When The World Explodes (a poem of war-torn love)

Poetry Challenge and Acknowledgement

This poem was my contribution to the Poem Challenge 2 set by Sunny River.

http://sunnyriver.hubpages.com/hub/Poem-Challenge-2#comment-12336831

For her challenge Sunny provided a list of 45 phrases. Her instructions were "If you are writing a stanza poem, include one phrase in every stanza. If there are no stanzas, make sure one phrase is included for every four lines."

It was a challenge meeting these guidelines but I think I succeeded. I hope you enjoy this piece of poetry and welcome your comments.

The mushroom cloud of the atomic bombing of Nagasaki, Japan on August 9, 1945 rose some 18 kilometers (11 mi) above the bomb's hypocenter.
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When The World Explodes

by John Hansen © 2013


I have snapshots in my mind

Of the one I left behind,

In a land so far away,

And my heart still aches today.


It was in Japan we met,

And I can't forget it yet.

Pretty ribbons in your hair,

Pink blossoms everywhere.


Wispy thoughts I can't control,

And the sadness takes its toll

As the memories flood back,

Of the atomic bomb attack.


Thunder rumbles through my bones,

As I recall the frightening tones,

Mushroom cloud engulfs the sky,

We are all about to die.


People running, racked by pain,

As the dragon slips its chain,

And Satan's deadly dust begins to fall,

Not discriminating, touching one and all.


Under the fiery light of the sun,

A vendetta of vengeance had begun.

Uncle Sam, with power and might,

Showing no mercy, won the fight.


We say our love will never die,

Until we see that fearsome sky.,

And all our words just fall down dead,

When all the world turns red.


One by one and two by two,

Separating me from you,

Survivors frantic to escape

In the bomb's horrendous wake.


In a land far from home,

I never felt more alone.

Without knowledge of your plight,

I searched for you until the night.


As the shadows lengthen

My attempts to find you strengthen

But my sad quest is in vain,

Like the weak tattoo of rain.


Clouds of words around my head

Thoughts that my love may be dead.

Things I never dare to say,

Keep recurring five times a day.


Now my life is filled with sorrow,

For yesterday or tomorrow.

It seems all love erodes,

When the world explodes.

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Do you consider the the bombing of Hiroshima and Nagasaki were:

  • An unfortunate but necessary retaliation for the attack on Pearl Harbor?
  • A travesty of human rights causing senseless death and suffering?
  • A quick way to end a war that could have gone on for years longer?
  • A sad part of history best forgotten?
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tobusiness 2 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Your poems are always touchingly beautiful, this is exceptionally sad and poignant. One can't help but be moved by this piece of poetry. I love how the lines in bold tells it's own story, nice touch.


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Marie Flint 2 years ago from Jacksonville, FL

This poem undoubtedly serves as some sort of catharsis for you. If it's any consolation, the Buddhist deity Kuan Yin, the Goddess of Mercy, has been observed by some seers as catching the bombs in her garments to protect the people during that fateful day. Devotees who were following the way of the Christ were untouched by the radiation. The chant for Kuan Yin is OM MANE PADME HUM. Having done her rosary several years ago, I can attest--yes, her flame is merciful, very comforting, and very beautiful.

I especially liked "tattoo of rain." Very nice.


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ocfireflies 2 years ago from North Carolina

Jodah,

WOW! How you took the challenge and created this poem is incredible.

I appreciate how you bold-faced the challenge words and phrases. A definite V+/share. Kudos to Sunny River as well for her inspiration to us all.

Many Blessings,

Kim


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you so much Kim for your kind comments and vote up etc. Yes, I agree, Sunny River deserves praise and thanks for providing the inspiring phrases.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

I appreciate your kind words tobusiness. I always try to stir an emotion in my readers, I'm glad this succeeded.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Marie, but this was totally inspired by the phrases provided by Sunny River in the poem challenge. I would never have even thought to write a poem on this subject otherwise.


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kidscrafts 2 years ago from Ottawa, Canada

What a beautiful and sad poem. War from above doesn't discriminate! Wars are destroying lives in the surrounding of people but also in their soul. Thank you for sharing!


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billybuc 2 years ago from Olympia, WA

Beautifully sad....or sadly beautiful...whichever, very, very well done, John.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks kidscrafts,

All war is a travesty, are rarely won, and very rarely improves anyones lives. My pleasure to share.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Bill, either of those terms will do.


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Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

This is beautiful and sad, and sometimes the sadness is what brings the beauty I suppose. Just like love, always a happiness that hurts.

Hope you checked out my new 'hug'. Up and sharing.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for your kind comments and share once again Jackie. I'm off to check your new 'hug' right now. Cheers.


