The Woman On The Mountain Top: Bill Hollands Challenge - A Moment In Time

I hardly ever get involved with the writing challenges on Hubpages. I prefer reading the amazing stories of others, compared to writing myself. But something about billybucs (Bill Hollands) challenge talked to me. Well not literally but you get my meaning, so my mind has been wandering around all day with this idea.

The beautiful photo by Bill is his lovely wife Bev standing looking out across the mountains which I believe are named Pinnacle Peak, and they are in the Cascade Mountains, which I hate to admit, I have never heard of before, but hey I am English so bear with me!.

I don't think I could capture such a great photo if I was paid a million dollars! Its wonderful.

This is the original challenge, The Woman On The Mountain Top by Bill, so I hope I do it justice. Here goes!

To Eternity and Back.

Copyright and property of Bill Holland.
Copyright and property of Bill Holland.

A Moment In Time.

Amy turned her head, gave a big sigh and opened her eyes. She could smell something wonderful, where was it coming from? Even the air tasted clean and fresh, she couldn't understand it.

The glare from the sun was blinding as Amy tried to focus. Sun? She thought. Why is the sun there? Where am I?

Slowly she realised that she was laying on the ground. But not just any old ground. It was grass, lush green and smelled like heaven.

The beautiful sound of birds caught her ears, and a bubbling sound played in the background. Sitting up, Amy realised that she was near a small stream that was running alongside her, dropping off out of sight down the hill where she was sitting.

No, its not a hill! She mumbled to herself, 'Its a Mountain'! Gingerly she stood up and stretched. Her body felt supple and for a moment she was surprised, but then the view took over and she stood there, staring in awe.

She had never seen anything so beautiful! The mountain with its blue tint, and the clouds flowing over them like white silk, breaking off and running across the sky like a child being chased by a friend. She could almost hear the laughter, but it was only the sound of a small deer that had crept up onto the ridge, and stood there, staring.

Amy didn't move, she was scared that the deer would be nervous, so she gently held out her hand, and to her surprise, the deer came forward and sniffed her fingers, before suddenly jumping away and running back into the trees.

Deer on a Mountain
Deer on a Mountain

The view was beautiful, Amy had never seen anything like it before. Or had she? A memory stirred in her mind, like slow water in a stagnant pool. There was something lurking beneath that pool, but she couldn't capture it. What was it?

She knew she was missing something, and then it came to her. Bob! Her beautiful kind and loving husband! Where was he? Why was she here on her own? Bob would never let her go mountain climbing!

She laughed! Well she wasn't really climbing now was she? But seriously, where on earth was he?

'Bob? Bob are you there?' She called. But there was no answer, only the sounds of the mountain, the water, the air, and a soft shush shush of the wind in the grass.

Amy started to panic. Where on earth?

Suddenly she heard a sound. A rustling in the grass. Then footsteps.


We'll Meet Again.

Turning around she saw a tall man wearing a khaki uniform and a big grin.

'Amy, what are you doing here? He asked, the smile turning into a worried frown.

Amy ran to him and flung her arms around his neck. 'Oh Bob, it seems like ages since I saw you! I missed you so'.

Bob gently took her hands that were draped so tightly around his neck.

'Amy if you are here, then you know what this means don't you?'

Amy gently stepped back and looked bewildered.

'What?' she whispered.

Bob softly ran his finger down her face, and then with his hand turned her head gently away from the mountain view.

'Look' He whispered and pointed.

There through a gap in the air, was a room. On the bed, an old lady lay dying. Her crinkled face which was showing so much pain began to relax, and soon a smile lit up her face.

'Oh, she said. Then turned towards the gap. 'Bob my love' She sighed.Then she was gone.

Amy turned with a start. Staring at Bob her eyes filled with tears.

'Oh I remember you. Really remember, I lost you so long ago, the war took you but I could still feel your arms around me. Is it true? Have I really died?

'Yes' Bob smiled. 'But now we can be together forever'.

Slowly they walked towards the warm blue mist of the mountain that would soon be their home for all eternity.

A soldiers kiss
A soldiers kiss

© 2014 Nell Rose

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billybuc 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

Well what a nice surprise as this day comes to an end. I do believe this is the perfect hub to call it a day with. Well done my friend, well done! I'm so happy you chose to take part in my challenge, and you certainly came through with flying colors.

Thank you, Nell, for this sweet melancholy.


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi billy, thanks so much! I just love that photo, its amazing! And it really inspired me too, I am so glad you liked it, nell


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Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

Well Nell this is different for you and I love it! Your talent just doesn't stop! Especially love that last photo too giving it a timeline! ^+


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Wow, Nell, what a romantic and heartrending creative short story you have written here. I love it!

