The Squirrel, Ever Vigiliant, Always Working: Poem

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This is another case where it would behoove hubpages to allow center formatting. This poem is heavily reliant on format (which maybe means it's not that strong of a poem, but, that is a subjective claim, i suppose). I've posted it to my personal blog, so you can view the way I formatted it. You can view both versions and decide what you like better!







Ever Vigilant,

The Squirrel,



Always Working




down





who desire his flesh


down







and runs


down






winter



Up


across he runs

pauses peeks

ever vigilant of hawks

eagles owls


Up


across he Scurries

scrounges

for nuts, fruits the grand prize:

a discarded apple core

a half-eaten sandwich

he fills his cheeks


Up


across to his home

in the tree tops

secure and panting

stowing

for like the hawk


Is descending.





all rights reserved. Copyright Justin W. Price February 22, 2012

Thanks for Reading.

A FREELANCE WRITER, HONORS STUDENT AND GOVER PRIZE FINALIST, JUSTIN W. PRICE (AKA, PDXKARAOKEGUY) CONSIDERS HIMSELF A POET FIRST AND FOREMOST BUT IS ALSO A SHORT STORY, BIOGRAPHER AND HUMOR WRITER. HIS POETRY COLLECTION,DIGGING TO CHINA, WAS FEBRUARY 2ND, 2013 BY SWEATSHOPPE PUBLICATIONS AND IS CURRENTLY AVAILABLE ON AMAZON, BARNES AND NOBLE AND THROUGH YOUR LOCAL BOOKSELLER.

HIS WORK WILL ALSO BE FEATURED IN BEST NEW FICTION (2014 EDITION), AND HAS APPEARED PREVIOUSLY IN THE RUSTY NAIL, EFICTION, BURNINGWORD, THE CRISIS CHRONICLES, THE HELLROARING REVIEW, SEE SPOT RUN AND THE BELLWETHER REVIEW. HE CURRENTLY SERVES AS MANAGING EDITOR OF EPOETRY MAGAZINE ANDTHE BRIDGE ONLINE NEWSPAPER.

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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Debby. That was my goal. Did you check it out on my blog as well?


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Debby Bruck 4 years ago

Hello Dear Justin. I liked this one. I felt the squirrel in your poetry as s/he ran up and down and all around. Blessings, Debby


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Credence for taking the time to read this in tow locations! Which one did you like best?


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Credence2 4 years ago from Florida (Space Coast)

Hi, PDX, I did have a look at the other version via your web site Cred2


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Gypsy. I'm glad and grateful that you took the time to read both versions :-)


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Yup read it on your blog. Much better sorta like running behind him.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

my dog eats tomatoes off the vine, and that's probly why she chases away the squirrels


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rebeccamealey 4 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

I brake for squirrels. But the wretched things stole almost all my tomatoes last spring. Love the poem. It has sort of an Ogden Nash feel. Fascinating arrangement of verses.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Credence. They are certainly interesting creatures. I like watching them through my window. I do love how they climb trees so easily. Thanks for reading. Did you check it out on the blog too?


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Credence2 4 years ago from Florida (Space Coast)

I couldn't stand the little critters when I was a kid. I always admired how they could effortlessly climb trees I was falling out of when I was working on tree houses. What really ticked me off was how they would do their highwire act between telephone poles and find a way to get onto fruit trees and help themselves even though we put metal banding on the trunk.

I now admire their resourcefulness, a fun bit of poetry, PDX, thanks


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

sue... thank you for checking out both!


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Justin,

Yes, I checked the one on your blog and it did make me more exhausted. lol

Hope you are having a good day. :)


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks so much Sue! Did you check out the form on my blog as well? That will make you even more dizzy and exhausted!


Sueswan 4 years ago

Hi Justin

Very fun and clever. I am exhausted from watching that squirrel go back and forth. lol

Voted up and away.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks so much, Vellur. That was my goal!


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Vellur 4 years ago from Dubai

I read this on your blog too. It is just like a squirrel running aand jumping from one branch to the next. This captures a squirrel in fastrack!!!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Vellur... you should read it on my blog as well!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

ruchira, i like that comment. I also wish i had oranges in my backyard


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

audra, thanks so much!


