someone you love, the memories of your happiest times together are the most powerful - to the point that you can feel you are almost back there with them again, before reality brings all crashing back down again! Have bookmarked as a favourite - I loved this!


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks Poetic Soul and Seeker7 for stopping by and reading my short write :)


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sofs 5 years ago

Oh wow!! It was all fine until the end... but really, I love the end. Great work!


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thank you sofs


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justateacher 5 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Great writing, loved it and was surprised at the end.


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Beata Stasak 5 years ago from Western Australia

Poetic start to a bright future and then sudden loss...at the end...the cycle of life and death:)...thanks for sharing Frank...


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much Justateacher and Beata Stasak for stopping to look at the Night's sky :) FRank


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Senoritaa 5 years ago

I knew something sinister was coming, it was all looking too good to be true!!!!


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Frank Atanacio 5 years ago from Shelton Author

LOL Senoritta.. when all seems lost..right? thanks for reading


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Hyphenbird 4 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

I was feeling the dance and the relationship. I recall dancing that way one night in a bar with the love of my life. So this rang a romantic bell with me. Then....a cymbal shook the earth. You really know how to set the scene and set up the reader.


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bettybarnesb 4 years ago from Bartlett, TN

Hey Frank! beautiful words of love and sweetness of memories from my past. Thank you for sharing. You are a passionate writer.

Be blessed...


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Hyphen for reading my Night Sky.. bless you


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Betty for visiting my Night Sky :) thanks for the compliment


lovedoctor926 4 years ago

I was in a trance till you called 911.. 50 yrs is a long time damn! Lol. Voted + sweet @ adoring


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you doc for stopping by the night's sky :)


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thelyricwriter 3 years ago from West Virginia

Just when I thought this was starting to get hot and spicy, surprise ending. LOL The suspense! Awesome, beautiful, interesting, and up Frank. Clever :)


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Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

Glad I caught this Frank, don't think I have read any of your poetry. Again it could be true, that is how I read you, it always seems so real. Surprise ending, yes. Glad you didn't kill her, lol. ^


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much the lyricwriter Theater Girl and Jackie Lynnley for stopping by and checking out my Night Sky :) bless you


christinemariezzz 2 years ago

Frank,

"....911..."

No, really...yea, it is. But didn't expect it!

Photo:

Perfect! Resigning to your ending I can see the bereaved in your poem in the foreground of this bluehorizon. Glad to see this one pulled out of your stacks today.

~christinemarie


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Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much christine :) bless you


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pstraubie48 21 months ago from sunny Florida

Awww the beauty of love's sweet ardor carries us onward. I could see my precious parents here...

feeling the love and the sorrow so vividly shared within these lines.

Angels are on the way to you this morning (in the wee hours :D).

ps

Voted up+++ and shared


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Frank Atanacio 21 months ago from Shelton Author

PS Thank you for jumping on board bless you ")


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tillsontitan 21 months ago from New York

Aw geeze Frank. You certainly had me with this one. I was reading along thinking, wow, Frank wrote a beautifully, romantic poem and BAMM, you sent that ending in to really grab us. I had to read it again to make sure.

VERY well done.

Voted up, awesome, beautiful, and interesting. We really need a thrilling or chilling button!


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Frank Atanacio 16 months ago from Shelton Author

LOL thank you Til.. sorry bout that :(

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