It is amazing how many unique takes on that photo of Bill's is inspiring.

The video and your added photos are perfect choices here.

Up ++++ tweeting, pinning, G+ and sharing

Bravo! You have met the challenge and flew over those mountain tops.


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AliciaC 2 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

I agree with Bill - this is a lovely story to end the day. The illustrations are beautiful, too. They match the story perfectly.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

Nell I like that you put that unique flair in this challenge... creative.. tug of an emotional drive.. yeah I loved it.. voted unique and awesome.. plus shared :) Frank


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

What a beautiful and heartwarming story Nell. Glad you decided to take this challenge. Voted up.


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DDE 2 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

A great story told here. You have a beautiful layout.


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Harishprasad 2 years ago from India

Nell : This is such a fantastic story. The climax was just unbelievable and out of the box ! Such a sweet tiny tale and beautifully scripted by you ! A great response to a great challenge. Voted up and shared.


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cam8510 2 years ago from Columbus, Georgia until the end of November 2016.

Nell, I lost my wife to cancer a few short years ago. Your beautiful story describes a place of peace and hope. Thank you for deciding to participate in billybuc' challenge.


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FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

Nell, this is such a heartfelt and creative addition to the challenge. What a lovely writer you are!


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suzettenaples 2 years ago from Taos, NM

Great story Nell. I knew your entry to the challenge would be smashing! The mountains certainly are heaven on earth and heaven in your story. Lovely love story and I enjoyed the video. I am so glad you took the challenge.


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks Jackie, glad you liked it, it just came to me, like all stories do, when I was stood in the shop! lol!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

HI Faith, aw thanks so much, so many other people have taken on this writing challenge, I am loving reading every one of them, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi Alicia, thanks for reading, and I am glad you liked it! :)


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi Frank, good to see you again, and thank so much for reading, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks Jodah, loved your story too! lol! thanks for reading, nell


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida

Nice job, Nell. Even through death this story has a happy ending. Now the lovers will live in the beauty of the mountain's mist as the young people they were when they were together so long ago. Beautiful!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks DDE good to see you, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi Harish, thanks so much! I just wanted to try something different, and my fingers went off on their own! lol!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

HI Cam, I am so sorry to hear that, I really hope that this is the sort of thing that happens, wouldn't that be a miracle?


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Aw thanks so much Flourish, glad you liked it, :)


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

HI suzette. thanks, I always seem to end up with these sort of tales! lol! it's a theme isn't it, with me? lol! thanks as always, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi bravewarrior, thanks so much, yes I just thought with all the war1 and war2 commemorations going on I thought I would give them a nice ending, maybe a happy one? glad you liked it, nell


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tillsontitan 2 years ago from New York

Ok Nell, it's time you start replying to more challenges. This was a great story! I wondered why the dear got so close but never imagined the ending which gave me chills by the way! A glorious ending.

Voted up, awesome, beautiful, and interesting.


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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Nell, this is beautiful and so moving. Vera Lynn added that extra bit of magic. Well done!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks Mary, I just loved the idea of this challenge, Bill's photo is amazing! thanks so much, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi Jo, thanks so much, my mum loved Vera Lynn, so I was singing along when I was adding it! lol! thanks for liking my story, nell


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jhamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

Thank you for this great read. I enjoyed every word. Thank you for taking part in this challenge. Jamie


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks Jamie, glad you liked it, nell


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MsDora 2 years ago from The Caribbean

Crisp, clean and fuzzy. Thanks for a beautiful short story. Well done!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks MsDora, great to see you, and I am glad you liked my story, nell


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

Oh my, this tugged at my heartstrings in a wonderful way. Beautiful Nell! You are a great storyteller. This is a story that will linger in my mind. Loved it...


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LadyFiddler 2 years ago from Somewhere in the West

LOL waw Nell what a story and a mighty fine place to have met Bob again. I am like so lusting at bills photo wishing it was me on the mountain top . I adore the mountains and these in his photo looks so striking LOL.

How are you ? I am scarce like gold these days on HP, ailments of my old body is taking me over in various forms and fashions. Golly!!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi Ruby, thanks so much, it just came to me, as its commemorative day in a few days, I thought it was appropriate, glad you liked it, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hiya Jo, lol! I am fine thanks, sorry to hear that you are still feeling poorly, is it the gengue still hanging on? hope you feel better soon, nell


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prasetio30 2 years ago from malang-indonesia

What a beautiful story, Nell. I like it. Thanks for sharing with us. My vote always for you. Have a nice weekend!

