Write Me a Poem, Sister

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If I could take the scars brother

From your heart 

Should I?

How long ago did you know 

How much longer will you stay

If I could give you back the ten years

You lost treading in a loveless stream

A victim of the harsh current you helped create

If I could go back and tell her to be true 

Then turn and say the same to you  

Should I ?

But these are your lessons to learn 

Not mine

And who would you be today without them

Lessons of love and loss and forgiveness

Save you brother from them

Should I?

If I could take you back to that place 

Where you both had hope and vision

A place where you shared love

Should I?

And even find it

Could I?


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dohn121 7 years ago from Hudson Valley, New York

God! This is stuff of legend:

How much longer will you stay

If I could give you back the ten years

You lost treading in a loveless stream

A victim of the harsh current you helped create

Impossible as it seems, you are getting BETTER...I'd buy you a drink if I could...Or a book deal! Wonderful.


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ThunderCattle 7 years ago from WESTERN NE.

DEAR RANDY,

Another wonderful and touching poem from a very beautiful and talented woman who I admire very much... Thank you again love and keep it up... Please drop me an email soon , I would love to get to know you thru a letter.... love Tony


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Wow dohn, sweet comment. I'll take the book deal? O.K., or a citrus martini.


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

ThunderCattle, I think you have me confused with the girl "down under". I am not Blondepoet :) Although I've mud-wrestled her on occasion.


ralwus 7 years ago

Ahh if only we could help a brother in that way, or a son, daughter or a friend. Good stuff dear Randy. thanks


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you Ralwus for the dear comment. We can listen. I am afraid not much more though.


\Brenda Scully 7 years ago

nicely done


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks Brenda!


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Enigmatic Me 7 years ago from East Coast Canada

Stitched by time and experience your writing has flawless seams. The polished product is an awe inspiring one.


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Wow Enigmatic what a lovely comment to wake to! Thanks for reading me.


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Jess Killmenow 7 years ago from Nowheresville, Eastern United States

WOW. First read so powerful. Great poem, Randy. Going to read it again now.


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Glad you liked it Jess, not sure my brother did.


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Enigmatic Me 7 years ago from East Coast Canada

Well truth is a bitter pill to swallow...sometimes.


Am I dead, yet? 7 years ago

Randy,

This poem was so real for me. Well done. I enjoyed reading this one so much. If only we all could go back and intervene and met with common sense, before heading out on the ever painful path of adoration. Bravo, Randy.


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Oh but our lessons are in the painful parts. And really adoration is worth a little pain, no? Thanks for your comment AIDY, as always, insightful.


gwennies pen 7 years ago

Great one! It is always easier to look back on where we came from as to where we are going. I enjoyed your spin on it!:)


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thanks Gwennie! My brother asked me to write him a poem and that's what he gets... my spin. :)


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prasetio30 7 years ago from malang-indonesia

very good. I am glad reading your poem.


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Randy Behavior 7 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

I happy you enjoyed it!


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MFB III 6 years ago from United States

Wouldn't it be something to be a re-matchmaker. to bring bitter hearts and souls to a compromise, a co-promise to give it another go, to mend the snapped heartstrings and listen to the sweet harmony strummed between two again, I would start with my mom and dad, who divorced after 29 and a 1/2 years, and I just wanted to scream why??? after so long together, why??? But she went on to die at sixty in a closet size room filled with my youngest sisters dirty clothes, and he just came off life support, but needs surgery. Life goes very fast and we take many detours that

hurt us in the long run...great Poem. ~~MFB III


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Randy Behavior 6 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Maybe marriage isn't supposed to be forever. Maybe society telling us it should makes people suffer for years. Maybe seeking joy should be our goal not seeking the approval of the church our peers or even our children.

Thanks. I'm glad your Dad is off life support!


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tobusiness 3 years ago from Bedfordshire, U.K

Everyone must take their own path in life, it is not about the destination it's all about the journey. This is powerful poetry.


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Randy Behavior 3 years ago from Near the Ocean Author

Thank you tobusiness; I'm delighted you think so.

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