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Sunny River 2 years ago from A Place Without A Name which resides somewhere between Fantasy and Belief, just north of Reality

Oh my! This nearly brought me to tears! So beautiful and so so powerful. What an amazing poem. :)


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you so much Sunny, you can take a bow for the inspiration your selected phrases provided. Thanks for you Poem challenges.


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anglnwu 2 years ago

Lovely, poignant and evocative. Enjoyed it tremendously.


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jhamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

What an incredible story, powerfull and enjoyable to read. Jamie


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FlourishAnyway 2 years ago from USA

Very touching. War always exacts a toll on the innocent.


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wetnosedogs 2 years ago from Alabama

Enjoyed this sad and yet beautiful poem.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you anglnwu, Jamie and Flourish for reading and leaving your kind comments. I seem to have a sad theme going on in my recent poetry for some reason. I'll snap out of it soon.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Glad you enjoyed wetnosedogs. Thanks for the kind comment.


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AliciaC 2 years ago from British Columbia, Canada

This is a sad and dramatic poem about a very tragic event. Thank you for sharing it, Jodah.


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Frank Atanacio 2 years ago from Shelton

Jodah, no pun intended but this blew me away voted awesome!!!!!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hi Alicia, My pleasure to share. I'm glad you enjoyed it, well, if enjoyed is the right word. Thanks for the kind comment.

Good to see you Frank, thanks for the awesome vote....pity they don't have 'blown away' as one of the choices.


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Anna Haven 2 years ago from Scotland

Powerful writing. Your highlighted the horror and the true cost of war and done it very skillfully.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you for reading and your kind words Anna. I detest war and all that goes with it. Glad I got the point across successfully.


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drbj 2 years ago from south Florida

This was a very skillful response, Jodah, to Sunny's challenge. Well done and a Bravo! to boot.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks drbj, Wow a bravo! I am honored, that's like a 'touchdown'. Sunny's suggested phrases really inspired some good poetry from everyone. I am impressed with this one myself.


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Eric Flynn 2 years ago from Providence, Rhode Island

"Weak tattoo of rain" .... nice, up

EWF


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Eric, always great to get your comments.


Rayne123 2 years ago

This is a great amazing poem, the way you have put it together.

Great work

Laurie


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks Laurie, you are too kind. I was really inspired to right this.


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teaches12345 2 years ago

I was moved by your words and connected photos. A sad part of history that I hope we never see repeated.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

I'm glad my words have the ability to move people teaches. To me that denotes that my poetry is successful, not money generated, our awards. I have read some books of published poetry that are very disappointing and don't touch me at all. I too hope this type of thing remains a part of history and is never repeated.


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wayne barrett 2 years ago from Clearwater Florida

Jodah, very powerful piece. This threat is the lurking monster that could end us all.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Wayne, I agree it is a sleeping monster. Countries like to have nuclear weapons as their security blanket against attack, but we just have to hope it's never again released.


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Eiddwen 2 years ago from Wales

Wow how beautiful Jodah and shows off your wonderful talent for sure. Here's to wishing you a great day and to so many more hubs for us both to share on here.

Eddy.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Eddy, once again thanks for your kind comments. Hub Pages is such a wonderful community and provides such a wealth of information, talent, and variety of reading material.


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loveofnight 2 years ago from Baltimore, Maryland

i give you three thumbs up on this one, useful, interesting as well as beautiful. i still believe that it was a time in history that should not have happened.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you loveofnight, for your generous comments. I totally agree. I hope it never happens again.


Rayne123 2 years ago

You did such an amazing job and sunnys idea brilliant

I am trying it however I have no pc right now

Christmas present lol

Great work of art

Blessings

Laurie


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Hi Laurie, was wondering why you hadn't been overly active. Thanks for taking the time to check this poem out and for your generous comments. Hope you do get a nice new computer for Christmas.


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Richawriter 2 years ago from On Top of the World

Hey Jodah,

Sorry if I gave you the wrong impression on that thread recently. It's hard to Articulate how I feel when I'm not actually there with the people I'm talking to and therefore I miss things, sometimes.

The complaining gets to me sometimes though, that's all and I'm forced to say something. It's rarely given notice amongst the other hundred opinions though hahaha.

Anyway. Your poem is beautiful. Reminds me of the poems I used to write years ago in my twenties. Lots of rhyme and heartfelt sentiment that reveals your deeper sensitive nature. Rhyme seems to be a dying art but I'm glad you are keeping it well and truly alive and doing a good job to boot.

The bomb was a sad part of history and we should have learned from it - but we haven't - I think. If we had, we might not be killing each other anymore, or perhaps we learned in a smaller way.

Thanks and Happy New Year.

Rich


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading Rich, and your generous comment. Don't apologise for your comments in the forum, there is too much complaining lately and if people don't like it here they are free to leave. I did reply to your comment there. I write free verse too, but rhyme will always be my first love and I use it mostly. Happy New Year to you.


