When God Doesn't Answer: a short poem

Art & Poetry by Brian Loewer

A short poem


Cold steel and death

shoved against her flesh.

Dark devoured her screams,

as she pleaded with each breath.


Letting out 'No's!' and elbows,

she threw them from her back

with the fury of God!

She fought against the act,

but with wrists and movement

fastened in his grip,

she had not a chance

to grab the secret on her hip.


So she flailed,

face pale in despair.

Scratching concrete

with nobody there.


His glares of pure evil

slammed against her eyes

and with one last gasp

she tried...


to reach her piece,

remembering the words

the pastor preached,

"Thou shall not kill."


Thou kill she must.

Concealed carry,

she felt it,

a trigger's touch.


So, she prayed again,

but God had no reply.

With her hand full of led,

she shot the devil till he died.


© July 03, 2013 Brian M. Loewer All rights reserved.

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9 comments

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Fiery Angel Arts 3 years ago from Providence, RI

Wow this is so graphic but in such a poetic way. Kinda makes me feel like I was in the middle of it all!! Very intelligent use of the drama in all the vivid details.


Ausseye 3 years ago

What the fuck ….justice served, oh so well

Giving it’s rich reward for utter disrespect

Lead, true to nature, in it’s fury flight

One ape less in this small world

And one more amendment to add to all humanity

We are all born equal, deserving of respect

Equal and free to choose our own unique individual path.


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MrsBrownsParlour 3 years ago from Chicagoland, Illinois

Vivid and powerful and thought-provoking! ~Lurana


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LVidoni5 3 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Hey Pamela- thanks for reading. I appreciate your insight on my poem. I always love hearing what others take from them. Enjoy your weekend!


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Pamela99 3 years ago from United States

This poem really tells the story of fear and the fight for survival. Even though she the brief thought of God's commandment, He did not say do not defend yourself. Well done!


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LVidoni5 3 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

No doubt about it xstatic. Thanks for the read and UP! Always greatly appreciated.


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xstatic 3 years ago from Eugene, Oregon

And he richly deserved it. Up!


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LVidoni5 3 years ago from Portland, Oregon Author

Thanks FitnezzJim! Glad you liked this one.


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FitnezzJim 3 years ago from Fredericksburg, Virginia

Well done. Under stress, the instict for survival ('I don't want to die') trumps higher principle ('Thou shall not kill').

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