The Darker Side of Dim

l didn't know my mind could fall ,

completely to the ground.

No one warned me that my brain

could fall without a sound.

My mind has fallen to the ground.


No one said that this would happen

without warning.

Even clouds above us darken

threaten.........then the storms´s in.

This storm came with no warning.


I didn't know the pain would be

a void inside my brain.

No one said...Ónce this happens,

you´ll never be the same´.

Someone´s emptied out my brain.


No one warned me of the risk

of enemies encroaching,

On my mind and get inside

I saw none of this approaching.

And now my mind is on the ground.


No one warned me that my brain

could subtly be extracted.

Intelligence removed

and ne´er be re.- enacted..

An empty brain upon the ground.


No one warned me about it all..........

No one spoke, or said I´d fall..

No one told me any of this.......

Because......

There´s no one there......

And...............

There´s no one here..............

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Minnetonka Twin 4 years ago from Minnesota

Beautifully sad poem and deeply moving. Thanks for writing such a deep piece of work and adding the pictures to go with it. I hit all buttons except funny.


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

ooooh you´ve made my day. Thank you so much...


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billybuc 4 years ago from Olympia, WA

Well that was indeed a trip to the dark side....and yet lovely and moving...thank you for allowing us to join you on this journey.


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acaetnna 4 years ago from Guildford

Awesome - your words are so intense.


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Hi billybuc. Thank you for your comment.

Thankfully , this was one of those times when my brain did the writing. it was not how I am feeling fight now.

Take care


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

acaetnna so nice to see your smiling face., always.

Thank you for you for the áwesome´

I haven´t written , quite like that fot a while. When I was in my teens it was the norm. Hee Hee.. I loved my teens.

People are strange said Bob Dylan

Take care.-


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savanahl 4 years ago

Very intense and sad. I love the way you ended it

There´s no one there......

And...............

There´s no one here..............

Very powerful.


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Thank you so much. It´s comments like yours that keep me writing.


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ImKarn23 4 years ago

DEEP! Empty...Aware...

Well done!


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Hi ImKarm23. Thank you very much. Your comment is just the reaction I was hoping for.


jenubouka 4 years ago

Wow, just wow. Your poetry/creative writing always stops me dead in my tracks for it's impounding truths. You have such a way with illuminating your words into a path of depth. We may not want to see, yet the reality is there, this is how we recognize we are still human. Yet at the same breathe, your poem creates a valley of darkness that we know we carry, we just would rather not see.


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Wow. Just wow to your comment also..!!!

Thank you so much . It´s a marvellous encouragement to me, to read comments like this.

Take care.


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Marcy Goodfleisch 4 years ago from Planet Earth

This really captures the sense of confusion and loss one feels when the mind takes on a life of its own. You always write such compelling things . . .

Voted up and awesome!


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Thnk you for such a beautiful compliment.

Good to see you on my page.


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DREAM ON 4 years ago

Very clever and thought provoking.Fascinating I must say.I am looking for a mind ?Has anyone seen one ? A used mind slightly damaged from a fall with a few scratches and a couple of dents.An extra mind will help me get a jump on my day.As always I love the way you write and share everything both far and near.


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

OOOH Dream On. Thank you I love the humour you find in everything. I was thinking of putting a disclaimer at the end of the poem ¨¨¨No one was decapitated in the making of this poem!´´´

Thanks for a great comment, and my E book came out today !!!!


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Movie Master 4 years ago from United Kingdom

Wow Dim, this quite took my breath away - amazing work and voted up.

Best wishes Lesley


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

wonderful to have the wordd ámazing´used.

Thank you so much.


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Alastar Packer 4 years ago from North Carolina

Nobody told there would be hubs like theses- nobody told me there would be hubs like these- strange hub indeed- most peculiar Dim!( and that's a compliment!)


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Hi Alastar,

Hee! Hee! No one was decapitated in the making of this hub........... It was unusual, I guess but I´m glad you say ´peculiar´ is a compliment.

Thanks for reading . Your continuous support means a lot to me.


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singlmomat52 4 years ago

Hi Dim!!!!!!! Sorry I haven't been on in a while, been busy working and not much time for computer. This poem reminds me of my best friends stroke 1 month ago!! She has lost her short term memory and can hardly see, her spirit is excellent and she has not lost her sense of humor. When I read your poem I thought I hope Dim did not have a stroke, that's how profound it is to me. Glad that you are okay in the physical at least and praying that your spirit is lifted and sun shines bright for you soon. Blessings!!! xxxxxxx


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

So good to see you again singlmomat52,

Hope all is well with you.

The poem comes from a time of serious depression but not how I´m feeling now.

Sorry to hear about your friend., but a sense of humour can cure far more than people realise.

I hope she will improve gradually. Blessings to you too and your friend.


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anndavis25 4 years ago from Clearwater, Fl.

All of us know what you said here. The highs and lows will stop you in your tracks, stop and re-evaluate.

All of us have dealt with the dark side.


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Scribenet 4 years ago from Ontario, Canada

Dim, you are so evocative! With a few words, you manage to bring the feeling alive... A rare talent! :-)


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Hi anndavis25, Thank you for the empathy. Someone told me once that the difference between sympathy and empathy is HUGE Empathy is when you FEEL for the other person because yo´ve been through something similar yourself. Appreciate the comment. Thank you.


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Hi Scribenet,

Thanks for the encouraging comment.

You flatter me. It will get you everwhere. Ha! Ha!


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MarieAlice 4 years ago from Peru

Liked your poem!!! keep going!!!


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Thank you, MarieAlice- pleased to meet you on hubpages


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moneycop 4 years ago from JABALPUR

it happens with all of us...i hope that dimness withh surely enlight some day or some moment


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Hello Moneycop. Cute name..!

Thanks for commenting. Sometimes it´s nice to know that everyone has dark times, but as they say in India......´´This too shall pass.´´


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Eiddwen 4 years ago from Wales

Thank you Dim for sharing this gem;I truly enjoyed it and here's to many more.

I wish you a wonderful day.

Eddy.


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

very kind of you to call it a gem.

Thank you for commenting so often.

It´s very encouraging.

Take care


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zzron 4 years ago from Houston, TX.

This was very creative and imaginative. Very thought-provoking. I imagine that everyone has had these kinds of thoughts from time to time. It just means your human.


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Great comment. Thank you. Most encouraging for any writer to be called creative and imaginative.

Have a good day yourself.


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Jools99 4 years ago from North-East UK

Brilliant poem! Nuf said.


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Dim Flaxenwick 4 years ago from Great Britain Author

Thank you Jools99, ´´Brilliant´´ is quite a powerful word to use. I appreciate your comment very much.


Dai 3 years ago

Like the photo of the sea


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Dim Flaxenwick 3 years ago from Great Britain Author

Thank you, Dai. The ocean can be so unpredictable, beautiful, yet powerful and often dangerous.

I love the sea.

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