The Orange Comet

Submission #1 for the Monterey County Weekly 101 words or less short story contest

© By Drew A. Blanc - JKP

By the outer back passenger door Lucian was standing. Smoking menthol's, exhaling out billows of what seem like blue translucent smoke. She left mad and on foot. It was her auburn hair that first caught his attention. Then the smile. “What was I thinking,” he said out loud, softly to himself. Gazing upward, the panoramic unobstructed starry skies left him feeling microscopic and insignificant. Peripherally, to his right, blazing across his Northern canvass, an orange comet pierced the inauspicious night. Not heard, but seen and traced. Fleeting, as was her, with a glowing citrus pigmented appendage. Hating metaphors again.

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Beth100 3 years ago from Canada

Amazing how much one can say with so few words. A whole story -- many can learn from this!

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