The Rocking R Ranch ~ Company's Comin'

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The smell of bacon and coffee lingered in the frosty morning air, the roosters were crowing, and pa was on his way to the house from milkin' the cow. He came in the door and the flavors were vivid, pancakes, bacon and eggs, He had worked up an appetite for it too.

Something was brewing, Ida was too busy and didn't even look up when he came in the door.

“Ida, your running like a chicken with its head cut off, Whats the hurry?”


"Well Pa, Gertrude is commin' over today".

"Oh,that canivin' Lakota friend of yours, Well Heck."

"Now pa, shes half white with a college education, and shes married to captain Bonnin, you know Ive been plannin this for months we’re going to work on Rebecka Ann's Weddin' Dress".

Pa didn't miss a beat, "How long did you say she was stayin?"

"Oh just a week."

"Well, long as it ain't two weeks like last time, Ill have plenty to do for that son of hers, wood to chop, and a pig that needs butcherin'".

"Ok pa, I just hope he don't ride off into town and get drunk.”

“Well ma, I was plannin' on going with him since' Gertrude is comin', we might as well stay out of you women folk's hair."

"Well hell fire and brimstone Pa!!”

"Aw Ma, now don't you worry that pretty little head of yours, we came here for the gold and you talked me into ranching, I'm not going astray on you now."

"Ok Pa, just look on him.“

Pa walked out the door he rubbed his fingers on the gold nugget in his pocket, smiled and reminisced about the last time he had been to the saloon, the tales of war and gold were swirling in his mind.

What will happen next in my western you decide!!

  • Gertrude comes to the ranch, and tells stories of her life?
  • Pa hits the saloon with Gertrude's son?
  • Pa goes gold mining?
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I Thought I would try my hand at a western,Since I grew up in Bonanza, Oregon. LOL feel free to give me some feed back on this. Thanks!

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mindyjgirl 5 years ago from Cottage Grove, Oregon Author

Thank you, Oh no, its neck and Neck on the poll...I might have to do both :)


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Hyphenbird 5 years ago from America-Broken But Still Beautiful

I like it and will await more!


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dahoglund 5 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

I think that reads a lot better.


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mindyjgirl 5 years ago from Cottage Grove, Oregon Author

Thank you :)will do!


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dahoglund 5 years ago from Wisconsin Rapids

I could follow the story fine. the only thing I would suggest is breaking up the print into more paragraphs. the dialog can be put in separate paragraphs. solid blocks of type make for slow reading.


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mindyjgirl 5 years ago from Cottage Grove, Oregon Author

Does it flow well? Could you follow the story ok?

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