There is something wrong...a dark poem

There is something very wrong with me

Death and destruction all that I see

Everything filled with ash and decay

Darkness consuming every day

Beauty withers before my eyes

As everything I see slowly dies

Every single breath

Filled thick with the taste of death

Voices distorted to my ear

Laced with emptiness and tears

Barren landscapes all around me

The earth burning as I struggle to get free

Laughter of demons haunts my nightmares

As this madness fully ensnares

My soul slowly decaying

My heart cold and dying

The living nothing more than waiting dead

Their fates clear in my head

There is something wrong with everyone

As I slowly understands what needs to be done

Seeing the truth for the first time

I reach for the destiny that is solely mine

Alone in a world gone to hell

I have to break the devils spell

And grant the waiting dead some peace

Giving them their final release

Hunting them both night and day

Ignoring the lies that they all say

And in the moments of death, I finally see

The beauty that has been lost to me

Their faces smooth and clear

Finally free of decay and fear

I can taste again the sweet breath of life

As I save them from a world full of strife

There is something very wrong with me

As I try to deny what I see

In the reflection of the mirror

My dying eyes fill with terror

As death takes its final hold

Leaving my skin decaying and cold

The laughter of my madness returns

As around me the whole world burns

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ahorseback 5 years ago

Nighthag , awesome , but what's going on inside the poet ? Very interesting.

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Leptirela 5 years ago from I don't know half the time

I have asked the same question.

Perhaps not all poets write from within so that the feelings reflect in the writing...

but I can feel some deep trouble here..

Voted up because this is amazing .... I hope to read some more keep it up :)

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Darknlovely3436 5 years ago from NewYork

laced with emptiness and tears those line stood out to me,

love this dark write...

vote up

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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

I find it a phase that we all go through. Very well written and trust me you are not the only one tormented by a demon. It how we deal witht them and release them...


baygirl33 5 years ago

Dark and frightful and lovely all at once.

Keep on writing the demons from your soul onto the paper.

You can be in many prayers and thoughts!

The world was like this for indivuals before we had the media to let us see it.

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Spirit Whisperer 5 years ago from Isle of Man

A great poem about something we all do every moment of our lives from the moment we are born...we are dying! Awesome!

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angeladale2 5 years ago from columbus, ohio

Its is a very dark beautiful poem. I love it

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Twilight Lawns 5 years ago from Norbury-sur-Mer, Surrey, England. U.K.

A dark poem with continuity, purpose and form.

It is so refreshing to see rhyming couplets that make sense and are not grouped in meaningless pairs, just because they are rhyming

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


I am glad that you liked this :) depression comes and goes in my life and this one was written in one of my darker mind sets, thanks heaps for taking the time to read it


I have a habit of using my darker moments to inspire some even darker writing, thanks for the vote up and I do hope to have some more posted soon :)

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


This poem almost wrote itself so I am thrilled that it stood it out to you, thanks heaps for the vote up :)


Thank you, Demons have haunted my writing for years, showing up when I least expect it making me and many others doubt my sanity, I am thrilled that you liked this


You are right in that I find writing to therapeutic, it can be a great way to challenge the inner demons,

thanks for your thoughts and taking the time to read this

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author

Spirit Whisperer

every moment that we live is another moment that we are closer to death I am simply thrilled that you liked this



thank you so much, I am glad that you liked it so much :)

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author

Twilight Lawns

thank you so very much, having only been writing poetry for the last few months that is a great compliment :) I have been trying to teach myself as much as I can as I go along...

thank you so much for taking the time to read this and to leave an encouraging comment :)

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ExoticHippieQueen 5 years ago

Dark and edgy, interesting. Nice job!

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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

I'm going to have nightmares. Dark, yes indeed.

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Fennelseed 5 years ago from Australia

So much darkness, so much despair, but a glimmer of light where the lost souls are held tight and transformed. Skillful poetry, I like it also.

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always exploring 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

Wow, This took me down a very dark path, then just briefly, the darkness lifted. Depression reeks havoc on the soul. The madness you envision at the end, reminds me of written scripture of the last day's. Very well done. Loved it!!!

baygirl33 5 years ago

Don't know what to say! I think I'll read your other stuff before commenting from my "I need to look after you"nature.

Very well written though,very aggressive.

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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

Very dark, my dear, inspired me to write a little something. hub coming soon. thanks!

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


Thanks I am really glad that you liked it, thanks for stopping by


I was aiming for creepy maybe a little scary, I truly hope the nightmares are not too bad :)

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MysteriousOne 5 years ago

nighthag....very intense and dark poem.A lot of emotions woven in between the lines.I really enjoyed it! Voted up!

Hope you are well!


