The Weight of the World

An introduction, short and sweet, so as to not interrupt the flow of my poetry. Anxiety sucks.


Surrounded by darkness

a million pounds of dirt on top of me

It’s the weight of the world

I can’t breathe


I hear you speaking

I feel your presence

I know you’re there to help me

I reach out for you


I’m blind

There’s dirt in my eyes

In my mouth

In my lungs


I can’t breathe

I’m suffocating down here

Can you help me?

Can you pull me through?


Will you be my hero?

My savior?

My knight in shining armor?

Save me


I reach out for you

I can see a light

I know you’re there

So close


I feel your hand

On my fingertips

Grabbing my hand

You’re pulling


I’m buried so deep

So far down

It’s pitch black

Only a pinprick of light


You have my hand now

You’re pulling

And pulling

I can feel myself working free


The dirt begins to crumble

I can see more light

I’m slowly coming up

I can breathe a little more


Inch by inch

Little by little

You work me free

You’re bringing me up


I feel every piece of earth

Falling away

There is more and more light now

I’m almost out


I can smell the grass

I can smell you

A little farther now

A little harder now


I’m out to my stomach

I can see

I can breathe

You’re here with me


You’re still tugging

Pulling me free

I’m almost there

Just a little more


With one tiny tug

You pull me free

I collapse in your arms

You are my hero.

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SilentReed 6 years ago from Philippines

It was hard to breath as you kept us in poetic suspense :)


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ohmygoodnessrae 6 years ago from Texas

Very, very nicely done. I absolutely loved the imagery. It kept me glued the entire time. :)


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BeccaHubbardWoods 6 years ago from Outside your window... Author

Thank you so much, ohmygoodnessrae! I'm very glad you enjoyed it. : )


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mikielikie 6 years ago from Texas

I like to like your poetry it's really nice. great job.


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BeccaHubbardWoods 6 years ago from Outside your window... Author

Thank you, mikielikie! : )


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PaulaHenry1 6 years ago from America

Very beautiful, you have a definite talent!


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BeccaHubbardWoods 6 years ago from Outside your window... Author

Thank you for reading, PaulaHenry1. : )


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Mike Lickteig 6 years ago from Lawrence KS USA

Becca, that was a pretty amazing piece of writing. Whenever someone is feeling as you described, I hope their is a hand ready to pull them from the darkness into the light.

Very nice work.

Mike


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BeccaHubbardWoods 6 years ago from Outside your window... Author

Thank you for your kindness, Mike. I'm lucky to have someone helping me pull though this burden. If I didn't, I would be crushed by the weight of the world. : )


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Mentalist acer 6 years ago from A Voice in your Mind!

A beautiful Earthbound Rise;)


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foggyfrog 6 years ago from Northern California

Very engaging...suspenseful and really held my interest. I like your phrasing and pauses a lot. love your stuff!


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BeccaHubbardWoods 6 years ago from Outside your window... Author

thank you for reading, mentalist.

thank you as well, foggyfrog. : )


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Shadesbreath 5 years ago from California

I apologize in advance because A) I am a drinker, B) I am immature, and D) I am illiterate and uncultured, but I couldn't help think this could have been titled: Romeo the Backhoe Operator and Juliette the Zombie.

Don't hate me. I just discovered your poetry and I'm really immature, but generally mean well and ... etc. :)


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BeccaHubbardWoods 5 years ago from Outside your window... Author

Lmao Shades. You don't realize it, but you just described my marriage. XD


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onceuponatime66 5 years ago from USA IL

Love the way you write and you create a suspense and a visual like no other.


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liquidgranite 5 years ago

I like your poem. One vote up.


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BeccaHubbardWoods 5 years ago from Outside your window... Author

Thank you onceuponatime! :)

And thank you liquidgranite! :)

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    I am a mother, a metal head, a goth girl, and lover of all darkness. I'm also a writer, a cake decorator, and a general weirdo. FUN!


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