Untangle: A Poem


“Cry. Forgive. Learn. Move on. Let your tears water the seeds of your future happiness.”-Steve Maraboli

Turn a cold shoulder,

It's easier than being bolder,

I'll just walk a straight line,

You start out with hearts intertwined,

But then the fates weren't quite aligned,

So when it just all collapses,

You gotta face all the facts 'cause,

This wasn't quite how you thought it'd be,


But then you sit close to a warm fire,

And you wash off all the grime and mire,

So, your frigid heart begins to thaw,

And life once more puts you in awe,


There's still beauty to be seen,

And the grass here still is green,

You can release a heavy, relieved sigh,

Look back for a second, and then just wave goodbye.

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samsammy 4 years ago from Gangolli, Karnataka, India

beautiful and voted up, nice pics are added, also good poem

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Ebower 4 years ago from Georgia Author

samsammy: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :)

4 years ago

Some good use of language yet again. Voted up. The knot patterns remind me of a Celtic design seem in tracery, tattoo, etc. Blessings.

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Ebower 4 years ago from Georgia Author

f: Thank you! Oh ok; interesting. This is actually an old poem that I found in a journal of mine yesterday.

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CM Sullivan 4 years ago from California

Nice, it has a happy ending! I like the style of it as well. :)

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Ebower 4 years ago from Georgia Author

CM Sullivan: Thanks! I appreciate your comment. :)

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Phil Plasma 4 years ago from Montreal, Quebec

Nice piece about moving on. Indeed, the world moves onwards perpetually, why shouldn't we?

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Ebower 4 years ago from Georgia Author

Phil Plasma: Thank you, Phil. Yes, life goes on whether we are happy or sad. Thanks for reading!

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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Wow this is a great poem..wow..blessings....debbie

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Ebower 4 years ago from Georgia Author

Deborah Brooks: Thanks, Debbie! :)

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Docmo 4 years ago from UK

I love this poem- the words and the allusions are impeccably strung together- only to be untangled. You rhyme wonderfully naturally, Erin. awesome. shared.

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tillsontitan 4 years ago from New York

Voted up, awesome, and beautiful. You've used this poem to tell everyone that life goes on and we should make the best of it, even if its over a lost love....at least that's what I got!.

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mary615 4 years ago from Florida

I never used to like to read poems but your work has changed my mind! Beautiful....

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Ebower 4 years ago from Georgia Author

Docmo: "the words and the allusions are impeccably strung together-only to be untangled" I guess that happened unintentionally. Thanks so much!

tillsontitan: Yes, sometimes it's hard to untangle the complications due to relationships and the aftermath of them. Thanks for voting!

mary615: Wow...that comment has made my week; maybe my year! Thank you; I appreciate your kind comment so much.

3 years ago

You have a way with words, anyway! How is your tutoring going? Blessings.

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Ebower 3 years ago from Georgia Author

f: Thanks! I don't tutor anymore. I work at a store.

3 years ago

Oh congrats., you found work! (Anyway, maybe this explains too why you removed your plugs...) Blessings.

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