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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


thank you so very much for the compliment,I am so glad that you liked this... as dark as it is :)

always exploring

thank you so much! I was hoping to weave a few different layers here, to make it more than what it first seems. I am glad/thrilled that you liked it :)

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saddlerider1 5 years ago

Nighthag my fine poet friend. I sense your depression, your fears, your anger, your abyss echoing back to you why are we here, where are we going, what the hell is HELL all about, etc etc.

I to in moments like this take my Quill and dip it into the darkest of inks I can find, open my wine, light my wax and scribe from my soul, sometimes I find myself passed out with my head on my table and sweating from the heat I produced and my closeness to hell.

My friend I felt this extremely warped yet meaningful piece. Bravo, brilliant...BTW congratulations on your reaching 100 hubscore, I hit it last week, they kept me up there for a day and then I slid back down to my usual mid 90's...too funny.

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


I would love for you to read more of my work :) (what writer wouldn't?) thank you for your nurturing caring words and thoughts, depression is something that I do battle with and from time to time it does and will affect my writing.

Thank you again for taking the time to read my dark poem aggressive that it was :)

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


Always nice to have you visit :) I am glad that you not only liked this but it may have helped to inspire you, I look forward to yet another great hub!!


I wrote this one with a very restless mind, so I am thrilled that you liked it, Thanks so much for the comment and the vote up :)

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


It gives me great comfort and hope to know that you don't only understand the darkness of depression but that you so freely offer your empathy to others speaks volumes about your heart.

Writing has always been a release for me, freeing my mind of the sometimes crippling thoughts that attempt to drag me down into what feels like a living hell.

thanks so much for your comment and your wonderful support all this time :)I am so glad to hear that you also hit the magical 100 hub score congrats to you also..

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Clairepeek 5 years ago

Oh my goodness!

I had shivers and it was not of cold... You could easily take part in the Japanese tradition of 100 tales of horror. Your imagination is wondrous, nighthag ^_^

By the by, hubscore 100... you rock! Congratulations :D

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author

oh wow thanks so much for the huge compliment!

I am so thrilled that you liked this, hub score of 100 kinda took me by surprise too thanks!!

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Randy Behavior 5 years ago from Near the Ocean

Thank you for this morning dip in darkness nighthag. :)

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author

anytime Randy its always a pleasure to have yo drop in

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epigramman 5 years ago

..well no one gets me more excited ....when it comes to the dark side than 'you' - you have taught your 'willing' student well - and yes, epi-man has been unleashed onto the pages of Hub - but there's no 'rub' here - just the best writing of this particular genre loved by so many because NIGHTHAG does it like no other !!!!!

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Seeker7 5 years ago from Fife, Scotland

Awesome!! This is a wonderfully dark journey but it has within it - for me a ray of hope. Are the demons your sub-conscious? It seems like you are a sensitive at times taking on the pain of the world and working it off through your beautiful work. I'm not sure if I'm making a lot of sense here. Your poem stirred up so much images in me - This is one piece of great work. Have bookmarked it and voted up + awesome. You are a rare and unique talent.

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kikkibabes 5 years ago

Voted up.. Fantastic poem. x

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


Dear sir its always a joy to have you visit even if your compliments leave me blushing, thank you for your very kind words and late night visitation

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


I am not sure where my inspiration always comes from... my life ? the lives of others around me or is it the things that are left unseen? after all with out darkness we would have no light, without hate how would we know love?...

no I am the one wondering if I make sense :) I am glad that you get something from my writings that truly means a lot to me, thank you so much!!

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


I am so glad that you liked it :) thanks heaps for the vote up..

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jimagain 5 years ago from Hattiesburg, Mississippi

Haunting & riveting!

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author

why thank you :) I am so glad that you enjoyed it!

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LCaverson 5 years ago from Virginia Beach, VA.

Again, this one is a little more dark, but oh so good.

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author

thank you, I cant seem to help myself but write the darker stuff, so I am thrilled that you liked it!!

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asmaiftikhar 5 years ago from Pakistan

it really an amazing flight of imagination.A very deep and full o meaning poem.keep it up.

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author

Thank you so very much, I am so glad you liked it

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jami l. pereira 5 years ago

This is an amazingly inspiring and deep moving ,emotional piece , in which i can relate totally ! When im troubled , i write so much better ! i write from my darkside , which i tend to love. Some days im hoping someone pisses me off or hurts my feelings just so i can write lol sad huh? I wish! :)Over the years , pent up releases exploding on paper ,have been my Salvation of and from all of my evil. Thanks for sharing this piece ! I loved it and voted it up , awesome , beautiful and interesting ! have a wonderful afternoon !:)

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nighthag 5 years ago from Australia Author


thank you so much for taking the time to read this and to leave such a full comment!

I have always felt that I write better when I am upset or feeling dark, and like yourself i can often struggle to find my muse when the waters of life are a calm.

I am so thrilled that you enjoyed this my dark poem :)

Thank you

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