Whisper: A Poem About Living Life To The Fullest

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I wrote this poem as a teenager and although I have matured quite a bit since writing it I still very much identify with it. Written more as a song it feels a little more blunt than I am these days. I wrote it in a time while experiencing a lot of trauma and I think that a little of the darkness shows through. But the general message however is that no matter what we should all live every moment to the fullest, to never miss a chance with someone you love and overall make the life you've been given count, don't waste it. I can't think of a better message to give as we enter another year.


WHISPER


The time attempt

Attempt the time

Covet yours

Covet mine

Temporal person in the clock

Hear you moving, hear you knock

Exit the womb, enter your grave

All in between, how you behave

Just a whisper in the dark

That is all, all we are


If you want me, know you got me

Time will run out, do you hear me

Now or never, all we could be

Come escape and come be with me

We'll be happy, blackened never

World sadness lost forever

All of heaven to discover

In the embrace of eachother


The now event

Invent the now

Tell me soon

Tell me how

Bleeding timepiece counting down

Hear the ticking, hear the sound

Extract your mind, know you gave

Know you have it, power to save

Just a flicker in the mist

Were not meant, meant to exist


If you want me, know you got me

Time will run out, do you hear me

Now or never, all we could be

Come escape and come be with me

We'll be happy, blackened never

World sadness lost forever

All of heaven to discover

In the embrace of eachother


Time yourself to know your worth

You have done it since your birth

Just didn't know it

Just didn't know it

Just a flicker in the mist

Just a whisper in the dark

All our reasons to exist

Yes, this is all we are


If you want me, know you got me

Time will run out, do you hear me

Now or never, all we could be

Come escape and come be with me

We'll be happy, blackened never

World sadness lost forever

All of heaven to discover

In the embrace of eachother


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Dee42 4 years ago from Beautiful Arkansas

Dang! I loved that. I hope I don't offend you, but it brought to mind of a new Depeche Mode song. I simply ADORE them. Happy New Year Y'all!!!


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

Dee42 - no worries, I haven't heard a lot of Depeche Mode songs but I have heard a lot of artists that list them as their influences so I guess I'm in good company. Thanks.


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

Great poem with so many feelings. Voted up and awesome.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

writer20 - yes back in those times it was a real whirlpool of emotions for me. Thanks for the vote up, I appreciate, Happy New year!


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

This is so good.. DOWN RIGHT GOOD... it sounds like it could be a 70's song.. You need to put it to music..

I voted up and awesome

Have a wonderful and happy safe new year.

debbie


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phdast7 4 years ago from Atlanta, Georgia

Good poem. Lots of energy and emotion. The repeated stanzas does give it that "song to be sung" feel

Have a great new year.!


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AudreyHowitt 4 years ago from California

All of heaven to discover

In the embrace of eachother

I wonderful way to look at endings and beginnings--


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

Deborah Brooks - Well maybe I could put it to music at some point I guess we'll see. Thanks for the vote of confidence :) Happy New Year to you as well!


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David Legg 7 4 years ago from Trout Paradise, Colorado

Outstanding! It is a very thought provoking piece of work, and has fantastic rhythmic quality. I agree on the feeling that these could be great song lyrics.

Thank you!

David


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

phdast7 - yes originally I wrote a lot of poetry and was heavily influenced by music so this one came to me more as a song. Thanks for commenting :)


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

AudreyHowitt - in retrospect I guess your right it has that feel, a first embrace or a Romeo & Juliet ending it really could be either :)


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Sky9106 4 years ago from A beautiful place on earth.

Very good extremely easy flow , the way to go. Since it's my first I keep a very nice look on this , it's very nice.

Thanks for sharing terrek

Bless.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

David Legg 7 - thanks, did my best back then, reading this again brings back quite a few memories.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

Sky9106 - no problem, I enjoy sharing, it's a small snapshot of my teenage years :)


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raciniwa 4 years ago from Naga City, Cebu

deep seated poem...full of emotions...i've written a similar title but the theme is different...


