The Proximity of the Darkest Point


In and out of the fog

the moon would slip,

all night long

I stood on the deck of the haunted ship,

the dark clouds would flip,

and oddly some seagulls would dip,

the shadows were gone

as the hours moved towards dawn,

the ghost ship did set sail,

as seagulls lingered for hours

at a nearby rail,

my eyes fixed on the gangplanks,

swaying,

haunting music began playing,

the lights in the sky

grew dim and small,

as the darkness stood tall,

voices from a distance would cry,

no reason, no one knew why,

ghosts would move out of the darkness

along the shore,

then the rains would pour,

it would batter the deck without caution,

and that’s when I felt my greatest exhaustion,

and it was very clear,

sheer terror,

and I had never known that kind of fear,

no sudden sense of safety,

as the danger grew near,

the haunting came as it should,

yet I stood on the deck

for as long as I could,

thinking, eyes blinking,

and the feeling I had in my stomach

was sinking,

I would stand to face the ghosts,

while the others would hide,

the ghost ship began first to shiver,

then jerk violently to one side,

causing my feet to slide,

then I fell overboard into the currents,

and there I would explore

my darkest ride,

only to have my body wash up on shore.

© 2011 Frank Atanacio

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Lord De Cross 5 years ago

the darkest side.. a hidden untold rule you must abide by... the clearest mind will surface anew, that is the beauty inside the one that would see us through. NIce poem Frank! Not mushy, just comenting

LORD


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Vinaya Ghimire 5 years ago from Nepal

I don't know if I'm in The Proximity of the Darkest Point, but it is mid night in Kathmandu


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justateacher 5 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

You poetry evokes feelings of every kind...wish I had near the talent that you do!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 5 years ago from Portland, Oregon

dark. very well written. Voted up n stuff!


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Sky9106 5 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Beautiful to put your face ,your presence in every scene, you are not guessing you are there.

The assurance to know you poet is there, as you rise from every dream , as you describe how you listen every scream, whether screaming from the terror , or just washed up on some distant shore , you are there and your presence make it all for us a beautiful ride.

It's a pleasure reading and commenting on that which you write great poems Frank.

Blessings.


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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

Very dark,with an intense metre.

I really enjoyed it and have to vote up up and away!!

I wish you a great day.

Eiddwen.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much guys for reading!!!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon

you're welcome frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks again


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go-barbara-go 4 years ago

Wow....


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks go-barbara :)


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Cyndi10 4 years ago from Georgia

This really fits the season with its darkness. I should have waited 'til the night to read it. So well done.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

lol thanks Cyndi for stopping by :)


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Moms-Secret 4 years ago from Central Florida

I remember being on a ship in the dead of a moonless night. With no light in sight you could not see in the darkness where the ship ended and the ocean began. You could not see your hand in front of your face. Scary but beautiful. In that darkness it seemed that you could not fit one more star into that sky.

You would like that. You are into mixing beauty with terror.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you moms for visiting my beauty with terror..LOL stay sweet :)


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LadyFiddler 2 years ago from Somewhere in the West

Hi Frank this was very clever and nice :)

All the best in your future poems

Have a lovely day

`~~Ladyfiddler~~`


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btrbell 2 years ago from Mesa, AZ

Dark, intense and emotional! I felt your words! Thank you!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Lady and btrbell for checking out my poem


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wayne barrett 2 years ago from Clearwater Florida

I love it. Great piece, Frank.


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Minnetonka Twin 2 years ago from Minnesota

This is a hauntingly beautiful piece of work. The foreboding emotions the poem evokes, makes it a great read. Voted up and hit many buttons.


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Phyllis Doyle 2 years ago from High desert of Nevada.

To face one';s demons is the only way through the dark side we often encounter. Die to the dark side to emerge in the light.

Great poem, dear friend Frank.

Voted Up, A, B and H+


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word55 2 years ago from Chicago

That's the way life is sometimes. Every day is not sunshine and blue skies. Sometimes are haunting. We must know the darkest in order to appreciate

the brightest. Keep up the magnificent work Frank.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Wayne, Minnestonka twin, Phyllis -- always good to see you and word 55 for checking out the darkness


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DealForALiving 2 years ago from Earth

My favorite lines by far:

then jerk violently to one side,

causing my feet to slide,

then I fell overboard into the currents,

and there I would explore

my darkest ride,


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Anna Haven 2 years ago from Scotland

Good use of rhythm Frank and a twisting dark tale to savour.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Dealforaliving, Anna Haven for reading my Proximity....:)

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