The color of rain-Senryu poetry

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Raindrops falling against my window pane, rapidly then gradually slows to a trickle.

The color of rain

Crystal clear water moisture

Precipitation

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Vapor mist curtain

Raindrops splattering window

Trickling bubble burst

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Visibility

Intermittent patchy fog

Dissipating rain


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bravewarrior 2 years ago from Central Florida

I've never heard of this kind of poetry. I love it and love the video, too. Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid. Good memories!


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Sam Tumblin 2 years ago from Eunice, La.

Personally I like the verse from the "color of rain to.. Trickling bubble burst" In my mind I can see the color of the rain as well hear the bubble burst on the window pane.


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The Examiner-1 2 years ago

Interesting Deb, it sure was short and brief. Though I could create mental pictures as I read it. It was wonderful for a light rain shower. I voted it up+, shared it and pinned it.

Kevin


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Shauna, senryu poetry is done by syllables- first line 5 syllables- second line 7 syllables- third line 5 syllables. You can do as many sets ( three lines ) as you want to. I used to do this kind of poetry a lot. I enjoy doing it. I'm so glad you like it and the video. Thank you so much...


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Sam Tumblin. As i watched the rain on my window pane, it seemed to burst as it hit. I'm thrilled that you could see it in your mind. Thank you for coming to read and comment...


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Kevin. That's how the words came to me, by watching the rain splashing on my window. Senryu poetry is done in syllables, see above. You can make it short or long, it's fun to do, give it a try. Thank you for sharing..


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mckbirdbks 2 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

Hello Ruby, How gentle and soothing, this poetry conveys the softness of the lite rain and the tempo of the escaping drops.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Mike. Your comment is poetry to my ears. Thank you my friend..


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rebeccamealey 2 years ago from Northeastern Georgia, USA

New to me.I love it! And you did a good job presenting it and adding the right video.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello rebeccamealey. Thank you. Happy you enjoyed the poetry and the video. Cheers..


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vocalcoach 2 years ago from Nashville Tn.

Ruby -

Your lovely poetry invites me to inhale the kind of nurturing only a rain like this can give.

So beautiful. Thank you and sharing. Audrey


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Audrey. Invites me to inhale the kind of nuturing only a rain like this can give..Beautiful..Thank you for your lovely comment and for sharing..


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lisavanvorst 2 years ago from New Jersey

Short, sweet and beautiful. I love when it rains. I find the sound of rain very relaxing.


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marcoujor 2 years ago from Jeffersonville PA

Cleansing, healing and uplifting, Ruby... I love the rain and love your take on it.

Have a great weekend, my dear. Love, Maria


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billybuc 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

See, that's the kind of creativity that makes writing such a remarkable craft. The color of rain...right there you established your creativity. Excellent write, Ruby!


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Oh, this is beautiful, Ruby! Wow, you are amazing at writing the Senryu poetry, as it is not easy. You words painted the picture in my mind without any need of an image here. That is great writing.

Up +++ tweeting and pinning

Blessings for a lovely weekend


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

rain.. briskly paced in soft words...voted awesome :)


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MartieCoetser 2 years ago from South Africa

Dear Ruby, indulging in Japanese forms of poetry is such an enjoyable challenge. These are truly thought-provoking senryu. I could see and hear those raindrops falling against your window pane.

Raindrops indeed fell on my head this morning - our first rain of the season and the ideal opportunity to fertilise my garden with artificial manure.

Voted up and awesome :)


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btrbell 2 years ago from Mesa, AZ

Love! I am sitting here on a rainy morning and reading your beautiful words! Thanks for the "blast from the past" music! Up+


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello lisa vanvorst. I love to watch and listen to the rain too. Happy you came to visit. Thank you.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Mar. I have always loved to watch the rain, and you're right, it is cleansing and uplifting. Glad you felt that dear one. Love you too. Hugs..


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Bill, i do believe your teaching about creativity has given me new ways to express my feelings. Thank you so much...


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Theresa, your comment made me smile and your reaction to my senryu is what i hoped for. Thank you for sharing and blessings to you..


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Frank. Thank you for the awesome comment....


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Dear Martie, so good to see you and happy you enjoyed my senryu poetry. I used to do this type of poetry and loved the challenge. This was fun to do, watching the rain. Happy you got your first rain. We have gotten more rain this year, really i only had to water my garden once. Take care and thank you...


