The Fog (tanka)

So strange was the fog

Which had settled in his streets

That cold summer’s day

That when it finally left

He found himself all alone


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bravewarrior 3 years ago from Central Florida

That could be a disturbing experience. Kind of like feeling lost. Interesting tanka, Martin. It makes you think.


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billybuc 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

Stark and disturbing. You set the mood perfectly. Well done Martin!


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MsDora 3 years ago from The Caribbean

Tragic! A different mood today.


DJ Anderson 3 years ago

Sounds like an out of body experience.

Or, were they really strange visitors?

Was it the milk man or the paper boy making their early morning deliveries?

OK, I'm lost, here.

But, it is spooky as hell!

DJ.


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Victoria Lynn 3 years ago from Arkansas, USA

The tone of the poem, along with the photo, is haunting and beautiful.


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kashmir56 3 years ago from Massachusetts

Great haunting and disturbing tanka .


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rose-the planner 3 years ago from Toronto, Ontario-Canada

A frightening and unsettling thought! I really enjoyed this tanka. Thank you for sharing. (Voted Up) -Rose


dreamseeker2 3 years ago

Very interesting, Mhatter99. I often walk around in a fog, when I don't get much sleep. This kind of reminded me of it. : ) Voted it up!


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always exploring 3 years ago from Southern Illinois

The photo is telling. Loneliness is sad indeed...


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travmaj 3 years ago from australia

This is eerie - fog on a cold summer's day and the pic adds so much to the words - it is unsettling.


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ImKarn23 3 years ago

i wander alone in a fog constantly...is that a bad thing? lol

sharing..


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leni sands 3 years ago from UK

Short but not so sweet - very profound!


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Reminds of quiet streets filled with swirling fog.


Poetic Fool 3 years ago

Nice! You've built tension and an eerie sense with a strange fog on a cold summer's day. It's an oddity that leaves the reader wondering. The art goes with it perfectly as well. Well done!


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vkwok 3 years ago from Hawaii

Really eerie.


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aviannovice 3 years ago from Stillwater, OK

Fog can have powers hiding within...


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BlossomSB 3 years ago from Victoria, Australia

The fog can really leave our minds in a fog, too. Interesting poem.


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tirelesstraveler 3 years ago from California

Spend half my day in fog. It's called living in the San Francisco Bay area. A perfect summers day is when the sun comes out by noon and doesn't come back until after you go to bed.

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