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Senoritaa 4 years ago

Strong message in a brilliant flow of words. The time we are given is precious, and to have realized this during your teenage years, you are truly gifted!


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

raciniwa - the emotions poured out when I wrote during those trying times. Sometimes it was a good thing to channel what I felt and focus it into something like a poem, a story, song lyrics, later when I had a guitar and eventually a computer I did right complete songs. But it's all part of the journey I suppose.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

Senoritaa - I've been told I have an old soul, not sure if that is true but suppose anything is possible. Thanks for ocmmenting and Happy New Year!


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Kris Heeter 4 years ago from Indiana

Very nice. I usually don't read poems much but this one really caught my eye - I love it:)


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cherylone 4 years ago from Connecticut

This is beautiful and I agree that you should put it to music. I voted it up and beautiful. Thanks for sharing it with us. :)


jenubouka 4 years ago

Isn't it amazing even in our younger years we are able to perceive complex emotions. This poem proves how a talented writer never fades with age.


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Genna East 4 years ago from Massachusetts, USA

To write such a lyrical poem as a teenager about a loved one is more than impressive. The flow is candid, honest, poignant, and timeless. Each day as a miraculous gift, and you have movingly captured this gift in your words. Best wishes for a Happy New Year.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

Kris Heeter - glad the poem caught your eye. Hope you liked it, it's the first poem I have added to hubpages maybe I'll do more in the future.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

cherylone - thanks for the vote up and beautiful, maybe sometime in the future when I have time I will explore the idea of making it a song :)


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Gypsy Rose Lee 4 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Great poem. Really liked it. So meaningful. Would make a nice song.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

jenubouka - I think when I had gone from being a child to my teenage years I went from being very sheltered to experiencing complex emotions very quickly. I had a difficult time handling them and felt everything in extreme, thus I began channeling a lot of thoughts and feelings into stories, poetry, music, they all became outlets for release. I admit though some of my stories, poetry and music were not all good but at the time it was really about getting it out. In retrospect I find it interesting going back and looking at what I had done, like this piece.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

Genna East - Thank you for your kind comments, thought it would be appropriate for this time of the season as we enter another year, Happy New Year to you as well.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

Gypsy Rose Lee - did my best for the time, maybe it will be a song eventually :) thanks for the comment! Happy New Year!


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always exploring 4 years ago from Southern Illinois

I really liked this..I could feel the uncertainty in your young thoughts..Thank you...


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time2rite 4 years ago from Navarre, Fl, USA

Terrektwo, this is an awesome poem and it would indeed make one heckuva song! You were a great writer even as a teen. Thank you for sharing this with us.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

always exploring - was a trying time for sure, I fumbled my way through my teenage years. But through those years a lot of creativity was generated. Thanks for reading :)


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

time2rite - I'm glad to share it and appreciate all the feedback. Thanks a bunch :)


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Ivona Poyntz 4 years ago from UK

Teenage years are meant to be filled with angst and despair: its a time when major neural networkd are being formed in the brain. Many teenagers suffer, I think. Your poem is ful of youthful vifour: now or never! It reminds me to recapture that entrepenurial spirit which I've lost over the years and come off the fence. Great poem.


Sueswan 4 years ago

"Exit the womb, enter your grave

All in between, how you behave"

Powerful words that show the impact of how quickly life goes by so make the best of it.

I think it would make an awesome song.

Voted up and away!


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

Ivona Poyntz - thank you, I'm glad it inspired you :)


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jandee 4 years ago from Liverpool.U.K

Enjoyed,thanks


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

jandee - When I rediscovered this one in my old poems I kew I had to put it up :)


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jandee 4 years ago from Liverpool.U.K

wonder if it would fit into the style of 'Oasis'


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

jandee - not too cure I guess I'll have to think on it!


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suzanno 4 years ago from kerala, India

terrektwo,

extremely meaningful poem,

i really loved it.


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terrektwo 4 years ago from North America Author

Thanks a lot, glad you did :)

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