True to that Hope


Believing in God

was the only way to cope,

so they remained true to that hope,

a funeral home brimming with survivors,

the dead’s family and friends

were arrayed, sprayed,

at the center and edges of the room,

it was a sunny day,

but it felt so gloom,

prayers were whispered

in the dry heat of the crowded room,

a man in a dark suit

stood there,

thin as bones,

expressing his most heartfelt sorrow

in slow, measured tones,

trying to convince the mother,

that God was found,

his head titled down,

hands folded together at the waist,

the dead was with God,

joining him at a feast,

the man in the dark suit

was a parish priest,

trying to offer hope,

and doing his best,

standing over the woman

in the black dress

during her moments of stress,

not praying was her choice,

but God still heard her voice,

while the casket stood in the center,

dominate of course,

exerting a certain centripetal force.

© 2012 Frank Atanacio

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epigramman 4 years ago

....poetic art in your very own minimalist approach with not a wasted word - and of course , your patented style of telling a story so well in cinematic detail.

lake erie time 9:27am


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justateacher 4 years ago from Somewhere Over The Rainbow - Near Oz...

Another great one Frank!


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Jlava73 4 years ago from Cyberspace and My Own World

You are a true poetic Master Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Epi for your wonderful comment and good to see you juatateacher and Jlave thanks for stopping by bless you all


Sannel Larson 4 years ago

Your words painted a scene so vivid and intense that I felt I was right there. Wow! Not praying was her choice, but God still heard her voice. . . so lovely! You are a brilliant poet, Frank. Take care, Sannel


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

good to see you sannel thanks so much and bless you girl


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

wow frank I LOVE THIS ONE!!! awesome my kind of poem..

Debbie


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Our Dear Ms Brooks.. bless you


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Frank, Wow! this poem great you keep out doing yourself.

Voted up and awesome my friend, Joyce.


Lakepoet 4 years ago

Expertly written Frank, your poem brings your reader into the funeral home and into a room filled with sorrows and grief. Awesome


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Just great Frank you painted a scene of real anguish.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Joyce bless you for stopping by as always :)


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Lakepoet and Gypsy.. good to see you both thanks for reading my entry :)


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thelyricwriter 4 years ago from West Virginia

You the man Frank! Always visually intact with your poetry pal. Up and awesome.


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Rosemay50 4 years ago from Hawkes Bay - NewZealand

Awesome poem Frank. The imagery of your words never fails to put me right in the scene.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks thelyricwriter and Rosemay--you guys are da bomb!


leann2800 4 years ago

I really started the poem feeling sad and reverent but the end was scary for me. Of all horror films, the demonic ones are the ones I refuse to watch. Hell is the scariest of scary to me. So,

"during her moments of stress,

not praying was her choice" was scary for me. But, I actually ended a Frank Atancio creation feeling relieved when you wrote "God still heard her voice." There is no surprising button, I am voting awesome.


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acaetnna 4 years ago from Guildford

Wonderful - completely awesome - thank you


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

Leann thank you so much and I agree with you about your fears LOL I have the same ones.. and thank you too acaetnna for the visit :) Frank


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

Such a wonderful and thought provoking piece! Loved this Frank!


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Audrey bless you


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Jackie Lynnley 4 years ago from The Beautiful South

This is deep and those two lines, yes, so stand out. Very good.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Jackie Lynn :)


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Angelme566 4 years ago

Wow..powerful lines !


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Angelme


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Just Ask Susan 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Many of your poems I can feel I am right there. This is one of them.


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Frank Atanacio 4 years ago from Shelton Author

i am so glad that it does.. I try to write as familiar as possible sometimes it works bless you susan


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

why not write a novel Frank...you could be a great mystery writer...


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks Raci :)


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wayne barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

Very powerful, Frank. Atmospheric reality captured in your words. Great work!


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you Wayne barrett bless you


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Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

Excellent writing. We were there and felt the emotions clearly.


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton Author

thanks so much Anna :)


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tillsontitan 3 years ago from New York

I love it when I find something you've written long ago and am still moved by your words. You do not waste a one. Every word has a meaning that penetrates our brain.

Well done my friend.

Voted up and awesome.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

thank you so much Til :)


Jane Arden 2 years ago

I loved this phrase 'not praying was her choice,

but God still heard her voice,', very moving and got me thinking.


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Anna Haven 2 years ago from Scotland

I have read this before and I just read it again. It really is very good.


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AudreyHowitt 2 years ago from California

You create atmosphere like no one else I know--so well done Frank!


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MsDora 2 years ago from The Caribbean

The casket in the center of the room, brings everyone else and everything else into focus. Great poetry!


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton Author

@ Jane thank you for stopping.. @ Anna thanks for the revisit @ Audrey thank you for the revisit. @ MsDora thank you :)


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LadyFiddler 2 years ago from Somewhere in the West

Hi Frank very creative :) keep up the fine work of poetic art . You paint your words well :)


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Frank Atanacio 19 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you Lady...bless you


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cam8510 19 months ago from Columbus, Georgia until the end of November 2016.

"A certain, centripetal force," indeed. Very interesting piece, Frank. Emotions and fears are explored well. Thanks for sharing.


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Frank Atanacio 8 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you cam :)


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Jodah 8 months ago from Queensland Australia

How did I miss this one the first time around, Frank? Wonderful poetry.


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MsDora 8 months ago from The Caribbean

"But God still heard her voice," touched me deeper the second time around.


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Frank Atanacio 8 months ago from Shelton Author

Thank you so much MsDora and Jodah for being true to my hope :)


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always exploring 8 months ago from Southern Illinois

I ask the same question, where was I when you first published this. Beautiful poetry. I loved it!!!!!

PS while strolling down to reach the end I noticed how many of the hubbers are gone. I miss all of them....


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Frank Atanacio 8 months ago from Shelton Author

Always I said the same thing :) bless you


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savvydating 8 months ago

Your prose is so real, it scares me. Your subject matter is "disturbing" but life isn't always sunshine and cute kittens, is it?


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Frank Atanacio 8 months ago from Shelton Author

thank you savvydating :)

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