Through This Mirror: a free form prose poem

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Free Form Prose Poetry

This poem breaks away from my usual rhyming poetry. It's my attempt at free form, prose poetry. I just needed to challenge myself and try to expand my repertoire. The result was quite satisfying, though my wife finds this poem quite disturbing and says she is at a loss to where or why my mind ventures to the places it does.

I have been trying to come up with a new micro-poem, but so far an idea is eluding me, instead this is what flowed from my pen. I hope you enjoy "Through This Mirror."

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Through This Mirror

by John Hansen © 2013


Through this mirror

I could fall, crashing,

Like Alice into Wonderland.

Escape this life of apathy,

Replace reality by fantasy.


Am I brave enough

To smash the glass,

Not knowing what awaits.

White rabbit, Queen of Hearts,

A grinning Cheshire cat perhaps?


Presiding over a tea party

The Mad Hatter sits,

"Cream or sugar?" He asks,

"Or burnt offerings, you may prefer?"


Maybe a rainbow colored world

With streets paved with gold,

Or a dark desolate place

Where death and suffering abound.

A land where war rages,

Where greed and hatred rule.


Is the gambler in me

Willing to chance my hand,

Forgo everything I am and know?

"Break the looking glass,

I dare you!"



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FlourishAnyway 3 years ago from USA

This makes me wonder who this complex person is in the mirror. Hmmm.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hmmm Flourish, I often wonder myself.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

wow next to Valley Poet you are becoming one of my favorties..:)


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Really Frank, that is one huge compliment. Thank you, thank you, thank you.


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Mahir Maric 3 years ago from Bosnia and Herzegovina

I think your attempt for the free form is really successful and also I think that matches the topis of the poem perfectly cause fantasy is free. Also I think that we all could live a fantasy if we wish but many of us just pretend that their wish is honest. I think it is a remarkable poem, Jodah.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for you kind and insightful comments Mahir.


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billybuc 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

I happen to love free form, and I love it when a writer stretches out and tries new forms of expression, so well done my friend.


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wetnosedogs 3 years ago from Alabama

Great. Certainly enjoyed this.


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Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

This somehow slipped by me. I think it is great too, and it feels so good doing different forms of writing and I agree with billy, well done!


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kidscrafts 3 years ago from Ottawa, Canada

Beautiful poem! I love your choice of illustrations... especially the one on the top!

Enjoy the rest of your weekend!


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anglnwu 3 years ago

The dare to step from the known to the unknown--beautifully captured in your choice of words.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Bill, getting the thumbs up from you about anything I write is a great compliment.

Wetnosedogs, I love it when someone enjoys my poems, thanks.

Glad you found this poem Jackie, thanks so much for your continued encouragement.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

I really appreciate you visiting this hub kids crafts. Thanks for your kind words, and glad you like the pics. I thought the one at the top was outstanding too.

Thank you anglnwu, I agree with you. I am often afraid of the unknown. It is a big step to take the risk. Thanks for your kind comment.


Rayne123 3 years ago

Very good, I really like it, its unique and the pictures are awesome.

Laurie


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for checking this one out and commenting Laurie. I always appreciate your reading my hubs, and glad you find them enjoyable.


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ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

Jodah,

I like to challenge myself as well. I applaud your efforts for you met this challenge and then some. I am a huge Alice fan. I love this poem and voted up for sure.

Kim


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for checking this hub out Kim, and your kind words and vote. I'm a sucker for fantasy tales like Alice in Wonderland and Wizard Of Oz...but don't tell anyone.


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Mike Robbers 3 years ago from London

Very beautiful hub Jodah, you got me!!


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for visiting Mike, and your generous comment.....you're trapped now! Cheers.


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Sunny River 3 years ago from A Place Without A Name which resides somewhere between Fantasy and Belief, just north of Reality

Beautiful and imaginative. I loved this! :)


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you so much Sunny, great to get your feedback.


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Eiddwen 3 years ago from Wales

A great read to vote up for sure Jodah. Here's to wishing you a great day too.

Eddy.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading and voting up Eddy, glad you enjoyed this one.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading and voting up Eddy, glad you enjoyed this one.


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Nikkij504gurl 3 years ago from Louisiana

You'll never know unless you go for it. Really good poem. Challenge yourself more often :)


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

You are so right Nikki, I do need to risk it more often and challenge myself. Just putting my poetry and writing on HP for others to see was a big step for me. But well done, you really saw what was behind this poem... My own insecurities.


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Nikkij504gurl 3 years ago from Louisiana

I have a lot of those myself.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hope you take your own good advice then ;)


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CraftytotheCore 3 years ago

So powerful and amazing Jodah! I love this piece. Wonderful!


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for visiting this hub Crafty, and your generous comment. Glad you enjoyed the read.


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Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

I really liked your poem. I loved the imagery and the whole unsettling feeling it evokes.

It sounds almost metaphorical, it is really interesting and such a great last stanza.


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Jodah 3 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for your insightful comments Anna. I agree it may be a little unsettling. It is about challenging yourself, risking the safety you know in the hope that the unknown may be better and more exciting. Glad you particularly like the last stanza.


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Letting go is great! Why not ... we only live once!

Up and more and sharing

Hugs, Faith Reaper


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

You are certainly making up for lost time Faith and reading all my hubs. Not that I'm complaining. Your caring comments make my day. I'll be checking out those hubs of yours I've missed out on shortly.

Hugs back,

Jodah(John)


Jane Arden 2 years ago

On reading this I can see that you have broken the boundaries and let your voice tell the story in your mind. We all want to smash the glass of our own mirrors from time to time and each wonderland is unique to every individual. Sometimes its other people, relationships we have that make us face the mirrors of our souls. This is an excellent piece of writing and I look forward to reading more of your work. Voted up and awesome


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Jane thank you for reading and for your wonderful insightful comment. We are on the same wavelength here. I greatly appreciate the vote up too.


Tutu Imchen 2 years ago

All of the above hubbers comments have already expressed what I had been thinking and meaning to write.

It is really beautiful and passionate.

I for one, personally sense a 'realistic fantasy' in this poem, something we all struggle within ourselves, a battle we often fail to understand.

It really is eye opening. Thank you for writing this beautiful poem. I loved it.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for readng Tutu. After reading your 'Looking Glass' poem, I thought you would be able to appreciate this one as well. Thank you for reading and for your kind comment.


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ChitrangadaSharan 5 months ago from New Delhi, India

Beautiful and impressive poem! Dare to move towards the Unknown ---great thoughts , beautifully expressed! Your first picture is so powerful and so much related to the theme!

Thanks for sharing!


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Jodah 5 months ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for the wonderful comment, Chitrangada. I recently added one etra stanza t this poem. Glad you were impressed by it.

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