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Vellur 4 years ago from Dubai

You poem moves just as fast as a squirrel could. Voted up. Awesome.


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Ruchira 4 years ago from United States

I have so many squirrels in my backyard and they are always chomping on the oranges...but, sure I agree they always seem busy and in a hurry.

thanks for bringing my attention to these little musketeers.


iamaudraleigh 4 years ago

Voted up...so fun!!!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Audrey. It would seem so. Not bad for an experiment...


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

sparkle, thanks so much. My wife doesn't like them. but she doesn't like rodents in general. If you like the layout here, you should check it out on my blog as well. Thanks for stopping by and commenting!


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Looks like this one is a winner Justin!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Kashmir, thanks so much!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

April, thanks a lot!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Lady E, that's what I was going for. Thank you for noticing! Thanks for commenting


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks so much Cheryl!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Aurelio, I appreciate the reads and the votes and, of course, the comment!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Racini... thanks so much!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks so much, Gypsy. Did you read it on my blog as well?


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Sparklea 4 years ago from Upstate New York

Oh, you said it perfectly! Who doesn't love a squirrel? My sister feeds them peanuts from her hand. They are her babies. They constantly invade her bird feeders, but they are SO cute she can't get mad at them. What a great poem, and I LOVE the way you presented the words. Voted up, interesting and funny! Blessings, Sparklea :)


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kashmir56 4 years ago from Massachusetts

a wonderful and fun poem, i enjoyed reading it. Loved the formatting as well . Great job !

Awesome and vote up !!!


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April Reynolds 4 years ago from Arizona

Great poem Justin, the blog formatting adds a lot to it!


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Lady_E 4 years ago from London, UK

Lovely Poem and I like the format. Reading it made me think that I have never seen a squirrel walk/move slowly. lol.

"across he runs, across he scurries"

Cute. :)


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cherylone 4 years ago from Connecticut

Oh, I like this one, it describes the squirrel perfectly. :)


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alocsin 4 years ago from Orange County, CA

LOL, I'm certainly glad that I voted for this one. Enjoyed the new format -- it adds much to the poetic experience. Voting this Up and Interesting.


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

i find this cute...great work Justin...


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Voted up. I liked following along with the squirrel in your clever poem and adorable pic.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

thanks so much, Alastar. That's a terrifically nice compliment!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Rad, they are a joy to watch, and I have so many around my apartment. they're fun creatures.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Deborah, thank you very much!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Susan, I also love pecans. I wish i had a pecan tree!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Pickles, thank you. Very fun!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks, Carolee. I was trying to paint that picture.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

lol, sunnie. Those squirrels have been known to get into unwanted places!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Audrey... so pleased you took the time to analyze both! Your opinion means a lot!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Cindi, lol. I dunno. That seems like a good explanation to me!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Suzsy. I'm glad you enjoyed this!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

THanks KM, for reading it here and on my blog!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Flash, me too! Thanks for reading and commenting!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

billybuc, you're welcome. I'm a fan of squirrels. I find them interesting!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Daisy, thank you. I originally had the poem structured like a typial free verse poem, but it felt like it was missing something. reformatted then... voila!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Poohgranna, thanks for reading. If you want to see how I intended it, check it out on my blog! Blessings


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

The most innovative gob-smacking poem format seen yet on the HP. You've done the smart critters proud ole boy.


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radhikasree 4 years ago from Mumbai,India

I sit and watch the movement of squirrels on trees in front of my apartment. Within a blink of my eye, they would hide somewhere without letting me enjoy. But I could enjoy it truly in this lovely poem. Up and awesome.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks for the share, Rob, I appreciate that!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Macry... thanks. If you like the formatting here, please check out the intended format on my blog (linked above.) Thanks for stopping by and reading!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Marisa... your reading is perfect. I like that interpretation.... and I liked Over the Hedge


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Jeannie... though I'm sure I'm not the first one to write about those little critters


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks Cindy. Sounds like a good reading to me!


