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Transitions: How Can I Get My Character From One Place to Another?

  1. Rhonda D Johnson profile image79
    Rhonda D Johnsonposted 3 years ago

    I am working on my second book but my first fiction novel.  It's flowing just lovely so far, but now I've run into a snag and want the advice of other writers to help me through.

    My character is a college student.  I had her in the classroom with this guy.  They managed to be the last ones to leave the classroom.  He's smitten with her and she thinks she may be smitten with him, but she doesn't want to be and she doesn't want him to see her getting smitten, so when he comes over to talk to her she tells him it's late and she has this book to read for a class tomorrow. He already knows that she is reading this book and it's about ten at night, so it's natural for her not to want to stay and chat.  She declines his offer to walk her to her car then dashes out the door.  Then I used a car scene to help her make the transition from thinking about the guy to thinking about the book she has to read.  The book is important to the plot.  Then I do the scene at home.  Now it's the next day and I'm not sure how to get her from home back to school.  I don't want another car scene.  The plot does not require anything momentous or relevant to happen between home and school.  At the same time, I don't want to use an abrupt "Meanwhile, back at the ranch" transition.

    This is not, per se, a romance novel.  It will be a kinda historical chick lit with a little romance thrown in.

    Can anyone suggest ways to handle this?

    1. snakeslane profile image81
      snakeslaneposted 3 years ago in reply to this

      How about switching to the active voice? She (don't know her name) is walking into class, or taking books out her  locker, or staring at the fountain in front of the school, (something sudden or beautiful) realizes as she's doing this that she doesn't remember the drive or the morning, or how she got there (because she's been thinking about him the whole time) and then she sees him. It's Ok to skip around and have her just there. No need to recount every step or every hour. Could be three days later, or a year, it's your story.

      1. bBerean profile image60
        bBereanposted 3 years ago in reply to this


        Readers have great imaginations and will follow along just fine.  Drilling down, wanting to give account for every detail such as how she got to school will bog you down in writing and will bore the reader.  Just let the story flow, then go back over to see if you need to add any more detail.  When you reread or have someone proof read, if something doesn't flow you can add it then.

      2. Rhonda D Johnson profile image79
        Rhonda D Johnsonposted 3 years ago in reply to this

        Hey!  That will work because she's been visited by spirits and had strange episodes in the past.  Possession is part of the theme.  So yes, this would be a great time to bring that in again.


    2. Hollie Thomas profile image61
      Hollie Thomasposted 3 years ago in reply to this

      What about; as the day's reading was slapped onto the desk...she was startled, she'd been lost in her thoughts of the previous evening....she's already at school. No need for the journey/transition.

  2. paradigmsearch profile image89
    paradigmsearchposted 3 years ago

    Time shift forward? New chapter.

    1. snakeslane profile image81
      snakeslaneposted 3 years ago in reply to this


  3. psycheskinner profile image80
    psycheskinnerposted 3 years ago

    Generally that is what a scene or chapter break is for.