Walking a Fine Line

Look at me, really look at me

Tell me, what is it that you see

I will tell you about the things you see

You see in me all of your own insecurities

You see lies concocted within your own mind

Taken your own truths and mistaken them for mine

Don't you know that you are walking a fine line

Without a clue what it is that you are leaving behind?

© 2014 Shannon

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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia

Interesting and thought provoking Shanmarie. The faults we see in others are often the traits we dislike about ourselves.


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always exploring 2 years ago from Southern Illinois

Interesting take on walking a thin line. I liked it.....


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Ericdierker 2 years ago from Spring Valley, CA. U.S.A.

Well done -- a fine line indeed.


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shanmarie 2 years ago from Texas Author

Isn't that the truth, Jodah.


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shanmarie 2 years ago from Texas Author

Thank you, Ruby. It is a different take. I suppose that in coupling with the song it might be an even wider angle, as far as the many directions of thought this poem could possibly take one goes.


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shanmarie 2 years ago from Texas Author

Thank you much, Eric.


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Faith Reaper 2 years ago from southern USA

Great writing dear Shan! Yes, that fine line, when they (the stupid boys) do not even realize what they had and now have left behind ... sad when it is that another does not take the time to truly get to know those closest to them ...and they miss out on something beautiful.

I love Keith Urban, but I have not heard that song before. It is very moving and perfect for your poem which stirs the heart.

Up ++++ and away

Hugs and blessings always


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shanmarie 2 years ago from Texas Author

Thank you very much Faith Reaper. It is sad indeed. Both parties miss out on something beautiful. And just as the song says, it is often too late before that is realized.

Hugs and blessings to you too!


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ImKarn23 2 years ago

whoever doesn't look deep enuf to KNOW - doesn't deserve to..

great insight here (pardon pun)...

hugs hun...


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shanmarie 2 years ago from Texas Author

Ha. You're punny, but I suppose you're right, Leslie.


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shanmarie 2 years ago from Texas Author

Faith Reaper, I tried to edit my comment, but five minutes sure flew by! I'm not entirely sure it actually gives full five minutes to edit. ha!

Sarah Buxton co-wrote that song and has a version of it, but I like Keith's version much better. There's something even more moving about the song coming from a man's point of view. The video used is longer than the radio version, but I love his guitar playing.

Here's her version if you are interested. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-BOr8MuUeic


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ahorseback 2 years ago

I am always surprised Shannie how little we really know each other .I walk by neighbors , see old friends or acquaintances, it's like we don't take the time to truly know one another at all ! Nice poem , nice song , nice Shannie !........Lol


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shanmarie 2 years ago from Texas Author

No, Ed, we don't. And even when we do, they are often taken for granted. The truth is that we all contact those most important more often than others (not that all friends aren't loved or important) even when we don't have time or would rather be doing something else, not feeling up to it, etc. It's a priority thing. It should cherished because it can either fade all to quickly or be completely gone in an instant.


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Monis Mas 2 years ago

Provocative and straight forward. I find it interesting!


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shanmarie 2 years ago from Texas Author

I suppose it is, Monis Mas. Glad you find it to be interesting!

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