The Remains of Elegance

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For what do we put on gloves?

why do we open doors?

to whom do we bow?

what is the point

when our business

our cherished entertainment

is the work of a peeping Tom.


When nothing is sacred

feeling all needs to be exposed

presidents caught in foreign sheets

actors, athletes are made indiscreet

perhaps need drives

as evil thrives in privacy.


But should we leave mystery?

Is a diet of the sorted a healthy fare?

do we abandon elegance

when we hold ourselves in such a way

where we consider all men

as our equals

without privacy entering in.


for they, our vaunted idols in the flesh,

dance naked before our eyes

in order to get our attention.

we demand they strip

before and after they are paid

that we might examine every blemish

and make much hay.


Watching them at their worst

mocking them in their hours of need

perhaps they need more then we

strippers need fortification

even fully clothed.

the networks leave little to the imagination


Perhaps modesty, privacy, gentility, elegance,

have their own ways of keeping matters in check

when the powerful feared scandal

then in public

they didn't seek approval

by giving us a show

that would make our forbearers blush.


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RighterOne 4 years ago from Chicago, Illinois - USA

I like it, but a bit too abstract...


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Jaggedfrost 4 years ago Author

Is there a way you see that would make it less so?


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pstraubie48 4 years ago from sunny Florida

To respond to your comment, perhaps if you could rework it a tad bit to make it a little more clear sooner of what yous speak.

I think what you are recounting for us is the most recent political forays /how they were naked before us/how they had secrets that even their forefathers would find embarrassing..to put it succinctly...there was more there and it should stay...but just tip off your reader a little sooner. That being said, I am NO poet so I may not be the best one to offer you constructive criticism. one thing is for certain...it made me think, and I like that. ps


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Jaggedfrost 4 years ago Author

Thanks you for that feed back pstraubie48. I will reconsider the poem in that light. I am flattered and glad that it made you think. That is a large part of what one such as I asks for out of my work. Thanks for stopping by.


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RighterOne 4 years ago from Chicago, Illinois - USA

I also responded to your request yesterday, but from my Galaxy SIII - and somehow, the comment did not go through/got deleted.

I simply said that if you would stick a little closer to the components of meaning of the word 'elegance,' at least at first, it would be much more focused in its meaning. However, I love your style overall.


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Jaggedfrost 4 years ago Author

The next commenter had a similar query so I went back and considered my work in that light. I made some improvements. I hope they satisfy my proximity to the subject. I appreciated your response it just needed more meat to it which you have now provided so thank you for that.


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RighterOne 4 years ago from Chicago, Illinois - USA

My pleasure. By the way, I have a few poems of my own - please check them out.

Also, do you enjoy well-written, deep, semi-documentary prose? If so, might I entice you to read and critique my hubNovel - 'Fall of an Empire'.

It's about the fall and disappearance of a global ice-age empire (cerca 13, 000 yrs ago).

I would appreciate it and of course return the favor. Just ask! Plus, I'm sure you'll love it! =)

Cheers!


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Jaggedfrost 4 years ago Author

I admit to having started it but my lack of familiarity with flight or aviation had somewhat hampered my efforts.


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RighterOne 4 years ago from Chicago, Illinois - USA

Please skip ch. 1 for the time being then - I promise, it is not all so technical for the most part. Or simply power through it focusing in on the parts you do get. I designed it to infuse knowledge naturally, as you imagine the situation being described....


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Jaggedfrost 4 years ago Author

I will make another attempt then. I am find of subtle infusions of known technical concepts or third person accounts of expertise with conversations that prove and improve understanding with your readership

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