They Told Me I should Get Them Fixed

The birth of a poem or a poet?

This is my first attempt at poetry. I have never tried nor wanted to try to write poetry before. After listening to a poet being interviewed plus reading the poetry of others inspired me to have a go.

This is the result of that inspiration. If nothing else comes of it I have at least written a poem that I am relatively please with.

I hope you like it, as that would please me. If you don't, well it really doesn't matter, because I will always have a special place for my first poem.

Whether I write any more poetry, maybe depends on the response to this one. Or, it just may be until the urge takes me, who knows?

Here is my first poem ever. It is a light-hearted look at two occasions when I had an abscess under a tooth and should have gone to the dentist.

They Told Me I should Get Them Fixed


They told me I should get them fixed

I knew I should

I knew I could

But didn’t any way


The pain was like a throbbing wave

That seemed to ebb and flow

I knew I should have gone

When they all said that I should go


Oh why am I so slow

Sorting things concerning me?

If t'were you in this much pain

I know what I would do


I'd not take no for an answer

I’d make you come with me

I’d take you to the dentist

Even though it is not free


What is the use of money

Not spent when you’re in pain?

What’s worse, spending your money?

Or being in agony and pain?


The throbbing's not abating

My whole head has begun to pound

And I feel that I am lost

As this sea of pain abounds


Is it fear or meanness

That stops me from going?

It’s going to cost the same

No matter when I go


At some point I’ll have to go

And the cost will be the same

The only difference then will be

My amount of pain


Here I am a full year on

You would have thought

I would have gone

But no, I did naught


I didn’t so I’m back again

Right where I started

Still very much in pain

And a little down-hearted


This time when the pain

And the infection is done

I won’t be a lame brain

I will get it done


At last I’ve gone and done it

The teeth are now all out

The dentures tightly fit

And I want to jump and shout


© Annie Laurie 2009

Comments 21 comments

ralwus 7 years ago

Well, I reckon we have a new poet here. You have expressed yourself pretty well here. It is indeed a poem. LOL Welcome, methinks you were pulling a leg or two,


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Haunty 7 years ago from Hungary

Ralwus wields an incredible mastery of poetry. Just so you know, if he says you're a poet, you're a poet. You can't do anything about it. :)


\Brenda Scully 7 years ago

do you have tooth ache


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annie laurie 7 years ago from England Author

Thank you ralwus I am encouraged by your kind words and as this is my first poem (thanks for saying it was) and your comments are my first I shall always treasure them.


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annie laurie 7 years ago from England Author

Thank you Haunty for reading this hub and leaving a comment you don't know how nervous I was when posting this and your kindness is really appreciated


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annie laurie 7 years ago from England Author

Hi Brenda yes and I think I have an abscess under my tooth as well how did you guess? lol


\Brenda Scully 7 years ago

nothing is as painful as that, and you can write like that when in pain congratulations


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annie laurie 7 years ago from England Author

Thanks for the congratulations Brenda I find that it helps to be distracted it gets the mind off the pain. I have been having quite a bit of pain today and I have just written another poem (encouraged by ralwus that is what I am calling it a poem) which I am about to publish now. So at least some good has come from this tooth ache lol


\Brenda Scully 7 years ago

i will look out for it.... keep the pain, if it helps why not


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jxb7076 7 years ago from United States of America

I liked it - keep the pencil sharpened!


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annie laurie 7 years ago from England Author

Thank you jxb7076 for your kind comments they are much appreciated


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archdaw 7 years ago from Brooklyn

I like to check out everyone that leaves a comment on my hubs to see what they are all about. I love poems, but alas, I fail miserably in writing them. My poems sound more like school children rhyming words for the first time example (the bat sat on the cat waiting for the rat to eat the fat) see what I mean. I loved it!!!


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annie laurie 7 years ago from England Author

archdaw, I think that you should have a go and suspend the critcism and resist the urge to correct just write what comes into your head and keep writing until it feels finished then make any corrections and I think you will be surprised at how well you do


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prasetio30 7 years ago from malang-indonesia

great poem. Just hold the pain. thanks for share.


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annie laurie 7 years ago from England Author

Prasetio thanks for the kind comments


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steffsings 7 years ago from Pacific NorthWest

Sometimes great works of art are born from pain - hope you feel better soon, until then keep writing, love your style.


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annie laurie 7 years ago from England Author

I am fine now thanks the pain is all gone and so has the abscess at least I got to try out writing a poem using this experience so the pain was not a total waste lol


poetlorraine 6 years ago

hi going to work now, just read this again, you do know i am Brenda Scully don't you,just had a change of name, so we have met in a kinda previous life of mine xx


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annie laurie 6 years ago from England Author

Brenda I was totally unaware that this was an new persona of yours, I am so glad to know this.


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you suggest one 6 years ago from NOTTINGHAM ENGLAND

We are all poets at heart,sometimes to pick up a pen can be more painful than the dentist,so whether you are new to this or not welcome,by the way I have just found you but will keep following you from now on,if you don't mind that is.


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annie laurie 6 years ago from England Author

Thank you for your comment. I have not visited these hubs in quite a while and your comments have spurred me to try my hand at writing poetry once again. So thanks for the prod.

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