Whose Thoughts Am I Hearing?

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Which Viewpoint You Will Use

It all depends on your viewpoint. All these interpretations are possible and equally valid. See how each character can manipulate our emotions in their favor when we see events through their eyes. For this reason, it is inevitable that the reader will always be on the side of the main character, so think carefully about who the protagonist of your story is going to be.

Are you going to put yourself in the shoes of the main character, effectively casting yourself in the lead role? Or are you going to stay one stage removed, telling the story from the standpoint of a detached narrator?

There are pros and cons to both approaches and the decision whether to write in the first person - I did this, I did that or in third person - he did this, he did that is important. It sets the tone of a story and helps readers decide how closely they want to identify with the main character.

Developing a voice as a writer

First Person Viewpoint

Most people feel happier writing in the first person. They find it easier to show the personality of the main character if they inhabit his body. The moment you use the word 'I' you have made the reader imagine himself as the hero.

It saves a lot of descriptive writing and carefully crafted characterization. The barriers come down instantly. We know what makes him tick. Unless he is an out-and-out cad - readers will find something to like or forgive in his personality. In other words, in first person viewpoint - the narrator is the main character in the heart of the story describing events happening to him.

Third Person Viewpoint

As a detached narrator, you are able to distance yourself from the actions of your characters. You can make them as mean and nasty as you like, safe in the knowledge that no-one will believe that is how you think or behave in real life.

You can tell the reader what a character thinks of himself, then contrast this with what the world thinks of him. This can be a very effective comic device. You can enter the mind of any character - giving us the potential to see a story from any viewpoint. In other words, in third person, the narrator is outside the story, describing events from above.

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Disadvantages of first person viewpoint

First person viewpoint is often perfectly acceptable to tell a story but there is a danger that you will fall unwittingly into one of several traps like:

  • The biggest danger is the likelihood that you would not actually write from the character's viewpoint at all but merely put yourself 'the real-life writer' into the action.
  • You are trapped inside the body of one person. The reader can only know what that character knows and go where that character goes. This can be extremely limiting.
  • You are saddled with that character's views and prejudices. You may feel uncomfortable looking at the world through one blinkered pair of eyes. In reality, the main character may be rude, arrogant and hateful.
  • You may find that you need to continue the action beyond the point at which the hero dies. If you are inside the main character, it is just not possible to hang around to watch without destroying the perspective. You are him. Once he is dead, so are you.
  • You can cause confusion and irritation by writing the story from the 'I' viewpoint but not making it clear whether the hero is a man or a woman.

Disadvantages of third person viewpoint

  • In third person viewpoint - you may find it harder to get into the mind of the main character.
  • You may be unsure through which character's eyes to tell the story.
  • It may be more difficult to make an unsavory character palatable to the reader.

Whichever method you finally settle on, avoid mixing third person and first person in the same story. It is very irritating for your readers.

Of course, there is a way on switching viewpoints. However, do not fall into trap of rushing from one character's mind to another, bouncing back and forth like a tennis ball. It confuses the reader - especially if you do not adequately signpost these switches in perspective and leave the reader wondering: whose eyes am I seeing this through now? Whose thought am I hearing?

If you switch viewpoint, make it obvious to the reader. Leave a line of white space and start a new scene. Make it clear in the opening sentence of the new segment just whose eyes you are now looking through.

Which viewpoint will you use to tell your story?

  • First person - the narrator is the main character
  • Third person - the narrator is outside the story
  • Multiple viewpoints - rushing from one character's mind to another like a tennis ball.
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Faith Reaper 4 years ago from southern USA

Very insightful hub. Since I am a non-fiction writer who writes about my very ownexperiences in this life, I use the first person the most. But if I ever decide to write otherwise, the third person aspect, I will be mindful to not switch from first to third - good point. Great hub. Very interesting. In His Love, Faith Reaper


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writer20 4 years ago from Southern Nevada

I write children's stories in the third person but I do have an adult story in the first person.

Voted up and awesome, Joyce.


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carlossalinas 4 years ago from San Antonio, T.X.

I sometimes alternate between the 1st and 3rd person, so I get the max effect from each. It gives the story a personal touch but also informs the reader of other information. GREAT hub!


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paul pruel 4 years ago from Philippines and Saudi Arabia Author

@ Faith Reaper - I am flattered with your comment. Thank you so much. Yes. I agree with you that to tell the story from our own experiences is more effective if we will tell them in first person viewpoint.


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paul pruel 4 years ago from Philippines and Saudi Arabia Author

I am flattered with your comment friend Faith reaper. Thank you so much. Yes. I agree with you that to tell the story from our own experiences is more effective if we will tell them in first person viewpoint.


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paul pruel 4 years ago from Philippines and Saudi Arabia Author

Joyce my friend - thank you so much for voting this hub up and for appreciating it. Noted.


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paul pruel 4 years ago from Philippines and Saudi Arabia Author

@dude Carlos - thank your visit and the kind words. I really appreciate it. See you around again.

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