Your Ecstasy

I wanted your ecstacy

So bad

I wanted it everyday

Everynight

You drew me near

I lost control

My love for you

Was suspended

By the strings

That held me

In mid air

It was a steady silence

That kept me there

Waiting

Waiting

Waiting

For you

Until I was driven insane

Couldn't take it any longer

The flesh of madness

Grounded up and beat up

Into nothing

Leaving me lost

In this dark hole

That you have left me in

My heart screamed out

NO

But you kept on

Until the madness was gone

Leaving me

Sinking into the ground

Farther and farther

Down

You left me to

Fend for myself

Take care of myself

Abandoned

In a prison

Behind these walls

I wait

For the sunshine

To come

It never does

The rain pours in

Covering me with

It's slick wetness

I hope it will wash away

What you left behind

Even the rain can't wash

Away the pain that you

Have dug deep inside me

An unborn child

That can never be born

I wanted you to take it away

You never came

You only stayed away

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Eiddwen 5 years ago from Wales

So powerful;so sad and what comes through is how talented you are.

This has to have that vote up;take care and enjoy your day.

Eddy.


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blaise25 5 years ago from close to you...

Oh you took my breath away with this one..

So sad but loved the emotion it composed..


stessily 5 years ago

Caroline, Powerful!


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carolinemd21 5 years ago from Close to Heaven Author

Eiddwen, Blaise25, & Stessily thank you for your kind words and compliments. I am glad this poem brought out some kind of emotions in you. And thank you for all your support.


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always exploring 5 years ago from Southern Illinois

Wow, This is deep..Very well rhymed, and yes, powerful...


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mckbirdbks 5 years ago from Emerald Wells, Just off the crossroads,Texas

This work had a nice pace to it. A bit of perhaps 'frantic', perhaps, an evasive notion of something so close, yet out of reach.


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Gypsy Rose Lee 5 years ago from Riga, Latvia

Awesome and wow it took my breath away.


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Astra Nomik 5 years ago from Edge of Reality and Known Space

Wow, this is breathtaking. You write superbly. It can be close and intimate, yet measured and firm. It is hard to show our pain in writing, and not all writers can do it. You have been through things and you express the so well. You should be published, I would buy your writing no problem.


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Cara.R 5 years ago from New York

Hi Caroline,

My first thought was powerful too and the noticed it was a common thought amongst the comments left her. I always enjoy your poetry whether it is dark, painful and sad, to happy and uplifting. It's all a work of art.


Sueswan 5 years ago

Hi Caroline

"My love for you

Was suspended

By the strings

That held me

In mid air"

Amazing imagery.

Beautifully done.

Voted up and away!

Have a good weekend.


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DREAM ON 5 years ago

You took me in a different direction and I could feel the deep sadness.Very moving.


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carolinemd21 5 years ago from Close to Heaven Author

@ Always thank you I am glad you liked it!

@ Mckbirdmks thank you for the great compliment!

@ GypsyRoseLee thank you always good to see you!

@ Astra thank you very much! That is one of the best compliments! You need to get published too. Always great to see you. :)

@ Cara thanks for stopping by. I am happy you liked it and what a great comment.

@ Sueswan thank you for stopping by and commenting.

@ Dream On thank you very much!


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Deborah Brooks 4 years ago from Brownsville,TX

Caroline, simply beautiful.. so sad and powerful.. I hope you know I am a big fan of yours..

Blessing to you

Debbie


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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven Author

Thank you Debbie. I am a fan of your passionate writing too.


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Senoritaa 4 years ago

Extremely vivid, and full of imagination. I loved how you repeated "Waiting" in three lines. It certainly defined the true meaning of waiting.


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Brett.Tesol 4 years ago from Thailand

Voted up and beautiful. I'm not a poetry fan, but this was very good and twist to an ending I was not expecting ... well written.

Thanks for SHARING.


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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven Author

@ Senoritaa thank you so much for stopping by and commenting!

@ Brett thank you for stopping by!


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A.A. Zavala 4 years ago from Texas

Very powerful, laced with agony and sorrow. Brilliant...


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carolinemd21 4 years ago from Close to Heaven Author

Thank you very much A.A.!

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