Who's Loss Yours or Mine

A smile I carried like a little girl

I sat and gave my hair a twirl

I laughed and giggled at the things you spoke

I never took our friendship as a joke


You think I came to play a game

You say I didn’t feel the same

How would you know if you only saw…

What you wanted and made it your call


I called you my friend and said it with pride

But you took it away and sadly I cried

I didn’t think your presence had that much

Control over my feelings with such


Great devotion we shared with one

I even knew your daughter and son

A bond a friendship I admired with all

But you sat there and made it you call


I can only try to be what I know to be

I hope one day you will understand me

With your feelings I never did gamble

But this right here I am gonna ramble


Who’s loss will it be yours or mine

When you didn’t know how to draw the line

You set your reasons without looking past

But who is too come in losing or last


bellawritter23(copyright)2011


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QudsiaP1 5 years ago

Beautifully expressed with the heart reading the mind; speaking through the lip and the hand engraving it in ink.


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Qud, Thank you very much its just what I felt nothing thought through I just wrote and this is wat transpired out of it...

bella


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QudsiaP1 5 years ago

Then you are doing it right bel. ;)


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tnderhrt23 5 years ago

I felt the emotion and hurt behind the words, bella! An emotional, heart-felt, flowing piece! Great job, as always!


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Thanks again!!

Tnder, Thank you :) A bit yes hurt I was. But its their loss I tried to gain but can't force a person to see the things the way you do!!

bella


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vietnamvet68 5 years ago from New York State

a very emotional and beautiful write Bella, very nicely done

God Bless


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Enigmatic Me 5 years ago from East Coast Canada

Sadly the friendships of yore pass with the seepage of time, You were able to etch this with reason and rhyme.

I am in awe of the emotion I feel, you knocked me to the floor, I cannot but kneel.

Thanks bella... beautifully written.


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Diana Lee 5 years ago from Potter County, Pa.

Voted up! Great poem.


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SubRon7 5 years ago from eastern North Dakota

Good poem, Bella, good job!


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Hyphenbird 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

The betrayal and loss of a friend is one of the most painful things that can ever happen. Men come and go. My friends are carefully chosen and are supposed to be with me till the end.


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Cardisa 5 years ago from Jamaica

Sometime we don't know how important the next person is to us, we often take them for granted and we don't even know how much our actions hurt them. I have been on the receiving end of that friendship were they don't even seem to care how I feel.


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Viet, Thank you very much. I just went along with what my heart wanted to say no effort placed my fingers just tapped the keyboard.

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Enig, Thank you very kindly. Just another one of my emotions pouring out onto the screen to be read by others. thanks again.

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Donna, Thanks a mil. I appreciate the visit.

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Sub, Thanks Sir, I appreciate the visit and you stopping by to read my feelings.

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Hyph, He wanted more I couldnt offer or extend myself to his needs. I feel that our friendship has much more roots and I am afraid of losing the roots if we become an item some people are just to be left as what they are and nothing more. I appreciate it dearly,

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Car, Losing a friend over something very small and for selfish reasons is very difficult I have been on both ends of it and either side is no fun. Thanks for stopping by Mz. I appreciate it!

bella


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Nikkij504gurl 5 years ago from Louisiana

girl its his loss you know this!


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Sunshine625 5 years ago from Orlando, FL

Always the others loss....nice poem :))


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always exploring 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

Loved it Bella. Losing a friend is so sad. I'm listening to Janis, she had so much soul. Miss her. Thank's


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bountyhunter_ga 5 years ago from Dwasonville,Ga

Hello sweetie, like you, I write things about myself I feel are important

for someone new is bound to follow the same trail and maybe I can lessen the blow of reality if they just listen. Keep writing from the heart,it will never let you down for there is always a reason for every heartbreak.


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MysteriousOne 5 years ago

Very heart-felt write,Bella. Pushed all the buttons!

Hope you are well.


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tumblintumblweed 5 years ago

Very emotional and heart-felt write,Bella..Great job!Voted up!


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Nikki, Exactly how I felt after his loss which he now realizes....

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

sunshine, I believe that as well. I try my best to be nothing but a friend a friendship is well worth the fight but I can only fight so much. Thank you!!

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Always, A loss is always hard any type of loss I believe thanks for reading as always I need to get back to reading and writing my head aches are cting up and cannot seem to find my muse but I promise I will be by to read and write....

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

Bounty, Writing about your own experiences is so much more vivid and hard core because you are writing based off of what you felt and have gone through. I thank you for the visit.

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

mysterious,

thank you it made me cry that I had to go through another loss but it is what it is.

bella


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bellawritter23 5 years ago from California Author

tumblin,

thank you very kindly I appreciate it very much.

bella


JadedLove 5 years ago

Thank you for your inspiring words of emotion. This one is for you.

The touch we would share in the waters,

making this youth feel like heaven.

Still my dreams haunt my memories,

of how our last goodbye was goodbye.

In my heart I now recall,

the times we had spent as friends.

Past what I would ever admit,

in my painful heart I cry.

Do you remember the tears,

as you walked away I knew broken.

The sun never shinning again,

but now I see the light.

To be strong in where I was weak,

making me who I am inside.

Blackness covers my shadows,

where your light used to be so divine.

Take from me this desire,

to remember the days when we played.

Alone I am not but I feel it,

loved am I yet I am so cold.

Your heart was so beautifully unique,

in a way only my eyes could know.

Blessings have come and they go,

with each breath I see more than before.

Beauty without measure your soul,

Loved past the days when we played.

Johnny Love


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bountyhunter_ga 5 years ago from Dwasonville,Ga

Thanks kid,I feel as if we had been friends somewhere in the past and lost. Life is forgiven so times exspecially when we need it the most, just ask.

Have a wonderfull day my friend


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Robin Mancini 5 years ago from South Jersey/Philadelphia PA

Love it!

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