The Ring Upon Your Finger Isn't Mine


Many of my poems are lyrics to songs I have written, some still awaiting tunes. This is one.

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That distant look upon your face

Your eyes are icy blue

Though I hold you in my embrace

It seems I can't touch you

You turn your head and walk away

It hurts me more than I can say

I know you think of him from time to time

The ring upon your finger isn't mine


That ring's become a token

Of promises long broken

That he served up to you like bitter wine

And though you give yourself to me

You can't give up his memory

The ring upon your finger isn't mine


Slip the ring from off your finger

Tonight together we will linger

Making love until the dawn's sunshine

Show me again in every way

That you'll be mine alone one day

The ring upon your finger will be mine


Though I'm not fond of waiting

I'll wait anticipating

The day we join together for all time

This love will last eternity

For you and I are meant to be

And the ring upon your finger will be mine


© Copyright CPrice 2010 All Rights Reserved

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saddlerider1 6 years ago

I think that as long as you both LOVE each other deeply. The ring that you place on her finger will remain yours and hers and no one else will matter. For now be patient and let her forget him, if you truly are hers, then she will remain yours. Patience is a blessing, I hope you are both blessed with each others love forever. Peace bro


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Sorry Ken, the older I get the less patient I become.

But to ease your mind I should tell you that this poem, with some recent revisions, is one I wrote for my then girl friend a while back.

We celebrated our 25th wedding anniversary last April.

I'm glad you could relate to the story, but did you like the telling...words, phrasing, meter...points for originality?

Thanks for your feedback.

CP


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Wayne Brown 6 years ago from Texas

This would make a pretty darn good C&W song Chris. You might have to go for a chorus like: "Oh, that ring upon your finger isn't mine; Long as you wear I will whine. When he gave it to you he crossed the line, Oh, the ring up on your finger isn't mine...one more time!"...LOL...just kidding. This is a very good poem and it shows the depth of emotion associated with a relationship in which one party or the other looks back over their shoulder to the past. Good write! WB


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thank you WB.

Past relationships can burden us with baggage that would best be lost in transit.

It's funny how difficult it can be to write off a bad emotional investment even after the "X" has revealed themselves to be a two-timing worthless weasel.

Cue the steel guitar...

CP


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cerey_runyon 6 years ago from Galax Virginia

I am impressed!


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks Cerey.

I have to warn you, encouragement will just to to my head...then hopefully to my hand and to pen and paper...or keyboard.

I am glad you came aboard.

CP


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Jaynie2000 6 years ago

I also enjoyed it. Quite romantic. Glad to hear it comes with a happy ending.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

The satisfaction of a happy ending still rings true.

Thanks.

CP


ralwus 6 years ago

I can hear the sad fiddle and steel guitar in this. CW for sure, like an old truck driving song.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Or, in my case, an old truck driver's song.

Thanks.

CP


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Nellieanna 6 years ago from TEXAS

". . . still rings true." Nice play on the title!

Your style is yours. Don't be fretting about meter and phrasing. The best test of poetry, IMHO, is whether or not it has music and that is a personal, subjective response.

Write what pleases you - obviously it pleases many others and the consensus seems that it should be lyrics set to music. But, always, if it fails to please you, no other praise can substitute. It is SELF expression, after all.

By the way - there are at least 500 Christopher Prices on Facebook. You need to become FB friends with some hubbers so we can find you there.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

500 Christopher Prices on Facebook?

No worries...I'm the good looking one!

I'll try to make myself a bit more accessible. I'm nearly as new at FB as I am here on HP but I'll be OK.

I'll zip on over to FB and send you a friend request right away. Don't toy with me...you know how sensitive I am.

Hugs.

CP


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triosol 6 years ago

Hey CP,

I like this hub very much. thatswhy I become your FAN. Look forward to read more hubs from you in the near future.

Cheers


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks triosol.

Happy to welcome you aboard.

CP


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christopheranton 6 years ago from Gillingham Kent. United Kingdom

I'm glad to know that your love life has improved since you wrote that poem. Happy Silver Anniversary. Heres to the next twenty five.


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Christopher Price 6 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

christopheranton,

Uh, what does a love life have to do with marriage? You must be single.

After 25 years the silver is in my beard. As for the next 25, I suppose I'll serve out my sentence...not much chance of me getting off for good behavior.

Thanks.

CP


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Little Kim 5 years ago from Any town U.S.A.

Sad and happy. Hurts to wait. Knowing that you should be the one.


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Christopher Price 5 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks for stopping by and taking the time to comment, Kim.

I hope you'll linger and browse.

CP


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Little Kim 5 years ago from Any town U.S.A.

Your welcome. Look forward to reading more.


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Jamiehousehusband 5 years ago from Derbyshire, UK

Nice lyrics, could go Country and Western a la Tammy or Dolly, as Wayne said with a repetitive chorus or equally could be George Michaelesque. Original thanks.


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Christopher Price 5 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Thanks Jamie-

I feel the lyrics dictate a male voice, someone like John Michael Montgomery or Tim McGraw if we're talking Country.

Anyhow, glad you liked it. Feel free to stick around and browse when you have the time.

Cheers!

CP


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Gypsy Willow 5 years ago from Lake Tahoe Nevada USA , Wales UK and Taupo New Zealand

This poem gave me goose bumps as I read it. Nuff said!


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Christopher Price 5 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Gypsy Willow-

I'll take that as a good thing. Thanks very much for reading and taking time to comment.

CP


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Loveslove 5 years ago from England

beautiful poem ? song ? whichever it is its beautiful .


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Christopher Price 5 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Loveslove-

Lovely of you to drop by.

Until I can come up with a suitable tune, these lyrics will have to stand on their own. Thanks very much for your encouraging comment.

CP


Justsilvie 5 years ago

Lovely Poem! Glad it had a happy ending. Also know patience is a virtue, to a relationship it flies out of the window-


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Christopher Price 5 years ago from Vermont, USA Author

Justsilvie-

Thank you for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.

CP

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