Living in Japan: II Translation of Ten Japanese Haiku

Bosha Kawabata's Fiddlehead Haiku in Kanji and Romaji

Fiddlehead Haiku in Kanji
Fiddlehead Haiku in Kanji

Translation of Ten Japanese Haiku

Professor Minoru Fujita and I worked together on translating four Japanese haikuists from the original Japanese into English back in 1983. These poems have never appeared online but originally were published in Paintbrush: A Journal of Poetry, Translation and Letters (Spring&Autumn, 1983 issue). However, I am providing a copy of our worksheet for Bosha Kawabata's delightful poem "Fiddleheads" that did not appear in Paintbrush; it is hoped that this sample worksheet shows the process of translation effectively.

Bosha Kawabata: 3 Haiku:

A drop of dew;

an ant recedes from it

staggering


In glimmer of moon

scars of deep snow

cannot be hidden


Gentle fiddleheads

sprout like no characters

in earthly paradise


Seishi Yamaguchi: 2 Haiku

Even disappearing tip

of tail is still nothing

but a snake's body


What a crunching sound

praying mantis makes

with bee's head


Shuson Kato: 2 Haiku


Eyes of pheasant

shine forth brilliantly

while sold away


A frogfish

frozen to the bone

gets all chopped up


Hakyo Ishida : 3 Haiku


A grapefruit split open

bursts forth like joy,

its color and smell


For but an instant

setting sun transfigures

with gold a burnt land


Waiting for a bus,

I cannot doubt coming

of spring to wide boulevard


These four Japanese poets are all deceased. They lived in the early to mid-twentieth century. I first met Professor Fujita in 1981 when I taught American literature for one full year at Osaka University. He is an eminent Shakespeare scholar but loves contemporary Japanese haiku for its stark and surprising poignancy. He and I spent several months working on this translation. His English is at a much higher level than my Japanese but he respected the fact that I am a poet who wrote a collection of poems Bamboo in the Sun (1983) in a Japanese manner.

See also: http://hubpages.com/hub/A-New-Translation-of-An-Inca-Rain-Poem

Summary

Ideally, a translation from Japanese to English should be made by a team of two. One should be fluent in Japanese and proficient in English and the reverse for the other person. Both should be engrossed in the subject matter.

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Pamela99 6 years ago from United States

Very nice poems and a tribute to those they have passed on. Good hub.


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Hello, hello, 6 years ago from London, UK

Wow, juneaukid. This is a very impressive hub and I thank you for it.


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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado Author

Thank you both Pamela99 and Hello, hello.


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Moulik Mistry 6 years ago from Burdwan, West Bengal, India

Beautiful haikus - I love haiku, thank you for sharing...


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dohn121 6 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

Excellent painstaking work, juneaukid. I'd love to read your book someday. Is it available still? I'd like to also get back into writing haikus again as well. Thanks as always.


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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado Author

Thanks Dohn121. You can get used copies of Bamboo in the Son by Richard F. Fleck (Kobe: SU Press, 1983) from Alibris or other online used book dealers. Thanks again


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maven101 6 years ago from Northern Arizona

Interesting translation, but seemingly lacking the passion and imagery of these great poets....Perhaps the Japanese haiku form does not lend itself to English translation...

I note that Basho's famous haiku " frog jumping into pond " has over 31 recognized translations, running from the exquisitely simple " Old pond

frog leaping

Splash ",

to the profound " A lonely pond in age-old stillness sleeps . . .

Apart, unstirred by sound or motion . . .

till..Suddenly into it a lithe frog leaps.",

to the sublime " There once was a curious frog

Who sat by a pond on a log

And, to see what resulted,

In the pond catapulted

With a water-noise heard round the bog."

I have never read the Japanese translations of John Keats, but I would imagine such would be the case there, also...

Thank you for this interesting Hub...Larry


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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado Author

Thank you Larry for your comments particularly on Basho. Translation is really transliteration. I remember Gilbert Chinard lecturing on the difficulties of translating Faulkner into French. He managed to get the southern accent by utilizing Marseillese.


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maven101 6 years ago from Northern Arizona

Now that is interesting...To the French, the Marseillaise would indeed project the southern flavor... Thanks, Larry


SuzieQ 6 years ago

Great site. It's nice to see real poetry amid all this junk on the Internet!


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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado Author

Thank you both Suzie Q and maven101 for your appreciative comments


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Pearldiver 6 years ago from Tomorrow - In Words & NZ Time.

Interesting that the passion needs to be lost either way in translation.. I personally would tend to question the ability of the translator to relay the passion in the same degree as the poet projected it... A very hard ask when done beyond the grave.. Maybe I should write my haiku in both kanji and english. Thanks for sharing.


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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado Author

Thanks Pearldiver. It is a very hard task, indeed.


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sligobay 6 years ago from east of the equator

"A grapefruit split open" is my favorite. There is such joy in its smell and taste. Thank you for a lovely hub.


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juneaukid 6 years ago from Denver, Colorado Author

Thank you, Sligobay!


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Emily Hopkins 5 years ago

These are great, thanks for posting. And yes, translation will never be the same as the original, and interpretation is always left to the whims of the translator. I remember translating Latin poetry into English...you could translate the entire poem incorrectly if you didn't recognize the subject was written half way into the poem.


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juneaukid 5 years ago from Denver, Colorado Author

Thank you Emily for your comment--translation is more like transliteration.


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Truckstop Sally 5 years ago

Thanks for sharing these beautiful poems . . . and a bit of the culture too. The praying mantis and bee's head sure paints a picture!


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juneaukid 5 years ago from Denver, Colorado Author

Thank you Truckstop Sally and thanks for following my hubs


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ignugent17 3 years ago from Central Illinois , USA

I always admire the beauty of haiku and the translations are all amazing.

Thanks for sharing. :-)


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juneaukid 3 years ago from Denver, Colorado Author

Thank you ignugent17, I appreciate it.

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