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The fruits of passion

  1. ahorseback profile image46
    ahorsebackposted 4 years ago

    The strawberry leaves a trace of sweet juice
    flowing  across her lips

    And her lips alone are worthy of an
    long term love affair

    Will this passion die away though  as
    so many storms  have done before

    And isn't  a mans journey through  passion
    but another storm at sea

    I bend down to taste the sweetest lips
    and drown again in the storm of passion

  2. Gypsy Rose Lee profile image63
    Gypsy Rose Leeposted 4 years ago

    What can I say. Simply wonderful. I smell the strawberries, see the red lips and can imagine two people kissing in passion. I loved it. Nothing in this world can smell or taste so sweet as the fruits of passion.

    1. ahorseback profile image46
      ahorsebackposted 4 years ago in reply to this

      Thank you Gypsy Rose , I can always count on you !

  3. recommend1 profile image67
    recommend1posted 4 years ago

    If you are posting poetry here then I guess it is for criticism right ?

    This is not poetry of any kind, it is misspelled in places and has no rythm or metre, it is nothing except a long drawn out cliched sentence without value.

    1. cleaner3 profile image77
      cleaner3posted 4 years ago in reply to this

      recommended1,
      I must disagree with you, for you know not poetry. free verse  is exactly that free verse.  cliched sentences ?? ha,ha,ha . you cold hearted creature .
      ahorseback..
      I don't understand why you don't post your work of poetry on a hub ?

      1. ahorseback profile image46
        ahorsebackposted 4 years ago in reply to this

        Cleaner 3 , Thank you my friend ! That means alot !

    2. ahorseback profile image46
      ahorsebackposted 4 years ago in reply to this

      Recommendone ! I don't care if you don't like it at all. thats your problem ! Thanks for the critique !

  4. austinhealy profile image80
    austinhealyposted 4 years ago

    I'll never look at a strawberry the same way again smile

 
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