Whisper From The Grave

If I am no longer of this world,

you are whats left of me.

My child and my poetry,

you are both the best of me.

My only wish is for you to flourish

and fulfill my legacy.


Only then,

can I come back to life

and rewrite my destiny....






Copyright © 2011 Daunt'e Loper


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tnderhrt23 5 years ago

Wow! Daunte, this gave me chills! Most amazing, powerful poem!


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thanks tnderhrt


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Hindol Adhya 5 years ago from Kolkata, India

Excellent! Two thumbs up.


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Joy56 5 years ago

I like this a lot, simple but extremely well written, and full of meaning......


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thanks Joy and Hindol


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Stan Fletcher 5 years ago from Nashville, TN

Really good stuff. Great painting too.


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

I am truly touched and awestruck. A wonderful expression of feeling and beautifully illustrated, Daunte.


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thank you Stan and Nellieanna


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Nellieanna 5 years ago from TEXAS

:-) . . .


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poetvix 5 years ago from Gone from Texas but still in the south. Surrounded by God's country.

Powerfully beautiful.


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thanks poetvix


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Dark Inamorato 5 years ago from Pennsylvania

Loved it. Good work!


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Plarson 5 years ago from Alabama

Wow!! My first impression was of a father speaking, then I thought well maybe it's a religious write, then I realized it is both! Thank you for this inspirational write. I can't speak for the rest, but for me it was a gentle reminder of things to come. -Paul


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Fossillady 5 years ago from Saugatuck Michigan

My impression is our Father watching over his children from the heavens hoping to discover who she/he really is. Beautiful and powerful in a few short versus.


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thank you all for the positive feedback. I have seen too many times, people pass on with nothing to show for the time spent here on earth. I will not make that same mistake. If all I ever own is a pen, i'll make it work for me. We do the best we can with what we have.


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Lakshmi Murukesh 5 years ago from Kollam

Daunte that whisper touched me deep in somewhere...!!


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ShakethaM07 5 years ago from Washington County, Georgia

I love this with a passion! It really touched me. Short but sweet. Voted up sweetie.


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thanks Lakshmi and Shaketha


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California

Daunte, This was Great with a capital G! Thanks for sharing short but hit the spot and I received the message behind it!!

smiels :)

bella


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thank you Bella, it was originally supposed to be a message to my daughter but I ended up putting it in poetic form.


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epigramman 5 years ago

...well Daunte thanks very much for the 'cool' comment - and coming from an esteemed and noble poet such as yourself that is quite a honor indeed!

I absolutely love your writing and your profile introduction says it all so eloquently - I too, prefer to write outside the poetic box, so to speak, and consider myself somewhat of an anti-poet - lol lol lol - and one who tries to deconstruct and subvert the genre - so in your profile introduction I think I know where you're coming from my friend.

By the way what kind of music do you like?

Music, and the inspiration from it always is the driving force behind my writing ....


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thanks epigramman, I'm glad someone understands:) I used to be a hip hop head when I was about 12 years old. Thats when I really learned how to form a rhyme. But nowadays, I can get into any type of music. I listen for the instruments that are being used. Nothing inspires me more than the sound of silence though.


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epigramman 5 years ago

..well it sounds like you many have an affinity for the music of Jazz ....and yes I too believe in the yin and yang of sound - I live out here by the Lake in Ontario Canada - Lake Erie - so I can play my music extremely loud - lol - but as I walk out - 100 feet towards the lake - I can hear nothing but silence - what a lovely choice don't you think - and as my mum would say - listen, you can hear the silence!!!


Reader55 5 years ago

Great poem, and so true! short sweet and powerful.Look forward to reading more of your work, take care.


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thank you Reader55


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Beberlee 5 years ago from Philadelphia

Love this poem it's so sweet..


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thanks Beberlee:)


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4elements 5 years ago

this was very inpirational. It is a feel good read, blessings, peace, love, and light


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thanks 4elements


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Norma Budden 5 years ago from Nunavut, Canada

Daunte, this poem reached chords inside of me which brought tears to my eyes. My impression was of a man who was considering the possibility of saying good-bye to the world, with his child and writings being his lasting imprints upon the world. You have every reason to stick around; believe that each and every day because I believe I made an accurate - but sad - assessment here.


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Daunte Loper 5 years ago from Detroit Michigan Author

Thank you for your caring words Norma.


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Norma Budden 5 years ago from Nunavut, Canada

What is it they say about a friend who is there when needed? Oh, yeah! The person is a friend, indeed. That's me.

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