Vanishing in the Fog

Relationships are like carousels

They revolve around one’s love

Making the heart light and dizzy

But once a carousel

Begins to buck

It means that love has become stuck

Soon the carousel no longer turns

And the paint begins to peel

So their love had taken a spin

But life’s troubles came knocking at the door

He was an artist

Who heard the big city calling

With stars in his eyes

And dreams of popularity

He was ready to leave

For parts unknown

The big city lights were twinkling in the distance

While she was a girl

Content to live the suburban life

Where she could see the stars up above at night

And not neon reflected in the dark

It seemed that their love

Might be enough

But finally came the day

When in the early morning light

He headed for the train

She went to see him off

The morning was misty

And there was a heavy fog

They didn’t exchange any words

It was much too late for them

Oh, she had so much to say

But she sadly thought

That to hold him

Would be to regret

How he felt long afterwards

As fate would have it

He seemed to want to end it quickly

And as they approached the crossroads

Just before the railway station

He caught her at a moment

When tears were in her eyes

When she looked up again

He had vanished in the fog

She didn’t go farther

With heavy heart she returned home

Day in and day out she missed him

And to save herself from tears

With a hope filled heart

She took early morning walks

To the crossroads

To see if he had returned home

Being proud and being stubborn

He wrote a few brief lines

But they were just lame

There was nothing to indicate feeling

Until the day he sold his first masterpiece

It was a portrait of her

As he’d last seen her

With eyes brimming full of tears

In the early morning mist and fog

That day she received

A newspaper clipping

It showed him proudly standing besides the portrait smiling

It informed one and all

That a new artist had arrived

Now she wondered what he’d do next

And then like a flash of reckoning she knew

The next day dawned a morning

Like the one in which they’d parted

And she ran as fast as she could

The train whistle was blowing

And there he stood

Stepping out of the fog

They came together with passion

He’d achieved his dream

Now he could work anywhere

He had come back to the woman

He couldn’t live without

For whom he’d made a masterpiece of true love

They were destined to be together forever

The carousel had begun revolving again

Music filling the air

The artist had come home

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tillsontitan 3 years ago from New York

A remarkable story told in prose. This was just beautiful. You had me wondering what was going to happen, after all, carousels do start up again! Then the painting...so nicely done my friend.

Voted up, awesome, and beautiful.


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billybuc 3 years ago from Olympia, WA

You are a master poet in prose form, or is that a master prose writer in poem form? :) Either way, you tell a story in poetic fashion as well as anyone I have read.

Blessings my friend and bravo!

bill


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MrsBrownsParlour 3 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

The carousel is a wonderful metaphor for your romantic plot!


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wetnosedogs 3 years ago from Alabama

I love when you got me hanging wondering what is going to happen. Wonderful.


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ahorseback 3 years ago

Well my dear ! It ceertainly is a long and winding road ! You and I , We have waited for love haven't we ? It's such a drag to know when it won't happen ! I've been there , You ? .........Hugs !


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Frank Atanacio 3 years ago from Shelton

you are most impressive when you write poetry like this Gypsy.. bravo :)


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Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

Your thoughts astound me, how you swirl down words and let them flow like a novel but twisting and turning and playing like a dance. You have a special talent. ^


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old albion 3 years ago from Lancashire. England.

Hi Gypsy. A lovely warm ending. 'All the lights on Broadway ain't worth an acre of green' Well done.

Graham.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia Author

Glad you enjoyed this Mary. Was listening to the Beatles and as sometimes it occurs inspiration hit. Thanks for the vote.

Glad you enjoyed this Bill. You know right now I think that telling stories in poetic form come naturally because I write them while listening to the music which inspired.

Glad you enjoyed this Lurana. Somehow that carousel just popped up and I was happy to see I could weave it in there.

Glad you enjoyed this wetnosedogs.

Ed the way to love is a long and winding road and we who reach the end are the lucky ones. Roads like that can be practically endless so to say. Hugs.

Glad you enjoyed this Frank and I must say that your stories always fascinate me and I love reading them.

Glad you enjoyed this Jackie. You know sometimes I think my dad up there among the stars being a famous poet helps me along. You should see when inspiration hits me my fingers fly across the keyboard and afterwards I have to read back what I have written. I do believe that's divine help.

Glad you enjoyed this Graham. I love that saying.


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Vellur 3 years ago from Dubai

Beautiful and romantic poem. I love happy endings. Great write.


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Faith Reaper 3 years ago from southern USA

This is magical! What a beautiful love story told here. I am glad the carousel began again. He had to go and make his way, and then made his way back to his love.

Stunningly beautiful work. Love the added drama with the mist and the fog!

Voted up ++++ and sharing

God bless, Faith Reaper


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Deborah Brooks 3 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Hello Sweet gypsy.. how are you are.?. this is simply beautiful. I am so glad he came home.. Blessings my friend

Voted up and sharing

Debbie


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Levertis Steele 3 years ago from Southern Clime

Beautiful poem!

