The Old Man In A Dark Suit


The young girl sat mute,

staring, glaring,

at the old man in a dark suit,

and that old man sat collected,

his hands folded on the table,

she was there, but he was still alone,

his face was so gaunt,

it could haunt,

and the veins on his temples

showed as if carved out of stone,

and what protruded through his skin was bone,

he was living,

but he had no life in his eyes,

she moved her head away from him

towards the windows, towards the skies,

and she wanted to run for the door,

but he rose to pace the floor,

at that moment fear would coat,

and her screams died in her throat,

her emotions were trapped,

like an animal in a cage,

he stared at her,

and his face had that long

drawn expression of both sadness and outrage,

there was despair, and that was clear,

as the young girl’s moist face

contorted with fear,

the old man’s soul manifesting

only the barest trace

of compassion,

her fear tumbles and flips,

and a small dry cry

finally escaped the young girl’s lips.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Oh you made me shiver! So much left often here--I love it!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Audrey you are just way too kind :) Frank


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

OH MY... the way you tell stories with just a few short words.. and scares the living day lights out of me.. I am ready to run for the door.. LOL... You are a great writer...I voted up and awesome...


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GClark 4 years ago from United States

Interesting and scary! Made me want to learn the rest of the story - maybe I have too much imagination.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much Our Ms Brooks.. you are way too kind.. and GClark .. welcome to my page :) FRank


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Opps--I meant--"left open" to the imagination--must be the cold medication talking!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Audrey because it's you all is forgiven :) LOL


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

What a feeling of helplessness, of being trapped by something abhorrent and menacing. Human beings can read emotions and intentions very well on faces and I don't envy the young girl at all, not at all. Chilling one Frank!


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epigramman 4 years ago

...you always inspire me Frank - greatly - you are a master storyteller of suspense - and quite frankly Frank (pardon the pun) one of my favorite poets of all time here at the Hub - you put a lot of creative ideas into my head too - and when yer talkin' the epi-man that's a good thing indeed lol lol lake erie time 11:54pm


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suhana16 4 years ago from Delhi

Interesting from starting to end. Voted up :)


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Sky9106 4 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

That's the effect they have on you , drawing you in with every line , have ing your eyes transfixed in a glaze as they protrude with fear and eagerness, making the sockets hurt in with fear and expectation of the next and then he takes it away ,reminding you , that it's a poem and not a book and that you must wait for tomorrow , but rest assured tomorrow will come, it's not a promise in vain , as he remains the same , every time , a man to his word, and you will feel that fear again and again . It's the great poetic work of Mr. Frank Antanacio .

Hold that strain he will come again to haunt and impress your mind with his trade . My brethren Frank.

Great work.

Bless.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Thanks so much Alaster for your comment.. Epigramman simple, you da man! Suhana thanks for dropping by.. and Sky your comment is better than my poem your check is in the mail LOL :)


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Sky9106 4 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

From you good. Then it shall surely work well towards , commanding the attention to that place where it sits , under your great poem.

Give Thanks and praises.

Bless.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Sky you're the best!


Sueswan 4 years ago

Awesome Frank. Fear certainly does paralyze us.


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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven

Frank your writing scares me in a good way. lol. Great read.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks again Sue for stopping by.. and Caroline thank you :) Frank


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Debby Bruck 4 years ago

Frank ~ Quite frightening for if this were true. Your poems fit the genre of the 'horror' category, where I usually do not tread. I like to stay on the bright side. Life hands us enough challenges. Blessings, Debby


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks debby and I do understand tread happy my friend tread happy


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Sky9106 4 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

You are delivering messages that are sticking to the very core. Reminding me of Da. and you will say that's where you met me. That's where you are going to show that part two.

It's your worlds, I am only passing through.

Bless brethren.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks for revisiting this page Sky your cool bro :)

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