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CMHypno 2 years ago from Other Side of the Sun

Beautiful poem Jodah about a very sad subject. If we are going to take anything positive from the dropping of the atomic bombs on Japan it is that it brought the horrors of nuclear war into world consciousness and maybe restrained some fingers on the button in the ensuing years.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for visiting CMHypno and your kind comment. Yes we should always look for any positives from these disasters/attrocities, and you are right. It has probably served to make the world more tentative to push the button and have it happen again.


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Jackie Lynnley 2 years ago from The Beautiful South

Very good John. Stark and heartfelt. I truly like it. An awesome for you too.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for visiting...and the awesome vote


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Jo_Goldsmith11 2 years ago

This is just so beautiful! It brought tears to my eyes and a twinge of pain for those who were killed. Awesome work! So proud and honored to know you. Shared, tweeted and Up into the heavens with the angels! :-)

Blessings Mr. Poet. :-)


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jhamann 2 years ago from Reno NV

What a story to enlighten. Great work Jodah. Jamie


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Well thank you for such a wonderful comment Jo. They were the very emotions I was aiming for with this poem. I am also honoured to know you and all you do for this community. Thanks also for the share, vote up and tweet. Blessings back.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading and your encouraging words Jamie. Cheers.


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Shyron E Shenko 2 years ago

John, Congratulations, oh my gosh, it was as if I were there. Your poems are always so beautiful it is so awesome.

Voted thumbs up, ABI, and shared.

Shyron


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Shyron, thank you so much. I am glad that you enjoyed this poem and my poetry in general. Thank you for the vote up and share.


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wordswithlove 2 years ago from Pennsylvania, USA

Mankind's stupidity is the cause of all wars - I don't believe there is any other explanation, regardless of which side and for what purpose. Your poem is poignantly expressive of the ravages of this insanity of man - thank you.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

When will we ever learn from our past mistakes? Wars serve no good purpose and people end up dead or impoverished. Thanks for reading wordswithlove.


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Aneegma 2 years ago

Oh this made me cry so much!! My grandpa was a causality of Hiroshima. He was 13 years old when he lost his entire family on that fateful day in August. He was Japanese and he met my grandma when he moved to Osaka. My grandma was a a young American student studying Medicine in Osaka. He died when I was just four years old due to skin cancer from the toxins of the bomb. I never got to know him but Nana did tell us loads of harrowing stories of that day. Just a reminder of what a waste war really is.

Thanks for reminding us that life is precious and love conquerors all. Another brilliant poem, keep 'em coming!


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thank you Aneegma. Sorry your grandpa had to experience the horrors of the Hiroshima bombing. I can see why this poem would make you cry, being so close to home for you. I appreciate you reading and your wonderful comment. Maybe you need to read one of my more humorous poems to cheer yourself up.


nsidd 2 years ago

Amazing poem sir Jodah, really moving. I can only imagine the horrors of the day through books of history, inspired this little bit out of me. I hope it's not too bad. first try at poetry.

"Little Boy devoured a 150,000 souls,

Whilst Fat Man burned 80,000 more,

All while history wrote; the most savage chapter time has told,

The day Heroes wore the Devil's coat,

... .. ....,

Truth be told, Truth be told,

Only Judgement Day can punish those responsible."


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading nsidd and your kind comment.

Your contribution is quite amazing, 'little boy' and 'fat man' referring to the two bombs at Hiroshima and Nagasaki. Yes, the hero USA, having to do something so evil to end the war. Great first attempt at poetry, please don't let it be your last.


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IndependentMind 2 years ago

Great poem. Beautifully written about the real possibility of global destruction.

It is said that rich men start wars, never fight in them, and their childish behavior destroys millions of lives.

So true today, and throughout our global history. And not likely to change any in the near future.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for the kind words and insightful comment Independent Mind. If there are wars to be fought let the rich men fill the front lines. They have the most to gain and lose. If that was the case I am sure there would be no more war.


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textandink 2 years ago from Manila

Scary if something like this happens again. The poem should remind us all that no one wins in a war like this--world explodes. To think that it was just one atom bomb..


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

That's all it takes textandink. It's why it is such a power play for countries to have nuclear capabilities. thanks for reading and your comment.


nsidd 2 years ago

I wish the world were be united under One Just Rule, one nation, one humanity. We are after all, all humans of flesh, blood and bones.


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Trisha Roberts 2 years ago from Rensselaer, New York

Such a sad but beautiful poem. I remember learning about Hiroshima back in middle school and watching a movie based on it. Even then it has always touched my heart. If only we could have world peace, with no fear shal be, but to much anger takes on this world politically. Beautiful poem with many emotions.


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Jodah 2 years ago from Queensland Australia Author

Thanks for reading Trisha and for your kind concerned comment.

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