Prasetio


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WillStarr 2 years ago from Phoenix, Arizona

Well done, Nell! I'm so impressed with this story!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi pras, great to see you! and thanks so much for reading, nell

Hi Will, thanks so much, and great to see you too, nell


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Vellur 2 years ago from Dubai

A romantic story with a happy ending. I enjoyed reading your story beautifully written! Voted up.


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vocalcoach 2 years ago from Nashville Tn.

I always gravitate to stories based on WW1 and WW2. Out of all the horrific sadness of these times came one of the most romantic periods. This is a beautiful story Nell. Thank you. Voted up, amazing, beautiful, interesting and will share.


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ChitrangadaSharan 2 years ago from New Delhi, India

How beautifully romantic!

Loved going through your wonderful response to billybuc's challenge. I am a romantic at heart and loved your story in the beautiful natural surroundings.

Voted up!


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teaches12345 2 years ago

I love your story, very romantic. You can tell them with such creative talent! Great response to the challenge.


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mary615 2 years ago from Florida

Well, my friend, you had me all choked up with your beautiful story. Bill is really getting some wonderful responses with his challenge. I'm still thinking about it, but I know I could never write a story as wonderful as you have.

Voted UP, etc. and certainly shared.


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks so much vellur, good to see you, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks so much Chitrangada, I am glad you liked it, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks Audrey, I suddenly realised what time of year it was, and I always remember my mum and dad at this time, so that's how I got to here, glad you liked it and thanks again, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks Dianna, I am so glad you liked it, there was just that something about billy's photo that reached out to me, nell


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi mary, thanks so much! I am sure you could write an amazing story, I would love to read it, bills photo is so fantastic it really makes us think about how to write about it, but thank you, and always great to see you, nell


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annart 2 years ago from SW England

Nell, this is beautiful and so poignant for me as I'm reading it on Armistice Day here in England. It made me cry (in a nice way!).

There is a feeling of being set free in this hub, a celebration, a relief and a final longed-for reunion; how wonderful. The clear, fresh air of the mountains fits perfectly with these emotions, far above the world.

Lovely!

Ann


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

HI Ann, thanks so much, yes I think that's why I wrote it being Armistice day, my son used to be in the sea cadets, and he actually did a parade a few years ago, so I watched it again today down here in Bucks, glad you liked it, and thanks for reading, nell


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Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

Only one word here Nell: Brilliant !!

Great work,

Eddy.


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks so much Eddy and great to see you!


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denise.w.anderson 2 years ago from Bismarck, North Dakota

Thank you for giving us a glimpse of what we have to look forward to!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks so much denise, glad you liked it, and thanks for reading, nell


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Suhail and my dog 2 years ago from Mississauga, ON

This response to Bill's challenge made me look forward to my future. Coinciding with Remembrance / Veterans / Armistice Day made it even more beautiful.


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi Suhail, thanks so much for reading, and I am glad you liked it, nell


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Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

Nell, you should participate in these challenges more…your bittersweet story is just wonderful!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks so much Genna, I am so glad you liked it! great to see you!


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pstraubie48 2 years ago from sunny Florida

What a wonderful way to begin my reading this evening on HubPages.

I could feel the love...writing fiction is such a gift. It is not my strength at all. So glad there are writers like you who can carry it off well. Angels are on the way to you this evening ps


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Hi ps, Aw thanks so much! I do love writing freestyle, it just seems to flow, whether its any good or not is a different matter! lol! glad you liked it, Angels back at ya!


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MartieCoetser 2 years ago from South Africa

We tend to believe that beauty is only to be seen in heaven, while we are alive on a beautiful planet.

A beautiful and comforting story!


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks Martie, I am glad you liked it, it just sort of ended up this way, I always go a completely different way when I am writing a story, takes over! lol!


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aviannovice 2 years ago from Stillwater, OK

Perfect. You did a great job on this one.


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England Author

Thanks so much Deb, glad you liked it, nell


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Besarien 2 years ago

This is awesome, such an unexpected answer to the challenge. I think is going to be one of those that I remember and think about again and again.


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Nell Rose 24 months ago from England Author

Sorry Besarien, not been well. I am so glad you liked it, it just made me think of the war when I wrote it.


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fpherj48 24 months ago from Beautiful Upstate New York

Nell...You are such an enormous talent. I believe I've been saying this for close to 4 years.....which proves I don't mind repeating myself at all!

I love your style, girlfriend........Have a good night!.Peace, Paula


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Nell Rose 24 months ago from England Author

Hiya Paula, lol! aw thank you! and thanks so much for reading, hope you are safe from all that snow! Saw it on tv last night, phew!


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shanmarie 20 months ago from Texas

Beautiful love story! Heaven in the mountains. . .


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Nell Rose 20 months ago from England Author

Thanks so much shanmarie, glad you liked it, nell

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