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello btrbell. Small world, seems everyone is getting summer rain. Happy you enjoyed and yes, a blast from the past, raindrops was a big hit for BJ Thomas. Thank you...


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Genna East 2 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

You have given rain life, a character of nature with its own movement and reflection of color as it, in turn, gives us sustenance in many ways. Beautifully done, Ruby! You are a true artist with Senryu. Voted up and shared.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Genna your comment is beautiful! Thank you for the complimentary comment. Thank you for gracing my page and sharing..Hugs my friend..


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BlossomSB 2 years ago from Victoria, Australia

Lovely! Soft and gentle as rain can sometimes be. The form you chose to write in suits the theme so well.


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truthfornow 2 years ago from New Orleans, LA

Lovely read. It seems like it is about to rain over here. I never would have thought of rain having color.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Blossom. Thank you. It helps to write about rain when it's actually raining, which it's actually doing right now. Happy you thought it was a lovely read.....


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello truthfornow. It's funny how words come and change your prospective about things. I really never thought about rain having color either. Thank you for a lovely read comment.


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Torrs13 2 years ago from California

Makes me want to cuddle up under a blanket and enjoy a good rainy day. Too bad it's warm and sunny here today. I guess I'll just have to wait until the next storm rolls through.


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Nell Rose 2 years ago from England

Love this Ruby! very clever, and I had never heard of Senryu before, I thought the 7 5 7 lines were haiku? shows what I know! lol! wonderful!


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daydreamer13 2 years ago

Very interesting poem. You are very gifted when it comes to writing interesting pieces. No matter what form it takes, it keeps the mind moving. Well done!!


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

Lovely Ruby!! I was just thinking about rain this morning!


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PegCole17 2 years ago from Dallas, Texas

You say so much in so few words. Captivating imagery. We had a wonderful and much needed rain this weekend after a long drought.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Torris, nice to see you. Cuddling up in a warm blanket, listening to the rain sounds heavenly. Thank you for coming by....


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Nell. It is 5-7-5 syllables, the same as haiku, no rhyming. It's just something different to try and it's fun. Thank's for the clever comment...


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello daydreamer. What a nice compliment! Thank you so much...


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Audrey. It has rained here everyday for a week. Thank's for the lovely comment..


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Peg, I've been hearing about your drought in Texas, glad you got rain. Thank's for the captivating comment...


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manatita44 2 years ago from london

Short and sweet Ruby. Commendable.

In NY, so sorry I cannot hear the video from my cafe.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello manatita. I hope you are enjoying your stay in NY, missing your poetry. Thank you...


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Lady_E 2 years ago from London, UK

Thanks Ruby for a refreshing poem. The song fits in perfectly with it. I haven't heard that song for ages. :-)


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ubanichijioke 2 years ago from Lagos

Beautiful! Ya, I see all when it rains. :)


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Elena. Thank's for the refreshing comment. I really like the song too..Thank you...


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Thandi. Nothing i like better than listening to the rain. Thank you for a beautiful comment....


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DDE 2 years ago from Dubrovnik, Croatia

I like it when it rains to watch a good movie or read a book.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello DDE. I'm with you on watching a good movie when it's raining. Thank you...


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Minnetonka Twin 9 months ago from Minnesota

A beautiful Senryu Ruby-there's nothing like a good rain to cleanse the soul.


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always exploring 9 months ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Linda. I agree. Rain is wonderful. Thank you for coming by...


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Laurinzo Scott 3 months ago from Phoenix, Az.

I love this style of poetry and how you utilized it to paint a vivid word painting...Awesome!!!!


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always exploring 2 months ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Laurinzo. Sorry I'm late, had family visiting over the weekend. Thank you for the ' awesome comment ' So glad you liked it!


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Vellur 2 months ago from Dubai

Beautifully written senryu about the rain, I love the sound of rain following on the windowpanes.


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always exploring 2 months ago from Southern Illinois Author

Hello Vellur. I love the rain splashing against the windowpane too. Thanks so much for coming to read my poetry...

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    Ruby Jean Fuller (always exploring)808 Followers
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    I am a writer of poetry and fiction. I especially love flash fiction. My name is Ruby, and I live in Southern Illinois. I am a retired R.N.



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