Whats In A Promise?

What are in words...

do they trip from the mouth?

does what you say make a difference...

expressing more then your soul?

does yes mean yes?

contracts not important...

if what you want, cross what you could get...

would you say yes when you mean no?

if so how can you do anything good...

your froward tongue proving you false...

ever prone to go with your heart...

your heart being on your desire and not any other...

so long as your interests run counter to all...

your need being the only one to satisfy...

why think you ill...

when you promise to God...

saying that you will be good for a price...

wanting out of peril...

giving what you think you should...

then not gaining your prize...

turning your heart sour.


What are in words...

what could they be? 

could you prove that He might trust you...

could you be good without a fee?

then you would be you...

but you would be free...

every thing you said would be true...

perhaps in being true you would see...

brighter ways, better ways...

open to views that are higher then yours...

promising heart to the eternal...

not taking it back... 

gaining something in return...

Love, hope and peace.

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perfectperception 5 years ago from USA

Your word should be your bond and you shouldn't break them. Don't say it if you don't mean it. That's my motto! Thanks. Good stuff here


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DavePrice 5 years ago from Sugar Grove, Ill

The beginning had me hooked, but the ending brought it home fantastic! I wonder how many will miss what you have cloaked with such beauty?


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b. Malin 5 years ago

Be true to yourself...the older I get I believe that to be true. Thanks for sharing your version.


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Jaggedfrost 5 years ago Author

Perfect, it is one of my mottoes too. I wonder if you have ever thought of taking that concept to a more existential level.

Dave, I am glad that I hooded you and that you were profoundly touched. It is nice when someone gets some of the point. The funny thing is that the more I read other's comments the more I am convinced that I don't get the entire point and I wrote it!

Malin, You are very welcome.


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Dave Mathews 5 years ago from NORTH YORK,ONTARIO,CANADA

Let your "YES" mean yes not no, nor maybe, nor we'll see,BUT "YES".


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Jaggedfrost 5 years ago Author

Dave, From the mouth of the great Amen or Amun, You are very much correct. Let us not be lukewarm.


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acaetnna 5 years ago from Guildford

I certainly think you should always be true to yourself. I believe you should say what you think, lways tactfully of course!I read this several times to really think about what you were saying. Your poetry deep and heart felt.


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Jaggedfrost 5 years ago Author

acaetnna, as ever, a pleasure to give you something to contemplate over. I am glad you enjoyed and I agree with you there to. Great comment.


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hillrider 5 years ago from Mid-west United States

What I found was a little different than most I guess. In the following lines you seem to speak (IMO) of our willingness to adhere to our "word" because of a received benefit from without. However the "truth" if I am reading it properly, would be within and we would already have been capable of receiving that which we had "bargained" to receive.

YOUR LINES:

"could you be good without a fee?

then you would be you...

but you would be free...

every thing you said would be true..."

We have this idea that if we make a deal we should hold true to the deal. I believe you are saying if we simply were true to the ideal we wouldn't need to make the deal for it would have already be existent.

If I am off I apologize, just what I caught from this...


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Jaggedfrost 5 years ago Author

lol the problem is that you are trying to isolate lines of verse and don't quite understand that when I write, no meaning can be extrapolated with comprehending the complete stanza. But if your interpretation works for you then thats cool by me.

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