Poem: Thirsty

Thirsty

Snow falls gently on the hardened Earth.

So cold yet elegant, that blanket of immaculate white -

Floating just above, barely touching -

Drifting like the delicate blanket of a protective lover

Across the skin of one so wounded

Discovered hardly breathing; scarcely aware.

 

Slowly, ever so slightly, she raises her stare.

The diamond flakes falling all around her.

She sees them falling, falling, falling…

Like diamonds, like rain, like tears.

 

Unable yet to focus on just one,

She fixates on the constant onslaught of the weeping white sky

Fluffy white tears carried on the breeze,

Advancing from every current

All around her.

It takes a moment to realize

They’re falling on her.

 

He touches her arm so gently…

That touch takes form then suddenly turns to water

And runs into the hardened earth

Thirsty for his rain.

 

The snow keeps falling – the powder, the diamonds, the tears,

Her deep deep hunger

His velvet touch

If she could only feel it -

Just once,

Maybe she would forget the pain.

 

She prays for the snow to keep falling,

She feels his breath,

She lives to feel when he touches her,

And that he doesn’t give up –

 

For if she can feel it just once,

The spell would be broken

She would be set free

She could touch him

And he would know in an instant

That there was still warmth left in her

So thirsty for his rain

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pennyofheaven 6 years ago from New Zealand

Very moving. Enjoyed you poem Thanks!


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Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland Author

Thanks so much and glad you enjoyed it!


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richtwf 6 years ago

Beautiful thoughts expressed in your words and thanks for sharing these.

God bless and peace to you.


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katrinasui 6 years ago

I really enjoyed reading your poem.


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Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland Author

Thank you both so much for coming back to share in some of my thoughts and musings. I'm so glad you enjoyed them...some of the poet is coming out in me :)


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kirutaye 6 years ago from London, UK

I really enjoyed this - so evocative. Thanks for sharing.


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epigramman 6 years ago

..your poetic thoughts......your sublime writing makes me thirsty for more - so just call me 'insatiable' .....


Mary Walker-MOM 6 years ago

Beautiful and so inspiring, my little girl!!!!


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acaetnna 6 years ago from Guildford

Simply beautiful.


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Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland Author

Kirutaye, I am so glad you enjoyed this, I so enjoyed getting lost in the imagery. I have to admit I reedited it and published when I found it in a journal from a few years ago. Since the season was right, I could not escape the beautiful imagery - it was so vivid at the time and even now. But the last lines, I just added, for my soul is filled with hope now, and I couldn't publish without a glimmer.

Epigramman - as always, I enjoy your presence on my pages so much. I would keep writing if only you would keep leaving such wonderful comments to inspire me to write more!!

And to my lovely Mother, you honor me by leaving your first comment on my pages. I know you read everything I write, as you always tell me so (my father does too!), but your presence here, fills me with such happiness, like a child in school, showing you my first report card. Funny huh? I can't say I was without tears. I love you Mom.

Aceatnna, thank you so much for coming back. I'm always so happy to see you. I keep digging and pulling at the foundations of love to see its roots - when in reality - I have found my true love....as you have. I revel in it every day like you. I tell him, he knows :)


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The Suburban Poet 6 years ago from Austin, Texas

Beautiful poem Erin!


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Erin LeFey 6 years ago from Maryland Author

Thank you so much! Glad I was able to touch you, your poetry has so often touched me!


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

I read a short story years ago of a man lost in the snow fighting sleep to stay alive in a blizzard. Your poetry evokes memories of the man who submitted to death but lends hope to the circumstance. This is an excellent write which I thoroughly enjoyed. Thank you.


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Erin LeFey 5 years ago from Maryland Author

Thank you so much sligobay, I'm glad I was an instrument to remind you of the short story. I had to read through it again to see it in that context and it sounded different to me then...Peace and Love.


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sligobay 5 years ago from east of the equator

Erin, the comment by your Mom becomes one of the unintended but lovely part of this Hub. We all thirst for the approval of our parents and MOM certainly was inspired


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Erin LeFey 5 years ago from Maryland Author

I also post that I've published on Facebook so that family and friends can see that I've got a new hub. Mom said she likes to read my stuff so that she can still know what's "going on with me and know that I'm okay." I think its sweet and even more so because mom is not a reader, (I mean she CAN, she's just busy with everything) so the fact that she reads and comments means a lot to me. Its funny, some things I write on here, including this one, aren't really things you want your parents to read too far into - they get really personal when you pick them apart and study them. So in this case I wasn't looking for approval, I was more hoping for a light skimming ;) Have a wonderful day!!!


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Blake Flannery 5 years ago from United States

Nice imagery! I like reading poetry that is descriptive and meaningful. You did both here.


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Erin LeFey 5 years ago from Maryland Author

Thank you Blake, this was one of those that just wrote itself. The snow was falling and my mood was perfect. I love days like that! Love and peace my friend.


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Rick Baird 5 years ago from Three Rivers, Michigan

The cold is beautiful and desolate

a reminder that we are vulnerable

nature's embrace on the world

to cleanse life from the page

making way for so many births

yet still so unforgiving


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Erin LeFey 5 years ago from Maryland Author

Rick, thank you for your eloquent words and for visiting me here. Namaste.


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Rick Baird 5 years ago from Three Rivers, Michigan

thank you i thought the poem was beautiful i love poetry i will put some of mine up soon still trying to figure how this all works lol i put up an awareness hub about schizophrenia i wrote a piece called "the waking dream" you might find it interesting, im trying to raise awareness but not sure how to get people to the site?

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