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Tammy... I'm so pleased that you like this. The other day with my bathrobe and cup o coffee I saw a squirrel and hawk do battle... the hawk did not emerge victorious, on that occasion.


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Susan, my wife and dogs don't like squirrels... I think they're cute though.


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

this is so cute.. You did a great job at this.

I like just the way you did it.

voted up

Debbie


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PDXKaraokeGuy 4 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Linda... thanks for the share and thanks for letting me pimp your fabulous hub on here!


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sholland10 4 years ago from Southwest Missouri

I thoroughly enjoyed this. Our back yard is full of squirrels running from one pecan and oak tree to another.

Votes and shared! :-)


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picklesandrufus 4 years ago from Virginia Beach, Va

enjoyable hub! They are such busy creatures, aren't they? Fun topic!


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Cardisa 4 years ago from Jamaica

Wonderful Justin. I could picture the squirrel gathering his nuts for the winter as he scurries across the grass in the back yard.


Sunnie Day 4 years ago

Hi Justin,

Squirrels are so cute and I love to watch them in our back yard. Thank you for such a cute poem. I found a squirrel in our bird houses..was a amazing how he got in there..guess he was storing his nuts..lol


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molometer 4 years ago

This really captures the activity of the squirrel well.


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ImKarn23 4 years ago

Awesome! As long as they don't make their winter home in my attic - they're adorable! So was this hub! voting up..


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Hey Justin--I left you a comment on your blog--it really works much better in the original format! Great work!


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Ohh--I love the form here--so off to check out the bog version---


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cclitgirl 4 years ago from Western NC

I really got the feeling of the frenetic squirrel from this. This hub is awesome! I also had visions of this squirrel hoarding nuts, getting ready for winter and then...forgetting about them. I wonder if that's where we get the expression "nutty." Voted up and across.


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suzzycue 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

I like it this way. Your poem moves exactly like a squirrel would getting ready for winter. A pleasure to read.


km360 4 years ago

Especially nice the way your poem moves along just like your busy little squirrel. Very catchy and fun each time I've read it, on your blog is really the best.


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flashmakeit 4 years ago from usa

I have fun watching the squirrels in my yard and that is why I enjoyed this poem.


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billybuc 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

Justin, I love it! I can just see the hairy little devils constantly doing their thing. Nice job as usual!


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Daisy Mariposa 4 years ago from Orange County (Southern California)

Justin,

This poem is terrific!

What's especially great is your formatting. By placing your words the way you did, I could see the squirrel darting all over the place...Brilliant idea!


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Poohgranma 4 years ago from On the edge

This was fun and you're right, the center formatting would have been even better ... but this did the trick. I liked it a lot!


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rob_allen 4 years ago from MNL, PH

I love squirrels. I just hope we have squirrels here in Manila. BTW, i enjoyed your poem. Shared! :)


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Marcy Goodfleisch 4 years ago from Planet Earth

The formatting here is very effective in conveying motion, changing circumstances and other elements that move the piece forward. I enjoyed this a lot - congrats on a good job! Voted up and awesome.


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ThePracticalMommy 4 years ago from United States

Love it! It definitely captures how busy a squirrel can be. It makes me think of Hammy the squirrel from Over the Hedge (kid's movie..I rarely get to see adult TV anymore!) who zips around going from one thing to the next. Back to the poem: I like how winter is this diabolical being at the end that wants to destroy the squirrel as the hawk does (or am I reading too much into it?).

Voted up!


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Jeannieinabottle 4 years ago from Baltimore, MD

Yay! I am glad you posted this. I love squirrels. A poem about squirrels is a great idea. Voted up!


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homesteadbound 4 years ago from Texas

This was a fun one! I love squirrels and I watched them darting up and down in my imagination as I read your poem.


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tammyswallow 4 years ago from North Carolina

I am nuts about this cute poem. I am surrounded by squirrels where I live. I love watching them.. unless they run out in front of my car. Great poem!


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Cute poem. I liked squirrels until one day when I tried to pet one the darn thing turned around and bit me :)


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Sunshine625 4 years ago from Orlando, FL

I love squirrels, they are so nutty and daring ... just like me! Fun poem and I'll be sure and share it with my squirrely friends!:)

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