The Shoes - A Will Starr Flash Fiction Response

The Shoes



Spring and balmy weather were a splendid combination for a street sale, so they brought out all the shoes and boots which were neatly tied together of course so there would be no confusion. It was their way to be tidy and organized.

The price was the same for any pair, and they stretched down the street and out of sight, because there were so many. The greedy buyers happily brought their new treasures to the sales stand where they paid a pittance.

Across the street and behind the electrified fences, the crematoriums quietly dispensed with the former owners.

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Jodah 8 months ago from Queensland Australia

Wow, Will you nailed it in less than a 100 words. Grim, but well done.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, John!


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Old Poolman 8 months ago from Rural Arizona

Interesting and unusual WillStarr. As always my mental pictures came to life when reading your work.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

It's the shortest story I've ever written Mike!


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Old Poolman 8 months ago from Rural Arizona

Short but delivers a very powerful message. This is proof you don't need to use 500 words to paint a picture that readers can see.


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Mandy Avery 8 months ago

amazing as always


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

And it's a true story at that, Mike. They actually did sell shoes and other articles they stole from their victims.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Mandy.


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resspenser 8 months ago from South Carolina

Mighty fine!


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Ronnie!


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Shyron E Shenko 8 months ago

Will,

Wow, walking without shoes

Shoes now on sale although they are used

No longer needed

By those abused

Traded for halos and wings all new

*

Will, this is gruesomely great.


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Ericdierker 8 months ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

Plenty to think about in so few words. Scary.


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always exploring 8 months ago from Southern Illinois

When I first read this I didn't get it, now I see the piece is about the extermination of the Jews. So powerful! Am I correct?


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breakfastpop 8 months ago

It is important to remember. Thank you......


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Shyron.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Eric.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

You are correct, Ruby Jean. It is also chilling that many of our young people either do not know this happened or deny that it happened.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

It is vital that we remember, Patti, but millions now deny that it ever happened as Iran and other Muslim states prepare to annihilate the Jews in Israel.


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always exploring 8 months ago from Southern Illinois

Oh my Lord! When is the hate going to stop? Why do people hate the Jewish people? I have read a lot about Hitler and his hate, but it still goes on today.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Most people are unaware that Middle Eastern Islamic leaders enthusiastically supported Hitler and the Nazi Party, Ruby Jean. The Jews have always was been persecuted and that is a fulfillment of prophesy.

The European/US antisemitism in the the last century was the reason Hitler chose the Jews to portray as the enemy of Germans and the cause of the Depression. After the war was over and people learned of the holocaust, the antisemitic behavior plummeted in shame, but now it's back again in full force. Our own president has demonstrated an obvious dislike of Israel (he sat in the pews of Jeremiah Wright's church for twenty years, listening to him demonize Jews!) and it is once again a political force in both Europe and the US.


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DreamerMeg 8 months ago from Northern Ireland

Very powerful piece of writing, telling a story in so few words.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Meg.


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Becky Katz 8 months ago from Hereford, AZ

This was unexpected, and really gruesome. It was fantastic though. It is the shortest story I have ever seen from you.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

It's flash fiction, Becky.

However, management agrees with you because this is the first Hub I ever published that they did not feature because it is 'not up to their high standards'.


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Becky Katz 8 months ago from Hereford, AZ

I am a fan of flash fiction, and management is not too aware of what is really desired.


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Jodah 8 months ago from Queensland Australia

Fortunately my version must have enough words to satisfy management, Will. It is featured. It is a pity they have trouble appreciating good creative writing and that size doesn't always constitute a good hub.


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always exploring 8 months ago from Southern Illinois

I agree Jodah. Will's piece told the story so well in a few words, after all, that's the whole idea with flash fiction.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Hi Becky, John, and Ruby Jean

This is the definition of flash fiction:

flash fic┬Ětion

noun

fiction that is extremely brief, typically only a few hundred words or fewer in its entirety.

I tried to comply with that definition.


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Jackie Lynnley 8 months ago from The Beautiful South

John has the site up Will and a few of us have published a couple things. Better come join us! Just google creative exiles. See you there!


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Jodah 8 months ago from Queensland Australia

Yes, generally 300 to 1000,(but it can be slightly less or more). Yes, come join us.


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WillStarr 8 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

What's the link, please? I can't find it.


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Jodah 8 months ago from Queensland Australia

creativeexiles.com

We are just waiting for your email address on the Facebook group so you can be given access. Alternatively go to the site via the link and fill out the "join us" form.


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bravewarrior 7 months ago from Central Florida

Wow, Will! Now that's what I call Flash Fiction! Your punchline slapped upside the head.

Way to go, Will!


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WillStarr 7 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Shauna!


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ladyguitarpicker 7 months ago from 3460NW 50 St Bell, Fl32619

Very interesting work.


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WillStarr 7 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you Stella!


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Nell Rose 6 months ago from England

Well don Will, done in less than, well however many words. and so powerful too, and sadly true.


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Faith Reaper 6 months ago from southern USA

Wow, Will, a micro-flash fiction and so well done!

This is impressive.


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WillStarr 6 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you, Nell Rose! I tried to keep it at 100 words or less and still tell the story.


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WillStarr 6 months ago from Phoenix, Arizona Author

Thank you Faith Reaper! HubPages said it was too short!

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