Hi there, Ziad-bb!
Sure. I'm a little busy this weekend, but I'll get back to you on Monday or Tuesday, is that alright?
Just email me your text at email@example.com and I'll have a look at it.
It's always best to ask more than one person though, so you get different opinions (especially because I speak normally speak Dutch, instead of English, so I might not see all the mistakes).
As to making money, I don't really earn anything by writing. A lot of people here use AdSense so they get paid each time someone views or click the ads next to their hubs - but most of them only get a little bit of money that way - but I don't have an account so I don't really know how that works. Besides, you're a little young for that.
Maybe you should ask someone in the forum about how to make money, but if I were you, I'd just focus on the fun of writing ;)