I watched a movie a few years ago, but I forgot the title. It was about a man who was lost at sea and ended up on an island where he spent many years alone. He often dreamed of his wife and hoped for a reunion one day. When rescue came, he could hardly wait to rush through the door of his home, embrace his love, and spend the rest of their lives together. Instead of the beautiful homecoming he had anticipated, he was met with an ex-wife and her husband. She had gotten over his assumed death and really loved her second husband. Although the old love for her lost husband resurfaced inside of her, the second love burned as hotly. She had children with the second husband and had to make the right decision for everyone. She chose to remain in her new, beautiful world and leave the old beautiful world in the past. The former husband was obviously disappointed, but he understood, accepted, and walked away to an uncertain, but optimistic, future and vanished beyond the movie credits.

Sometimes when true love is absent, even for a while, life goes on for the one left behind, and that life can be beautiful also. So we end with a sweet-sad story and wonder what it all means.

Thanks for sharing, Gypsy Rose!


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Jackie Lynnley 3 years ago from The Beautiful South

Oh that happens to me too Gypsy and it is like someone else wrote it? I am brought close to tears many times, rereading. lol No poets in my family and I only found it about 4 years ago, quite by accident...or fate.

Wonderful feeling though, huh?


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wayne barrett 3 years ago from Clearwater Florida

Rasma, this is truly a beautiful love story. Voting up and sharing.


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always exploring 3 years ago from Southern Illinois

I loved your story told in poetic verse. I also love happy endings....


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kashmir56 3 years ago from Massachusetts

Hi my friend so beautifully and cleverly written, enjoyed reading it .


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Anna Haven 3 years ago from Scotland

A full love story unfolded on the page all within poetic form. You have a real talent for this. Very skillful.


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MartieCoetser 3 years ago from South Africa

Awesome story and picture. Rasma, you are a true amorous idealist :)


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BlossomSB 3 years ago from Victoria, Australia

Lovely story in a poem and so well told. Enjoyed reading it - and the image at the top was especially good for setting the theme.


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Suzie HQ 3 years ago from Dublin, Ireland

Hi Rasma,

Beautifully written story, in poetry - loved this!

Voted up, awesome, beautiful and shared!


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ImKarn23 3 years ago

Rasma...i left a long comment here HOURS ago, shared, pinned, voted, etc, and yet - it's not here..

Sigh..i've been known to forget to hit the 'post comment' button..

I need you to know how much this affected me - it give me goosebumps on goosebumps!

I love that love won out in the end, even if he had to become rich and famous first..

Great fog, glad he found his way home!


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia Author

Glad you enjoyed this Vellur. Happy endings don't always happen but they are the best.

Glad you enjoyed this Faith. The song inspired and the rest just unraveled. Thanks for the vote and share. God bless.

Glad you enjoyed this Debbie and thanks for the vote and share. Blessing to you too my friend.

Glad you enjoyed this. I remember that movie Levertis and as sad as it was it did deliver the message that life does go on and one has to accept things as they are.

Jackie that is the most wonderful feeling - getting inspired and writing up something which even astonishes one's self and then having others enjoy it too.

Glad you enjoyed this Wayne. Thanks for the vote and share.

Glad you enjoyed this Ruby. Even though sometimes the endings can't all be happy the happy ones are the best.

Glad you enjoyed this Kashmir.

Glad you enjoyed this Anna.

Glad you enjoyed this Martie. There is nothing like romance.

Glad you enjoyed this Blossom. Was lucky to find that pic. Fit right in there.

Glad you enjoyed this Suzi. Thanks for the vote and share.

Glad you enjoyed this Leslie. When you mentioned perhaps not hitting the post comment button well there have been quite a few times I've gone back to check if I did or did not do that. Just had to have him make his way home again. Thanks for the vote and share. Hugs.


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ocfireflies 3 years ago from North Carolina

How I love a happy ending and you deliver it with this poem. Thank You!

Best Always,

Kim


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia Author

Glad you enjoyed this Kim. The best to you.


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Michael-Milec 3 years ago

Hello gypsy-rose-lee

Effectual. " A masterpiece of true love." What a characterization of "love".

Love : - a heavenly origin. ( imitation unsuccessful). God's attitude towards man. He g a v e . . . Love is a c t of giving ; nature of the Creator when imitated in human relationship surpasses any choices words, feelings, emotions, fondness etc. - manifests in deeds :

he had come back...had come home... to be together.

Sigh.

Voted awesome.

Please, continue to be a blessing.

Michael.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 3 years ago from Riga, Latvia Author

Glad you enjoyed this Michael. If love is true they always come back. Thanks for the vote. Hope you're having a sunny and relaxing Sunday.


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shanmarie 3 years ago from Texas

A sad love story with a happy ending! :)

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